A Few Detentions and A Story by LaneTechFreshie

1. The Unbelievable Head by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1966 words)

When Lily finds out whom the Head Boy is, sparks fly, and she realizes she's in for quite a year.

"Nikeia" is pronounced "ni kee yah." There are twenty fours prefects total: two per year means six prefects per house. I've kept Remus a prefect, so that means, including the Head Students, there are twenty five students who are either prefects or Heads.


2. The Trainride by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1558 words)
A boring trainride to Hogwarts is no fun at all, so let's stir up some fun, shall we?



3. Back at Hogwarts by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3350 words)
Being back in Hogwarts is a comfort for both James Potter and Lily Evans, and with a certain surprise around the corner, things should get even more comfortable.



4. The Fight and the Punishment by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1292 words)
This story isn�t entitled �A Few Detentions and a Story� for nothing. Here�s where it all starts.



5. Beside the Lake by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3034 words)
While waiting to serve their first detention, James and Lily find peace and quiet (relatively) in a day beside the lake.



6. The First Detention by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2181 words)
And so, the first detention is upon us. It can�t be too eventful, right? Hah!


7. More Cleaning by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2084 words)
After a decidedly eventful first detention, a few more detentions need to happen. Wonder what�ll happen now?


8. Conversations by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4691 words)
After being a bit of an idiot, James seeks out his best mates for some advice, which Lily turns to the three girls to whom she�s closest for help and sympathy.


9. The American by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3719 words)
A transfer student at Hogwarts? Oh, this ought to be good.

I�m American. I�ve portrayed a certain character just the way I want her; not laughing at Americans, not hating them. If anyone takes offense at this character, I�m sorry. Thanks to Bookworm Federation Unlimited for the name �Stacey�.


10. Could It Be Jealousy? by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2076 words)
So, the American just might be interested in James� This really ought to be good.


11. More Detentions by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3050 words)
The Marauders are first and foremost troublemakers and pranksters; secondly, gentlemen (to a point).


12. Secrets, Questions, Answers, and Doubt by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3377 words)
After a few tense days, Lily finally asks James a few questions. He responds to those, and has a few things of his own to say.


13. Betrayal by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3542 words)
To the surprise of James and Lily, a friend of theirs is suddenly exposed as a traitor.


14. A Few Discussions by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3429 words)
Now that the jig is up, and they’ve labeled their friend a traitor, everyone had to sit and talk about it all.


15. Another Detention by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3433 words)
McGonagall assigns a detention that makes James reminisce, and Lily come up with a brilliant plan.


16. Bad News by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4960 words)
Well, all good things must come to an end, and in this chapter a few good things find that they can no longer continue.

This was one of the chapters in which a plot point was changed to follow canon.


17. Talks with Friends by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4485 words)
With all the despair, James finds he needs to talk to a few friends.

A wonderful reader asked to have Josey and Nikeia’s stories explained just a bit more, so putting Josey in this chapter was mostly Meiqueen’s idea. Thanks!


18. Goodbye by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3464 words)
Goodbyes, though sad and heartbreaking, must be said.

Aunt Michelle is really original reader GodivaLashes. Thanks!


19. Aftermath by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1997 words)
After saying goodbye, Lily begins to suffer and James can’t stand it.
Originally, this chapter was broken into two chapters. I put the originals chapters 19 and 20 together, eliminating a cliffhanger by creating a fuller chapter.


20. In Which Lily and James Have a Conversation by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2650 words)
James brings Lily back to the land of the living, and spends the evening talking with her.

This is a brand new chapter as of 2010/2011. I felt that I didn’t have enough conversations between my characters, so I took the first opportunity I could to create one between James and Lily.


21. A New Day by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2700 words)
Summary: So, Lily's out of her stupor and everyone else is happy. How about a game of Quidditch? Or maybe Exploding Snap? (It's good, believe you me!) :-)

And if anyone considers the serious/Sirius joke “a hanging offence” or a“VERY beaten dead horse” I apologize.


22. More Bad News by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2069 words)
Well, here comes more trouble, this time thanks to someone inside Hogwarts.

A summary of the past few weeks opens the chapter and thanks for a few original reviewers (who are members of the Quidditch team) are required: JustMelissa, firetemper, and LilyEvans.


23. The Duel by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1891 words)
And we finally meet the baddest baddie of all, dear old Voldemort. Great.

Yes, I know it’s pretty impossible that You-Know-Who gets onto school grounds, but… hey.

Original A/N: I just want to say thank you so much to everyone whose made this story just what I wanted; something that I never thought I would achieve. The final outcome of this story just amazes me. That I got this far�”with a lot of help and love and encouragement�”is amazing. So thanks again to everyone! ;D


24. The Thirteen Inch Scar by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2303 words)
When Lily and James wake up in the hospital wing, it’s to find themselves with a few new scars.

A comment from Quiditch fan prompted the original addition of Nikeia’s paragraph. Thanks!


25. The Passing Days by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3644 words)
James and Lily leave the Hospital Wing, but Sirius checks in. The prefects plan a ball, and the ball drops on a certain characters.

I_WiSh_I_WeRe_a_MaRaUdEr, MeiQueen, and lily_n_jms r mnt 4 eachoter are readers who were kind enough to offer some criticism during the early stages of the story. So, they’re three of the prefects. Thanks, girls!


26. Coming Out of It by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3165 words)
James finds himself in charge of reviving a friend for a second time.

So, if any of you are original readers and you are rereading this, you’ll notice that Sirius didn’t get the same treatment as Lily. I decided to change that because… well, just because. It seemed too… something… for Sirius. Actually, it kinda seemed like a dunking would be more appropriate for Sirius than for Lily, but… I just decided to change it.

Original Note: Omagus (my Nitpicker) said something rather funny while he was Nitpicking the last chapter: “Aw, I was kinda hoping [they would pick the] French Revolution [for the masquerade theme]; then they'd have an excuse to behead Snape :P” *laugh*


27. This November Day by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2653 words)
Just a bit of fun and relaxation are in order for our friends at Hogwarts, and this is that chapter.

This chapter is basically fluff. Filler fluff, but I like it. It's just a pleasant chapter about one November day. Haha.


28. Hogsmeade by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4953 words)
With the Masquerade in a few days, everyone heads to Hogsmeade in search of costumes.


29. Before the Ball by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3866 words)
With the ball occurring later that night, the Marauders and their friends visit the Hospital Wing, go patrolling, and have a contest with marshmallows.


30. I Hereby Dub Thee by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4086 words)
Everyone gets ready and heads down to the Masquerade, with a happy detour to the Hospital Wing.


31. Masquerade by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2925 words)
And finally the Masquerade commences.

Kayla is I_WiSh_I_WeRe_a_MaRaUdEr. Lantern, MrsPadfoot19, and honeydukeschololate are readers who have the distintion of being Laila, Amanda and Alyssa.


32. Christmas Tidings by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4806 words)
It’s Christmas Morning, and presents are handed out!

Thanks for Abbi Nelson, Honeydukeschocolate, and Wanna_be_wizard for present suggestions.


33. Nikeia's Story by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2067 words)
Nikeia’s finally back with her friends, and Sirius hears her story.


34. Twice Defied by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2386 words)
Frank and Alice return from winter break with some startling news.

I do have a prophecy to worry about, which is what prompted this chapter…


35. Quidditch by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2704 words)
What Harry Potter story would be complete without some Quidditch? Every story. So, here’s Gryffindor versus Ravenclaw.

Thanks for the following original readers for their input; they became Quidditch players: _LilyEvans_, JustMelissa, Fire_temper, Clawstripe_n_chocolate, and Quiditchfan.


36. Overdue Witch Talk by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3475 words)
The girls decide they need some girl, uh witch talk.

This is a new chapter. I put the original chapters 36 and 37 together into chapter 37, which gave me chapter 36 for this. That was one of the main reasons to re-edit the story; I didn’t think there was enough conversation between our favorite characters. . If you’ve read the story before, you should like the change. If this is your first time reading: you’re amazing, thank you!


37. That Laila Girl by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3752 words)
And here’s where it gets tricky. A sixth year decides that she deserves a certain Marauder for her own.

In the original story, this character was named “Layla”, but I didn’t like the similarity to “Kayla”. So, I changed it to “Laila”, which is close, but different. I did try entirely new names, but they didn’t feel right. Plus, the original idea of This Laila Girl came from an original reader, Lantern.


38. A Few Words, If You Please by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (1677 words)
After watching the triangle between Laila and James and Lily, another sixth year decides to talk to Lily.

Quiditchfan, an early and steadfast reader, is Lauryn Ross. Thanks so much for all your input over the years! Thanks for Lantern for the idea.


39. Confrontations of Many Sorts by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3063 words)
Oh, and things get really interesting now with a few confrontations.

Again, thanks Lantern and Quiditchfan.


40. Necessary Research by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3669 words)
James is determined to get Lily back, but he’s got to prove himself first.


41. Necessary Reunion by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2569 words)
James does what he has to do, but will it succeed with Lily?.

At one point, chapters 40 and 41 were one chapter, but it came out to fifteen pages, which I thought was way too long. Also, it didn’t feel right to have it all together; it didn’t allow for a breather in the trouble. So, I put chapters 42 and 43 together to accommodate. Just so you know.


42. St. Valentine's Festivities by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (5073 words)
How appropriate: Lily and James get back together in time to go to Hogsmeade for Valentine’s Day. I wonder who planned that....

This chapter has been rewritten quite a bit, cutting it down from fourteen pages to ten. Still a long chapter, but a bit more focused, I think. Also, this was originally chapter 41. I split the original chapter 40 into two parts, and that forced this chapter to be renumbered, and chapters 42 and 43 to be combined into chapter 43. Also, in 1978, when the story is set, Valentine’s Day fell on a Wednesday. So, there is just a festival celebrating Valentine’s Day in Hogsmeade. And yes, Patricia and Charles were inspired by the movie Chocolat.


43. Even More Detentions by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4373 words)
Considering the title of the story, detentions are quite necessary. So, here are a few more. Perhaps they’re not actually deserved, but alas, earwax..

And again, for old readers, this was originally chapters 42 and 43.


44. America, Anyone? by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (4362 words)
Josey’s aunt invites her and her friends to America for the week. How fun!

Looking back at this, I think I can say that I’m not a huge fan of them going to America, but I think the reworking the chapter makes it work. So, I’m content with it. I love Prongs is Josey’s Aunt Chelsea. Thanks!


45. Montana by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2944 words)
The continuation and culmination of the trip to America happens in this chapter. Beware of the rabbit.

I had the students leaving and returned to Hogwarts on a Wednesday to allow for Easter Sunday falling in the middle of the break. I love Prongs is still Josey’s Aunt Chelsea.

Nitpicker Omagus seemed to think that I was being a bit hard on the guys in this story. It's not completely intentional, so to any guy reading this, thanks and sorry... Sorta. ;D


46. Getting Back at the Boys by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2682 words)
And the Marauders finally get what’s coming to them.

It was Fiffer Haliwell’s idea to have the Marauderettes prank the Marauders. Fun note: this was originally published to MNFF right before Deathly Hallows, the book, came out.


47. Studying, Frustration and Fun by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2705 words)
With NEWTs approaching, Lily gets rather tense. So, the others abandon her.


48. It's Nearly Over by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (2562 words)
The final game of Quidditch, the final full moon… it’s almost over.


49. NEWTs by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (5315 words)
And finally, the seventh years we love the most are required to sit their end-of-year-and-school exams.

Considering we know so little about the seventh year, I used the OWL year as reference.

My original (abridged) Author’s Notes: It was hard to write this, just so you all know… I mean… As I wrote this (or thought about writing it) I realized… I’m ending it soon. That was a hard pill to swallow. I mean… I can’t explain. Write your own story and tell me how you feel. :-S


50. The End by LaneTechFreshie [ - ] (3538 words)
At last, the Marauders and their closest friends must leave Hogwarts.

At the time of my writing this note, before re-editing this chapter, there is less than an hour until the first midnight showing of Deathly Hallows Part two, at least in my time zone. That’s pretty emotional… This was tough to write the first time, tough to edit the first time, and tough to re-edit now.

Original Author’s Notes: “I mean, I loved the writing. But aside of the writing-- it staggers me that so many people have loved them and what's better than that? Nothing's better than that.” JKR…. Thank you… that’s exactly how I feel. Took the words right from my mouth. Nothing is better…

As with the previous chapter, this was hard to write. Oh. While writing, I had this mentality that I had to write something meaningful, and deep, and spectacular. Not sure this came off the way I envisioned it, but *sigh* not everything can be perfect. Not that I’m saying some things are…. But read, and hopefully you’ll like it. :-)

Thanks to babekitty_92 for the banner posted on my profile page (it’s actually a link, since I can’t post pictures).