Some stuff about moi:
I live in London, which is totally the best city in the world. =)
I fell in love with Harry aged 7, when my friend sent me a copy of Philosophers Stone, and all these years later, I'm still a fan.
My fave character is Snape. Why did he have to die?? *sob*
I'm still waiting for my letter from Hogwarts. (Sad, I know..)
What can i say? Wow, wow and wow again.. this fic is just...amazing! I discovered it last week and was absolutely hooked, finishing it in a couple of days despite its length.So I felt it really deserved a long (and rambling) review.
I thought your characterisation (ugh, have no idea how to spell that word) of Remus was spot on, it was as if you had got right inside his head. I think he's one of JKR's most subtle characters and hard to get right, but you really capture his struggle to deal with his condition, and whether to tell Lindi.. and yet its not ever depressing. In fact thats another thing I love about this story, the humour. Your Marauaders are sooo funny! Interesting how you showed Peter...he seems much less of an outsider than I would have thought. Sirius is the typical ladies man *sigh* and but there are little touches, like his hostility to Lindi that make this story unique. I like how, while you centre this fic around Remus, you get a real sense of the relationships between the ther characters. The James/Lily hints are especially cute. :)
I love how you built up the relationship between Remus and Lindi, keeping us waiting for their first kiss for about 40 chapters! The anticipation is definitely the best part lol. And I do like Lindi as well! although I wish she would stand up for herself more!
The one (tiny) criticism I have is that your use of British slang is sometimes not quite right. Like I don't think Remus would use the word 'shag' to his mum. I know he was annoyed but its quite crude and not really in character. Its really hard to get that kind of thing right if you're not British though.
Overall though I think this fic is really impressive, one of the best I've read. And...you have made me fall in love with Remus...
Author's Response: *beams* Wow, thank you for this wonderful review. *happy dances all round for falling in love with Remus* Yayyyy!!! Of course, you realize he is mine, but you may definitely love him from afar. ;) I strongly approve of that.
I plead guilty to ladies man Sirius. Alas, I am convinced he would be that. Honestly, I wouldn't have him any other way. *not a fan of romantic one-woman man teenaged Sirius* Now, I don't want him chasing girls here there and yonder, but being chased...definitely. Enjoying the perks of being a hottie, indubitably. LOL
Yes, I kept you waiting. Ha. No one can accuse me of rushing the relationship. *dies* And I'm so glad to know you like Lindi! Thank you for saying so.
Uh, oh, my British Slang....hmm...I didn't think it was that crude a word. :*/ I mean, it is obviously not g rated, but I didn't think it was *that* bad. *shouldn't take Austin Powers so lightly* LOL I wanted it to show his annoyance and to shock his mother a little, but of course, it doesn't take much to shock poor Rena. :P I'll look at it again. I have tried to get a Brit Picking beta, along with a male one for that perspective, but can't seem to get anyone to take on this monster fic. *pout* *huggles her wonderful dedicated non-male, non-Brit beta* That is why I need my readers to keep me in line. Thank you for pointing it out.
Thank you again, VoldemortsTwinSister, for this really lovely review.
Sequel to 'The Cause'
I just read this all in one go, and wow! I loved your earlier fic, The Cause (soz I don't think I ever left a review though :P) and reading this sequel it's amazing how much your writing has matured and developed. Not that your earlier work wasn't great too, this just feels more, erm, grown up I guess? :P
I didn't expect this story to be so serious but it's impressive that you can pull off dark and depressing just as well as funny and light hearted. It was heartbreaking to see Remus and Marty's relationship fall apart, I kept hoping they'd find a way to get back together and literally had a tear in my eye reading the final chapter. But at the same time the ending felt really realistic and true to the characters.
I also like how you managed to fit everything in perfectly with events from the actual books.
Overall beautifully written and i look forward to reading more of your work! :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I wanted, not only to write something a bit darker and "grown up", like you said, but also to attempt to reconcile The Cause with canon as much as possible - one of the things about creating OCs in the Marauder Era is that you have to explain where they go, and usually that means killing them off - but that's not something I wanted to do with Marty at all! So thank you for picking up on those two things, it means all the world, and thank you for the review! =)