Name: bkaddictjk (Signed) · Date: 03/01/13 10:01 · For: Chapter 4: Realisations

This was very realistic, I can really see this as a part of the canon universe. Great job, will there be a sequel? I love reading about Remus, and you've written him very well.

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 4:19 · For: Chapter 4: Realisations

yayayay, you finished your first chaptered fic, and it's lovely! This is so sweet and you kept the fantastic characterisation all the way through. Poppy was great and Remus so canon and yet more so.

Small crit:

“Oh, they all went home to sleep. You can hardly all go back to your old dormitory now.” Remus smiled. “It's strange to think of someone else using it now. It felt very much like it was ours, more than any other part of the castle.”

This is confusing because it reads that Remus is saying the first line , when it must be Poppy. You need a break there.

So glad she broke off the engagement with Smethwick. He wasn't right for you, Poppy!

~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 0:19 · For: Chapter 4: Realisations

Before the final squee, a few things first:

The mattress shifted next to him, and he he saw her getting up hastily, as if she hadn't meant him to see her there again.

“You remembered,” she smiled.”

And I think there should be a break between the first line and "Remus smiled" here:

“Oh, they all went home to sleep. You can hardly all go back to your old dormitory now.”
Remus smiled. “It's strange to think of someone else using it now. It felt very much like it was ours, more than any other part of the castle.”


Now that's done, let me say that I absolutely loved this! Yes, the kiss did happen, and yes, I'm a smutdragon, but there is a time and place for everything, isn't it? :) You wrote a lovely story keeping the characters in mind. Well done, Sophie, and good luck with the challenge!

~Natalie

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 0:02 · For: Chapter 3: Emotions

DAMMIT.

Will they or won't they? You have me on tenterhooks, O Wise Owl!

Your writing was exceptionally lovely in this chapter. There are, however, a few errors. I noticed a missing full-stop in the first chapter, and a missing closing quotation mark in this one. Also, I think it's N.E.W.Ts and O.W.Ls. But I say this with HPWikia as my source (I had to check for my fic), and haven't read the books in a while.

One last chapter! -sob-

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/26/13 23:54 · For: Chapter 2: Blushes

Dying.

Okay, I am having so much fun right now with this. See, what I like best is that you're taking your time with your story, letting it roll out at its own pace while providing it with enough moments to giggle at. Your characterisation of both characters is flawless, but so are the additions of magic-related things.

Reading on!

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/26/13 23:47 · For: Chapter 1: Introductions

OH OH! SQUEEAGE ABOUT TO ENSUE.

But first, "Vanishing Sickness"? Uhm. How evil are you?

I must say, excellent characterisation of Poppy so far. (Or, should I say, Pomona? :P) I can definitely see the canon Poppy in her, the one who can scold even Dumbledore and shriek at Snape. But, again, she's so young here, so of course, she'd be timid herself. You really caught that balance well.

Okay now I must continue reading. Can't wait to see how they hook up. -cackles-

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/26/13 11:47 · For: Chapter 4: Realisations

Aww, how very, very sweet! Lovely ending. The last line is true - it couldn't be any other way. Setting their first kiss in the hospital wing after a injury in the Order was a great idea, I loved it (which sounds like I love Remus getting hur but that's not the caset, lol.) You did a good job of breaking off Poppy's engagement in the first scene, and then setting them up with that conversation in the second scene. I could just picture them sitting there holding hands and cheered them on to kiss. :)
Lovely story--you did a great job with a challenging pairing and I really enjoyed reading them!
~Gina :)

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/23/13 15:40 · For: Chapter 3: Emotions

Oh oh, that was so sad! To think that Remus's last transformation was alone, and on the eve of an exam, is just heartbreaking. Great character insight here. Lovely job with Poppy and her engagement. And I liked Remus's bit at the end. Your LS statuses are intriguing so keep it up quickly! I look forward to seeing the next chapter!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thaaaaank you, Gina! If all goes to plan, you shouldn't have to wait long for the next chapter :) Hopefully it will be a little more cheerful; I do make Remus suffer quite a lot. I feel bad, but he's rather good at bringing it on himself, bless him. At least he has Poppy to look after him!

~Sophie

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/21/13 9:58 · For: Chapter 1: Introductions

Oh, I gulped a little bit when I realised Remus had seen her ring. It's so saaaaad. Godric, there really is something about Remus that just makes me want to sob all the time. All the Marauders, really (well, Peter ... not so much ... if ever - snivelling rat)

This is so gentle and sweet, Sophie, but a real treat to read.

Well done ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you, Carole! Yeah, Remus does lend himself to sadness. I feel bad for him, but I don't quite know what else to do with him, hah. Heehee, no, Peter can never win much sympathy, even when he's in the Hospital Wing. I guess the other three more than compensate, though.

~Sophie

Name: sam_1034_lily (Signed) · Date: 02/20/13 3:28 · For: Chapter 2: Blushes

When I read the summary I wasn't planing on reading it since I am not a fan of teacher student romance but then Madam Pomfrey isn't a teacher and Remus is my favourite so I read it and I am really glad I did. Its good to see more of Madam Pomfrey then just a strict and protective matron of Hogwarts. I am looking forward to what happens next! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing :) I'm glad you managed to overlook the warning -- it really was only precautionary. Bringing Madame Pomfrey to life has been a good challenge, and I hope you've found her convincing. Remus is a favourite of mine too. There's something so tragic about him, and he's just so unbearably nice that I can't help but love him! Anyway, thank you again, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story too!

~Sophie

Name: sam_1034_lily (Signed) · Date: 02/20/13 3:27 · For: Chapter 2: Blushes

When I read the summary I wasn't planing on reading it since I am not a fan of teacher student romance but then Madam Pomfrey isn't a teacher and Remus is my favourite so I read it and I am really glad I did. Its good to see more of Madam Pomfrey then just a strict and protective matron of Hogwarts. I am looking forward to what happens next! :)

Author's Response: So good that you reviewed twice ;) Thanks again!

~Sophie

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/17/13 19:47 · For: Chapter 2: Blushes

Oh, poor Remus - James and Sirius came in at exactly the wrong time. He doesn't deserve their teasing! Especially since his interaction with Poppy was mostly innocent. Sweet little scene, looking forward to more!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Haha, most people don't deserve Sirius and James's teasing, I think. Yes, that scene was very innocent, but there's more to come ;) Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gina <3

~Sophie

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/17/13 15:35 · For: Chapter 2: Blushes

Hahahahahah - Sirius and James are really quite ebil! Actually, I do like the way you have Sirius as the slightly more sympathetic one, as in he's the one apologising. They were awful to leave Remus with Peter, especially as it was effectively Sirius's fault Peterwas there. Brillinatly characterised in those last few sentences, Sophie, really good.

Ah, poor Remus, this crush isn't going to die down, and she's really not much older than them, so totally understandable.

So far I'm really enjoying the story, so please keep going because I want to know what happens! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Sometimes, I find it hard to resist making them a bit ebil -- more fun that way! Also a useful way of foreshadowing in this case, but I shall say no more. The crush isn't going to die down, no. I may have stretched Poppy's age a tiny bit, but I believe I have Jess's approval, hah. Thanks for all of the reviews <3

~Sophie

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/09/13 13:43 · For: Chapter 1: Introductions

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW, I love this. I think you've got the characterisation of everyone just brilliantly here, Sophie. Dumbledore is brilliant, and Poppy is just so lovely and caring, and a little bit naive (ha ha - those Marauders will soon make her snarl!)

I'm really looking forward to seeing how this progresses.

One point ... “A Hufflepuff who could have been in Ravenclaw,” Albus, I consider that an INSULT! Who wants to be a stinky old Ravenclaw?(whicher whicher whicher)

Lovely story, well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Heehee, thank you, Carole! I imagined that Poppy would have a lot to learn when she started her job at Hogwarts. The Marauders may not make her snarl exactly (snarling is more Remus's thing :p ) but yeah, they can't help but try her patience. And, hah, I did feel a little bad when writing that line. I had to suppress my instinct to whicher at him. Poppy never wanted to be a Ravenclaw, thought, so it's okay? Maybe?

~Sophie

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/06/13 20:39 · For: Chapter 1: Introductions

Lovely start! Poppy's character immediately comes to life. I especially like how she asserted herself with Dumbledore about how she wanted to be more compassionate, whereas Dumbledore was a bit more blunt about things. That seemed very in character for Dumbledore, including his compromise.
I already feel so sad for Remus. :(
I'm intrigued to see where this will go given their ages here and the warning on the story. Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Yay, thank you Gina! I've never really written Albus or Poppy before, so it's a relief to hear that you think I handled them well enough. Yeah, there's always plenty of sadness for Remus. A full moon on his first Sunday at Hogwarts :( I wish I could hug him, but I suppose Poppy will just have to do it for me ;)

~Sophie