To my dearest readers,
As you can see, I have deleted all but one of my stories (and the reason Before Her Eyes remains is because I am not the sole author). After much thought, I have decided to leave MNFF. I have not been around for the last six months and it doesn't seem that I'm going to magically get any more free time for quite a while. This makes me rather sad, but it is definitely time for me to move on.
If you wish to contact me for any reason, please message me on the Beta Forums. I'm not active on there, but I will get an email alert if I receive a message, and I will get back to you as soon as I can.
Thank you all for you support over the past few years; I will certainly miss you.
Good luck with the future and never stop reading or writing.
-Azhure
How can a boy protect his best friend from things he can’t even see?
Hey Lyd! It's Azhure
You already know how I feel about this amazing surprise, but I thought I'd leave a review anyway.
Your writing is beautiful, love. You captured James' emotions over Sirius' nightmares so perfectly that I thought I would melt!
Sirius, when he didn’t burn as bright as the star after which he was named, was like a magnificent bloom that wilted. It was dreadful to watch something so glorious fail.
This in particular jumped out at me. Such a beautiful simile
Sirius’ hand came up, his long fingers touching James’ neck gently, with feather-light touches. “This helps,” he said quietly. “I don’t have them when you’re around.”
Awww... *has melted*
Thanks again, dear. I owe you so much! *hugs*
~~Azhure~~
Ooo! *hugs her Kat and Rhi* I have to say that I do have a soft spot for Sirius/Rosmerta fics, and this one was perfect! You captured Rosmerta's boredom about her job, and can definitely see that she would get sick of the daily repetition. Like Carole, I was relieved that Sirius was genuinely nice to her, instead of just wanting her as a one-night thing. But, of course, I didn't expect either of you to write him like that, because you're both awesome!
Sorry I don't have anything really constructive to say, but I just could resist reviewing this, even though I should be doing homework. >.>
*hugs*
~~Azhure~~
Hey BB, it's Azhure.
Wow, this poem is amazing. So powerful, and I like how you only add the proper punctuation after he comes to his senses. I can't really find any major problems in this, which is great! The poem flows perfectly and you definitely get your point across -- you don't babble like I do in poems. Very nice.
But, if you do want some critique, the second last line doesn't flow as well as it should. I think it's a bit short, but that's only a minor problem. :)
Great poem!
Adieu!
~~Azhure~~