Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 03/13/10 17:22 · For: Chapter 1

Very Nice!!!

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. ~JBS

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 03/10/10 19:40 · For: Chapter 1

Great job! You showed a strong understanding of the original in crafting this one. Good rhythm, and it flowed nicely as a story. I've done this myself with a bit of Luna and her mythical creatures, so the second to last stanza felt a bit off. I looked up the original and think the second and third lines in that stanza should be reversed to truly parallel it; of course, I don't know if you chose to do that, but wanted to point that out if you didn't. Otherwise, it's a good poem, nice job! I love reading these sorts of things and enjoyed yours very much. ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it. As for the second to last stanza, that was the most difficult for me. I made it fit with the scene and the poem as best I could, taking a bit of a cue from Peeves (one of my favorite side characters). It's not a perfect fit, I agree... but works well enough for what I was going for. Thanks again. ~JBS