I'm kind of surprised the three children took to flying that easily. This must have been their first time on brooms. They all have powerful blood running through their veins so I guess anything is possible.
Love it. Seriously imo its better than the books (sorry for any offence queen Jo I still love you).
Just brilliant. I am lost for words at how good it is. The way you slotted it in with the actual scenes in the book. It totally does read like the Slytherin version of Harry Potter.
I cannot wait to read years 2 and 3 (and hopefully all the books please).
Love Destiny, have a crush on Drake and admire Silv and Sal. Just brilliant charactisation, and kept true to character the whole way true.
In the books Slytherins are just protrayed as being "bloodist" and elitist. I love how you have shown more of the cunning, behind the characters and that everything is a bit more black and white. Also the fact that the twins didn't want to work with Voldemort because they want to be the best, themselves not just due to their blood, just feels so true to life. If you are that keen for power, you wouldn't want to be a follower but a leader.
The work you put into this is a total accomplishment.
One wee thing can we get more Draco interaction? I would love to see him be put down a peg or 2 by the twins. Im already looking forward to the moment, it comes out that they are Voldemorts children (which i hope it does but not for a few books yet im sure)
*I wish to ask your permission. Can I print off the story to keep. I like to re-read books and this I can see myself coming back to. I promise I will not share. I'm just in love with this.
Argh it's just so, so me. I just wanna kiss you, for writing something so perfect.
Author's Response: I know that this is a bit old but thank you so much. You are very kind. Since I know that you have read to the book three I know that you have noticed that Draco is just a small character as of now. I still have the twins as being cautious about being known by everyone. Knocking Draco Malfoy down a peg would make a name for themselves and they don't want that yet. Besides Silver at least feels that Draco is a waste of air and not worth her time. And though Salazar is more verbal about his hatred, it is not his style to go out of his way to get Draco. To your question about printing the chapters out, I don't mind at all. I also don't mind if you share the story. Fan fiction is a fun hobby and its not like you could steal the story and get publish because of Jo's copyrights so have fun and enjoy.
Author's Response: I know that this is a bit old but thank you so much. You are very kind. Since I know that you have read to the book three I know that you have noticed that Draco is just a small character as of now. I still have the twins as being cautious about being known by everyone. Knocking Draco Malfoy down a peg would make a name for themselves and they don't want that yet. Besides Silver at least feels that Draco is a waste of air and not worth her time. And though Salazar is more verbal about his hatred, it is not his style to go out of his way to get Draco. To your question about printing the chapters out, I don't mind at all. I also don't mind if you share the story. Fan fiction is a fun hobby and its not like you could steal the story and get publish because of Jo's copyrights so have fun and enjoy.
I must've missed something. Are all three children Voldemort's? You're up to year 3 so I suppose I'll figure it out eventually. So these three must be a little older than Harry? I'm just trying to get my timeframe settled.
I forgot whose children these are. I know the twins are Voldemort's but who's the Mom and is Severus Destiny's Dad? And, who's her Mom? I'll go back and look. Why did they need to be put in an orphanage? I'll keep reading to find out.
Author's Response: I hope you continued to read because the Moon's mother gets explained later on. As the twins are the type of people they are, they never thought about her. They wouldn't have ever thought of their father had they not been informed that he was a powerful dark wizard. Actually all your questions get answered. I tried to keep the mystery in the beginning. Hope you enjoy.
I thought I started reading these stories a while back but I can't find any reviews and I don't remember the story. So, it's a new read for me:D I already love Gara, the snake.
I really enjoyed this story. :) I was really glad that it was, in it's own right, about the trio and didn't mention much about the other golden trio. Your characterization was rather amazing, and I have grown to really like your characters and understand them.
There are a few grammatical and punctuation issues that made me slow down, but it didn't hurt the story. ;)
Great job! I am looking forward to reading more.
This was ah-may-zing. Honestly, it was a really good read and although i knew what was going to happen next, it was intresting to read it from another point of view as opposed to HP.
Keep up the good work
Love it !
I love your story and I hope that you will keep witing sequals! I also loved the Snape and daughter relationship, in all those scenes Snape acted way within the Snape from the book's personality but of course with a softer side to Destiny. All your characters were so believeable but I kinda want Drake Bell and Destiny to fall for each other. I have to say that Destiny is my favorite even Silver and Salazlar are growing on me, mostly since Salazer's growing relationship with Drake Bell. You pinned Dumbledore's friendly all-know-iness and it was awsome how everything stuck to the books story line and if you think back everything you made up is very possible which justmakes it stick into my head even more than a random harry potter fic. I was sooooo relieved that the Moon twins did mostly the right thing, deep, deep, deep, deep, deep down they really do have good heart. And by the way I did see a few typos but was to lazy to reveiw, suggestion: if you coppy and paste each chapter one by one into a word document it will usually show you some things you missed. Anyway I REALLY want you to keep writing about their years at Hogwarts, PLEASE! Like next with the chamber of secrets I can really see how the trio would get into trouble with that one with their snake speaking, courious slytherin-ness, and their ties to Dumbledore, Snape, and Voldemort. So PLEASE! (Will flattery work?) You are such a good writer, SO good I am envious and wish I could write half as well!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Hey, that's for the praise. I say flattery won't usually work with me but never fear I have already planned on writing sequels. I have all seven books planned out already. I think I may even write a number eight but I'm not completely sure. I am currently writing the second year and four chapters are completed. However, as I am in college, I want to finish at least ten chapters before I start posting them, just in case I am forced to stop writing for a while. As a long time reader of fanfics I know how annoying it is to read half a story and wait months and months for the next chapter.It's funny that Destiny is your favorite character because when it comes to writing I think that she is my favorite point of view. And, about Drake Bell, I'm sorry but Destiny and him will only be friends. They kind of remind me of a Harry and Hermione friendship. They seem like they could fall for each other but they never will.
To bring up the Twins I think you might learn to love them as they grow and change. They are they two characters that learn the most in the series. (Mostly with the help of Dumbledore and Drake.)
I love it and I love Destiny she is so true to her personality and I also like that Snape is back to normal
“Talk about honestly,” the headmaster said through chuckles, wiping his tearing eyes. (Should it be honesty)
Author's Response: Hey, I was just looking through all my reviews and yours popped up. I remembered how you wanted me to write more stories and I just wanted to let you know, if you don't already, that Book Two is nearly finished. I just have to post three more chapters.
Hey, the personalities of Snape and Dumbledore are right on!!!!!!
-“Perhaps, it is best to start with those marks that must have caused a few questions in the past,” Dumbledore continued assertively. “That particular branding is called the Dark Mark and they are giving to Death Eaters by the much feared, Lord Voldemort.” and I think there is somthing wrong with that sentence
Hey, I really like the changing point of veiws. Also I'm sorry if you take offense but if I see an error I'll tell you:“You seemed to be in a generous mood,” Destiny said as she looked up and noticed how close he was stood from her. (tense?)
Author's Response: Oh, I don't mind if you tell me the errors. This one I did fix but some I probably won't bother. It's just that some of the mistakes are so minor I would rather use the time to write other chapters.
Hey, I love the idea.
I think there is an error in your third paragraph. Can't wait to read more!
Sorry about that! You already said you had the entire series planned out! Someone must have obliterated my memory! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I just wanted to give you notice that I am trying to get the first chapter of Year Two posted so be on the look out.
I have totallyenjoyed this! Great job!! Very fun to read! Will you be taking the trio into the other books?! (pleeeeease?!)
Yay! Another chapter up! I didn't get a chance to read this until today, but it's great. Seriously, I can't wait until the final chapter of this story and for the second story, as well as the rest of the series.
One thing, though: I don't think it's in this chapter, but some of the other chapters have slightly incorrect grammer, such as incorrectly placed commas and full stops at the end of questions instead of question marks. You haven't done any of that in this chapter (incorrect grammar, as far as I can see) but I'm pretty sure that there have been some errors in your grammar in past chapters. Be sure to watch out for any grammar issues.
I seriously can't wait for the next update. Soon?
Author's Response: Last chapter just posted, enjoy.
I read very quickly and likely will have more to say later, but for now just one quesiton: In your version, can Dumbledore understand the twins when they speak Parseltongue? And if so, do they realize it? (Sorry if this was addressed and I just missed it.)
Author's Response: No, Dumbledore can't speak Parseltongue. Dumbledore never says anything about it because he realizes it is just a means for the twins to communicate to each other and the headmaster allows for the twins to keep their bond.
I like it! It rolls very well with the original!Slazar better make his move quick! :)
Ohhh, i love this fanfic! It's great! Really well thought out...I have suspected from the beginning that the twins would be Good, because even though they share many of Voldy's traits, and Salazer even looks like him, pricisely because they are twins would have some affect on their choice of good/evil right? i mean, Tom Riddle was never loved and nobody loved him, but the twins had each other and love each other (And they have Destiny as well).
anyway, please keep writing and i am so looking forwards to the other years, especially year 7!!!
Keep going!!!
Author's Response: Just wanted to let you know. I have almost posted the entire Year Two.
Oh good!! I was worried for a second about the twins, but this is great!! After this one is over, will you be putting them into the other stories?
Author's Response: Oh yes, I have already planned on writing seven stories in the series; one for each of the years at Hogwarts. I also may write one more about the years after Voldemort's downfall. I hope to start posting my second year in a month or so after I complete the first.