Heh heh, the leg shaving thing... hmm... not my cup of tea. But the rest was great!
wow... that was good, i think it's a really cute couple.
I've just found this story after reading your HG/CW story... I think I wrote the same there, but I'll gladly say it again. This story deserves to be longer!!! You have a truly amazing way of writing untraditional pairings, and to make it soooo classy... Needless to say, I love it! more, please?
Awesome! I've read your other stories, but this review is for all of them. Now I beleive I have read them all.
really good
aaaaaaaaaawwwwww so sweet!
aaaaaaaaaawwwwww so sweet!
Although I did like your story very much I'm not exactly sure about your approach. Let me explain. I loved your details and the playful nature between Remus and Ginny. However I think you could have put more emphesis on the way they managed to goe together in the first place maybe more of a flashback or something. Still loved it though keep writing.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed and thank you for the review! Private Universe is a sequel to my story "Into Temptation", which is when they get together. Hope that helps some.
This is an awesome sequel to Into Temptation if it can be called that. This story is so beautifully written with juicy descriptions that just flow through the story. You've made a Ginny/Remus fan out of me. 10/10
Author's Response: Yay! Love making new fans of R/G! Glad you enjoyed and thanks for letting me know! (Sorry it took so long to respond, was having problems getting into my account for the longest time!)
Wow. You did a wonderful job on this story. I'm really blown away- this is a really hard match but you did it so beautifully. You're a wonderful writer and I love this story!! Great Job!! ~Marissa
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Wow. You did a wonderful job on this story. I'm really blown away- this is a really hard match but you did it so beautifully. You're a wonderful writer and I love this story!! Great Job!! ~Marissa
Author's Response: Thank you! Remus/Ginny happen to be my favorite pairing, so I love to make them realistic for others!
Twice, in one night, I find myself blown away by the same author. I am definitely impressed. Your characterization remains spot on, although I would have to say that your setting suffered a little bit in this story. The attention to detail between the two of them seemed to draw your focus off of the backdrop of the rest of the world. I guess the best way to phrase it would be that compared to your other story, this one felt a bit like it was taking place on a stage. All that said, I still liked it, and, if anything, your characterization has improved. Thank you for an excellent story.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for your review! I love it when someone critiques what I write, tells me where my strengths and weaknesses are!
I love this story! I loved Into Temptation too. I think it's better you chose to submit the stories as seperate ones instead of making a multi-chaptered fic with signs like "Several Months Later" at the begining.The R rated scene I fell in love with!!! Most of the authors around here tend to write such scenes in a very poor fashion, making them disgusting. You, on the other hand have written this with great class and sense.
I'd also really like to congradulate you on the characterization on both Remus and Ginny. He's just the kind of man who'd shave your legs like an artist and then turn bad and rough with you once he's buttered you up; and she's the playful little devil under cover.
My friend Evy Black recommended your fics to me and couldn't stop singing your praises until I finally sigh and read them both. And after reading them, the two of us began talking and quoting them to our friends and we nearly drove them mad *giggle*
I'd definatelly love to read more of your fics. Please, update and let me dive in your wonderful world once more.
~Silvie
Author's Response: I'm truly flattered! Thank you so much for leaving a review! I love to write both Remus and Ginny, and attempt to write a believable 'grown-up' Ginny - I'm really glad that they seem realistic and enough 'cannon' that people aren't screaming at me ;). I will attempt to move a few more of my stories over here ~ thanks again for letting me know you liked them - makes me feel like writing again!
When I read the summery, discovering which characters you'd chosen to pair, I wondered how you would manage to pull this off. You gave only minimal backstory (I would have preferred you to give some more precise detail as to their relationship's history) and you allowed the story to be focused on their desires. It made for a very in-depth study of their interaction, making them by the end a plausible couple.
I would be more careful with phrasing. Creating a romantic atmosphere is difficult. You used good adjectives that set the tone well and the image of the orange was very well-written, although lacking subtelty in places. However, you made a few inappropriate references, such as "bloke" and "in the buff" . These are Briticism's but in a romantic chapter they do not work, they're slang terms that I doubt people like Lupin or Ginny would use, so are best left out. Your wording could also be a little sharper, a few times I didn't quite understand what you were trying to express. Try not to be too long-winded, you want to keep your reader lingering on a thread but you don't want them falling off the thread completely.
Lupin's character was intriguing to say the least. His self-conscious trait suited very well, I imagine Lupin to be a very bashful person around intimacy. I also liked how Ginny didn't push him into anything, her dialogue was suggestive without being obvious. This gave the reader enough of the passion to grab on to, without rushing into the action too early.
The humour you included complimented the story very nicely. I especially liked the reference to Red Riding Hood, and the muddle between that and The Three Little Pigs. It added a theme of innocence and childhood playfulness into this story, which is very important cosidering he is somewhat older than her. Ginny's youth is evident, and her vunerability that goes alongside it. I'm glad you didn't portray her as an obvious tart, like I've read in too many fan fictions.
I'm glad I read this story, as it gives me a feel for how to go about my own chapter. Passionate scenes, I beleive, are the most awkward - if you don'tspend time to do them right it just flops. But yours did not flop! It showed great talent - keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the very detailed review - those are the kind of reviews I live for! I am just curious, did you happen to read 'Into Temptation'? Private Universe was a sequel to that story, and there was more 'set-up' of the relationship in it. I wish you luck in your own writing ventures - 'passionate' scenes are hard to write. My main goal in PU was to keep it as tasteful as possible, which considering what you are writing, is probably one of the biggest challenges I have ever undertaken. Thanks again!
nice follow-up. really good. And I like the way that you say Remus is shy (I could imagine that as well).
Author's Response: Remus is a bit 'reserved' in my way of thinking, and probably always will be ;) . Thanks for reading and taking the time to review!
Yow! That was wonderful. It's hard to imagine pulling off this particular scene with anything resembling classiness, but you certainly did it.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! This was a really hard story to write because of that very issue. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Very, very sweet! Great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much!