Login
MuggleNet Fan Fiction
Harry Potter stories written by fans!
Reviews For White Jade

Name: myy (Signed) · Date: 03/08/17 8:26 · For: Leaving Home

maintain the burberry uk most swarovski canada true hugo boss online feelings, nike air max maintaining coach outlet the best horloges mood.Life chrome hearts outlet needs converse sneakers warmth, ravens nfl jersey mood coach factory outlet online need nike quiet ralph lauren uk beauty. new balance outlet Have air max a ralph lauren dream, michael kors handbags go detroit pistons jerseys fly; jets nfl jersey there is oakley outlet online a louboutin road, 49ers nfl jersey went cheap jerseys walking; there true religion is ray ban love, ralph lauren and hilfiger outlet went uhren to care. Do five finger shoes not look adidas tracksuits at polo outlet online others nike shoes outlet too, salvatore ferragamo do colts nfl jersey not the north face outlet see the north face their nfl jerseys own oakley vault too abercrombie and fitch light. soccer shoes Life nike air came omega watches all christian louboutin shoes the levi's jeans way, ralph lauren polos all abercrombie and fitch the christian louboutin way to adidas schuhe turn timberland away. eagles nfl jersey No rolex watches matter beats by dre how chi flat iron much searching, marc jacobs how wedding dresses sale much abercrombie fitch burden, ray bans look hermes birkin after packers nfl jersey the oakley sunglasses open, tory burch outlet the titans nfl jersey scenery is retro jordans still salomon beautiful; no new york knicks jerseys matter huarache how iphone case much red bottoms the nike landscape, northface how oakley much nike air max heartbreak, put michael kors down, prada feelings cheap ray ban still abercrombie and fitch pure. Happiness ray ban outlet is actually polo ralph lauren outlet very pandora jewelry simple, barbour have north face outlet a go ralph lauren treasure, dolphins nfl jersey lost polo ralph lauren outlet online no adidas memories; happiness burberry outlet is north face jackets actually nike very chicago bulls jerseys easy, nike free 5.0 bearish boston celtics jerseys everything pelicans jersey is puma beautiful, lacoste outlet everything beats by dre headphones is michael kors outlet online obsessed with vans the cheap jerseys value. pacers jersey Small pandora claims, is michael kors rich; my hermes heart coach outlet at ray ban black friday ease, the ray ban day hogan will barbour jackets outlet be oakley sungalsses outlet full.Happy adidas yeezy shoes life, designer handbags simple nike roshe run and jimmy choo plain. toms outlet Learn bucks jersey to cheap nhl jerseys look michael kors outlet for nhl jerseys in hilfiger online shop the puma shoes cold oakley sungalsses outlet warmth of pandora the nike air max sun; long champ umbrella swarovski on coach black friday a roshe run rainy tn pas cher day hollister to broncos nfl jersey learn coach factory outlet for oakley vault themselves; canada gooses outlet learn occhiali ray ban to ray ban find cheap jerseys a hermes outlet cool eyeglass frames place tory burch sale downtown; prada sunglasses learn trail blazers jersey din texans nfl jersey jealously converse shoes guarding nike clear coach purses outlet joy; calvin klein learn grizzlies jersey poetry swarovski crystal in ray ban ordinary polo outlet life. raptors jersey Treasure valentino bloom burberry outlet online once roshe runs every, every mcm handbags laugh burberry bloom, air force Shanfanjiujian, toms shoes safe dsquared2 walk, coach black friday forget nike free naturally, celine black friday not spurs jersey far-fetched. ray ban It michael kors uk does mcm backpack outlet not giants nfl jersey require much longchamp handbags outlet desire, armani exchange longing michael kors australia heart, panthers nfl jersey if, cowboys nfl jersey on adidas the ray ban front rams nfl jersey line; feel oakley sungalsses outlet tired, just michael kors black friday rest.Not coach outlet online everyone tory burch outlet is mizuno running aware air huarache of Thanksgiving, prada handbags you new balance shoes will michael kors receive christian louboutin your tommy hilfiger feelings. Thanksgiving, replica watches give christian louboutin shoes her cheap ray ban more. nike canada Ungrateful, ray ban just toms outlet farther miami heat jerseys away bills nfl jersey from nba jersey her. longchamp outlet Away marc jacobs from ferragamo shoes home, air max whether longchamp others burberry handbags outlet give the north face you nike roshe hot or michael kors cold jordan face ray ban sunglasses face, ralph lauren outlet it dsquared2 outlet does polo ralph not nike free run matter. nets jerseys The nike huarache outside abercrombie world, los angeles clippers jerseys respect michael kors outlet is replica handbags the pandora jewellery background, rather ray-ban sunglasses than coachfactory.com/shop the cheap true religion people rolex watches themselves. coach outlet store Between ray ban wayfarer friends, pandora charms whether hot adidas or beats headphones cold cheap oakley sunglasses face houston rockets jersey face, patriots nfl jersey it michael kors bags does coach factory outlet not timberland shoes matter. babyliss True ralph lauren outlet online friendship, kate spade outlet cross prada shoes the denver nuggets jersey heart, rather timberland boots than new balance his azcardinals nfl jersey face.Tired thomas sabo heart, tommy hilfiger outlet listening ralph lauren black friday to music; jazz jersey depressed, pandora uk talk jordan retro mind; bears nfl jersey tired, busy rolex watches for sale pot orlando magic jersey of michael kors usa tea, philipp plein outlet find cheap michael kors a under armour quiet asics corner, coach outlet close swarovski jewelry their oakley sunglasses outlet eyes oakley sungalsses outlet a cheap michael kors rest. falcons nfl jersey The burberry outlet world's not mk outlet online perfect, redskins nfl jersey there ralph lauren outlet are always vans regrets michael kors outlet in oklahoma city thunder jerseys life, hollister clothing store not suns jersey always coach outlet pay, michael kors there new balance are giuseppe zanotti rewards, reebok not ralph lauren every timberland outlet effort will ralph lauren factory store be successful; bcbg max not michael kors outlet online sale every hollister clothing story air jordans has beats by dr dre its nike free run ending. vikings nfl jersey Life supra shoes is los angeles lakers jerseys very short, womens clothing God oakley outlet opened oakley sunglasses cheap his rolex watches eyes barbour jackets a nba shoes moment north face a coach outlet sigh, is canada gooses jackets the lions nfl jersey day; converse a burberry handbags busy buccaneers nfl jersey day philadelphia 76ers jersey a vans shoes month, rolex montre that air max is, michael kors outlet one tory burch sandals year; giuseppe shoes a true religion outlet store snap of burberry outlet the toms shoes outlet fingers is instyler a oakley sunglasses outlet lifetime ralph lauren encounter polo ralph lauren a rush. Do north face not cheap oakley embarrass roshe run yourself, give longchamp black friday yourself versace outlet a michael kors purses positive, bottega give longchamp handbags yourself michaelkors.com a calm, north face backpacks not tommy hilfiger blame, abercrombie kids do michael kors outlet not bottega veneta complain; air max 2015 not philipp plein demanding, longchamp outlet do tommy hilfiger not nike store expect; do hollister not omega watches care, air max 90 do hollister clothing store not michael kors outlet online compare, jordan shoes life, cheap nfl jerseys shallow adidas shoes look soccer shoes outlet happy, katespade sad thomas sabo do nfl jerseys not softball bats write bcbg dresses in kate spade outlet the years kings jersey Su true religion outlet Jian, atlanta hawks jersey write nike mercurial graceful baseball bats poem; eyeglasses online only ralph lauren polo in true religion jeans outlet the handbags outlet time charlotte hornets jersey of dallas mavericks jersey his cheap mlb jerseys own the north face jackets silhouette.Burning p90x workout a burberry heart longchamp lights mcm bags illuminate michael kors every asics outlet dark oakley sungalsses outlet corner warriors jersey of cleveland cavaliers jersey life, woolrich outlet by burberry outlet online the time nike air max hands oakley sunglasses outlet warm lunette oakley bouquet coach outlet of flowers, timberwolves jersey even burberry canada if christian louboutin outlet the nike decline mcm backpack will nike air be, ray ban I juicy couture have had swarovski brilliant; mont blanc pens even swarovski lose, I browns nfl jersey have cheap jordans ever adidas had; relojes even nike will oakley sunglasses outlet die, juicy couture outlet I coach outlet usa have nike free been fendi outlet in chiefs nfl jersey full michael kors bags bloom. barbour jacket outlet The christian louboutin good, nike factory the saints nfl jersey gentle, nike shoes outlet warm; cheap shoes experiencing, air max 2015 with steelers nfl jersey gratitude, burberry uk they nike store happy toms shoes with; wind givenchy antigona laugh, laugh burberry about hilfiger the adidas rain, iphone cases through prada outlet not toms.com his watches own views. ed hardy Where adidas shoes the toms outlet heart nike roshe through ferragamo the mlb jerseys flowers wizards jersey in scarpe hogan bloom, chargers nfl jersey where, ray ban sunglasses outlet with new balance a ray ban sunglasses outlet bloom ralph lauren online shop time, handbags outlet watch basketball shoes happiness. If barbour jackets the jimmy choo shoes setting coach outlet online sun is true religion jeans infinitely raiders nfl jersey good, bengals nfl jersey why mbt shoes melancholy hollister dusk. air max Missed the jaguars nfl jersey wind, polo ralph lauren we'll hollisterco get celine handbags rain; michael kors missed fry coach black friday gorgeous, seahawks nfl jersey quiet michael kors handbags beauty will walk oakley black friday into ray ban sunglasses autumn. mcm handbags If the converse heart flat iron young, the kate spade years cheap nike shoes are burberry outlet not toms shoes

jordan release dates


Name: psijupiter (Signed) · Date: 10/23/13 15:43 · For: Leaving Home
Hmm, what a fascinating story. It is clear you have put a lot of thought and research into this, although I am not familiar enough with Chinese culture and history to tease apart what it real and what has been added to create the magical element of the story. This echoes some of my favourite parts of JKR's writing - magic being a part of the ordinary world we are familliar will.

You've managed to keep a nice balance between developing the characters and setting the scene and details of this world. While on occasion I felt the balance tipped a little over into a bit of an info dump, especially towards the begining, overall it works really well. The main character is interesting in his own right, and his relationship with his parents adds a nice bit of tension to the scene.

A few times there were words missed, I think, which threw me as I was reading. For example: " a small cadre of house elves to he would be treated" I think there should be something between 'to' and 'he." Also, this sentence 'Even his clothing was plain as he had ever worn in his life.' feels a little repetative as he has already spent a paragraph contemplating his clothings.

A couple of small plot points kind of skipped past me - I don't know if I'm just being daft or if they need to be made clearer. You mention that his next oldest sibling is 10 years older than him, and then he wonders how his brothers and sisters dress at school as if they are still there. Also, I wasn't sure about the family set up - from the age gap and the different symbols on the wand boxes it seems like he has a different mother from his siblings? But I wasn't sure from the story itself.

I love this whole set up though, it's very original. (The wandlore here in particular is intriguing) and it would really serve as an excellent starting point for a longer story. (hint hint!) Even if there wasn't a long story to come out of this, I would love to read maybe a one shot or two set during Zai-feng's school years? You've created a really rich universe in a relatively short space and I would love to get another glimpse at it!


Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 04/19/13 3:04 · For: Leaving Home
What an unusual story. It is a simple tale, but its charm comes from the blending of basic magical principles into a very different culture. The details give the appearance of being researched and are sufficiently plausible that they might be accurate. (Were phoenixes really a symbol of femininity in China? Did regular army soldiers rotate in and out of palace guard posts? I guess so.)

The references to magic are few, just enough to show that this is a magical story -- a wand, Apparition, shrinking the travel trunks, Polyjuice Potion, Veritaserum.

The story gives hints of questions we will have to answer for ourselves. What is the time period? Were members of the emperor's family always magical? Were the "lesser schools" also schools of magic? And how will the prince's experience be, studying alongside both commoners and scheming aristocrats? It boggles the mind to think of the amount of research that would be needed to describe even one ordinary day at Dragon Pearl.

As usual, Aida's writing is skillful and graceful, easy to read and easy to follow. A good blend of background, description, thoughts, dialogue, and action.

It is assumed that witches and wizards are present in countries all around the globe but we tend to imagine them only in Western-culture countries. Aida has opened up a whole new vista of possibilities. Will anyone follow her lead? (No, don't look at me.)


Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 06/30/12 17:30 · For: Leaving Home
Why is this only one chapter??? It is very interesting so far! I never thought of what the Wizarding world would be like in Asia! I especially love the wand idea! How does he get sorted? Do they get sorted? What's going to happen to him????? :) if you couldn't tell, I love to read and imagine things.


You must login (register) to review.