Hey! My name is Chris. I'm sixteen years old, a Sophomore in High School once it starts, and I love to run. Harry Potter is probably my favorite book series ever, and I love writing fanfiction when I get the time. (Which unfortunately isn't very often and when I do it's in a notebook, not on here.)
I used to be more into humor fics, but I'm starting to read L/J more. I read Marauder Era fics a lot, too. I'm obsessed with the Marauders and Lily Evans. I loved the Phoenix movie, but I could still make a very long list of things I didn't like about it. I was crushed that they cut out Snape's Worst Memory, but then again, if they wouldn't have I would have been more dissappointed that Sirius and James weren't cute.
I love my friends. I can trust several of them with just about anything. I trust them more than it is probably a good idea to trust most people. They could blackmail me if they wanted to. Luckily, they don't. I really appreciate how comfortable some of my guy friends and I are. They'll lean over and whisper "she's hot!" without a second thought about it. I really appreciate it when their next comment is "but her skirt is too short." They resect me, and vise-versa. I know they'd respect me enough to tell me if MY shorts were a little too short.
As far as boks, other than HP, I love, love, LOVE the Left Behind and Left Behind serieses. They're the awesomest ever :) I'm always reading something, but that's my thing right now :)
My favorite Movie (debaitably) after the Phoenix and GoF would have to be the Pirates of the Carribean (The Black Pearl). The second one was great and I totally loved it, but the 1st was just better. Also, Johnny Depp and Orlando Bloom... They are amazing. Haha.
I love Contemporary Christian and Country music. Casting Crowns is with no doubt my favorite band in the history of the universe, and Jeremy Camp is a close second.
I've gotta live in the smallest town in Ohio, and our K-12 school is really little. This year I'm running track and cross country again. CC is the awesomest sport ever in the history of awesome sports. I love how close we all are on the team.
I play trumpet in the marching band and I'm in the Science Olympiad, which pretty much makes me the biggest geek ever, but I'm okay with that. At least most of my friends are on the teams.
Random fact about me- I spelled my name wrong on the morning of the spelling bee last year.
BOOKS & MOVIES
Did you cry when Sirius died? Almost. I had a huge bloody blister looking thing on my lip from chewing on it and it wouldn't go away for a couple weeks.
What about Dumbledore? I was devastated. Ditto the lip thing that nobody wanted to know.
Do you like the movies as much as the books? No, but I loved the GoF and Phoenix movies.
Hottest HP actor? Tom Felton and Robert Pattinson.
What scene did they leave out in the movie you wish they hadn't? I can never decide if I wanted them to cut Snape's Worst Memory or not becuase it's my favorite scene in book 5 and maybe even in the first 6 books, but I havent sen it yet (anxious for the DVD to come out!), so I can't make that call yet. **My DVD doesn't have special features... does anyone else's??
Favorite movie moment? Hermione just being annoying in the 1st one. Or Ron just being an idiot. That's always fun :) Then maybe after the 2nd task in the Gof. Hermione was really funny there, too :)
Least favorite movie moment? Whenever Dumbledore is there after the first 2 movies. It's not just a differant actor, they made him a hippie. Gag me. I mean, he has jingle bells in his beard, and you can hear them when he talks.
Favorite character in movie? Today it is Alan Rickman as Snape. (That might change tomorrow, I can never decide.) I'm a little nervous about him in the DH movie though. I just can't picture him in (spoiler!) his death scene ("Look at me") or sobbing in Dumbledore's office, devistated over Lily's death. I hope he'll suprise me and pull it off wonderfully. :)
Favorite Movie? Mmmmm... I'd have to say Phoenix. I loved it so much :)
Right now, I'm writing my 1st fic- "Hard to Find, Difficult to Leave, Impossible to Forget". I suprized myself by writing a romance fic (It's L/J). I never do stuff like that. I'm such a tomboy. :) It took me ages to finally be satisfied with the way my 1st chapter ended up, but I'm getting there. My life is incredibly hectic, but it's summer, so my schedule is slowed down a little. I'll try to type up the rest of it quicker than I have been :) Oh, and thank you to my wonderful beta, Emily. She's so awesome :) Thanks so much, Emmi :)
Well, that was practically a book right there :) I'll shut up for now :)
:) Update, please!!! This is REALLY good!!!
This is a really cool fic, and I like it a lot, but you really can't write a cliffhanger, then wait 3 months to submit the rest!!!
I liked this one! :) Write more!!! What's wrong with Dumbledore??? Can't wait for the next chapter! I added this to my favorites. Now I'm going to read some of your other fics!!!
It is ambitious Lily Evans' 7th and final year at Hogwarts. She is very excited about being one step closer to becoming an Auror and thrilled about being back to school altogether.
But there is one little annoyance: the Marauders. Specificially arrogant James Potter. He has been pestering her to go out with him, but she has coldly denied his wishes. She thinks this year will be no different to the past six school years.
But life is full of mistakes.
..::~!~::.."Just one minute.” Lily noticed footsteps heading in her direction. She saw a hand reach from between the screens and drop a flower onto her bedside table.
“Mr. Potter! Return to your dormitory immediately!”
“Alright, alright…” The hand disappeared.
Once Lily was sure that no one was in the wing, he lifted her head and saw what flower Potter had dropped.
Lily stuffed her head in her pillow and screamed a muffled scream that no one could hear.
Hmm, Lily is sure taking for granted how much James is in love with her...
Haha!!! I loved your tying in the trick step here :)
Aaw, I love how the boys are scared to leave Lily by herself. It reminds me of my guy friends and how much they like to think that they'll always be able to protect me. :) I;ve said this before, but I love how you show the relationships between the characters!!
Aw, I love little glimses of Alice Longbottom. I dunno why since we never really saw her in the series, but I;m really attatched to her, probably because Neville was s oattatched to her :)
"Slytherins aren’t the only ones I should he careful of." I liked this line. It showed me that Lily's still reaaally cautious about jumping into a relationship. It's like hugging someone who's just been in an accident- love hurts.
“Fine… Then you’d better not loose next week’s match against Ravenclaw...." You mean lose?
The idea of that chapter was kinda weird, but you pulled the details off wonderfully.
Aaw, poor Lily. Wow, summertime is sure making me a night-owl. Oh well. I liked the way you portrayed the chic-fight- those are hard to write. I liked the way you captured Lily being backed into a corner. I've been there, not fun.
I loved James's reaction to Lily's asking him to "stop being tall." Being five foot, two inches, I've used these words many times before, and I appreciate it when people slouch a little for me without making fun. (It IS uncomfortable to talk to someone much taller than you when you're short. I have a friend who's exactly a foot taller than me and he has to steer me through the halls at school when we talk.) Thanks for portraying JAmes in a way that makes me absolutly fall in love with him.
Aw, I hate Peter so much, but I feel so bad for him! You must be a great writer to make me fell both ways at once :)
What did you mean by "She supposed Sirius didn’t let from the red rash on James’ face afterwards."?
Aaaw, where's Jamesie?? Is he okay? Update as fast as you can!!
-Chris
Oh, you wrote this three years ago. Aaw, it's a shame you abandoned it; I wouldn't have started reading it in the first place had I realised that :(
You did a really awesome job capturing Sirius's character! He's one of my favorite characters and I love reading about him when it's written well.
I liked when you wrote '“Ha, ha. You.” Sirius then did a crude imitation of James. “‘Oh, Lily, let me carry your bags!’ ‘Oh Lily, you look absolutely stunning today.’ ‘Oh, Lily!’ Just ask her out already, moron!”' That just sounded like a Sirius thing to say.
I also loved how James and Sirius are just hanging out dueling in the middle of the train station and Remus's reaction to this- telling them to stop, but not doing anything about it.
I didn't like the phrase "His lungs were fit to burst" at the end, it felt a bit cliche, but I loved everything else about this fic!!
-Chris
The chapters setting up Lily's friends are aloways tough because nobody "knows" them and they tend to get really really boring for anyone who doesn't know them as well as the author does. That being said, this chapter was alright.
I thought it was a little weird that James is totally out, his friends take him away (still not conscious) and Lily sits down and reads a book. I would haev thought it more in her character to get someone to help them out, at the very least.
It says "your future it kind of boring" instead of "is".
"He was astonishingly handsome, even though he was a bit arrogant." I didn't like how you used the word "arrogant" because it's so cliche with James. It's one adjective you're bound to find whatever Marauder fic you read. (I know you weren't describing James there, but that was the first place I saw it used.)
And do you pronounce Maya "my-uh" or "may-uh"?
Aaaw, everyone's attacking you for not updating. I'm sorry for adding to it! I'm sure you must be busy. (But, um... I'd love an update on this:)
I LOVE all of the boys' reactions to each other and the way you've captured Peter. He's one I've always had trouble sorting out. I also loved James's immediate conclusion that since Lily doesn't want him to die, she must be in love with him.
You don't need that comma in the last sentence "James’s blood began to boil, furiously."
I'm really enjoying this fic! :)
Nice chapter :)
I liked: "James took a sharp intake of breath, teeth gritted together. 'I’m gonna prove to Lily that I’m not an immature, foolish hot-headed kid.'
'Wow… that is going to be pretty hard considering you are one…' Sirius said thoughtfully." It really showed their relationship well. They just push each others buttons over and over and over but never fully push each other over the edge. :)
“'I’m fine, actually. Its just a little scratch.'” This made me smile... Cuz I love Monty Python... The first time I watched it it was about 3 in the afternoon and I had gotten about three hours of sleep the night before and five or so for the last five days before that... Gotta love travel busses.
"He was wearing a Slytherin head boy badge." Do you mean a Slytherin Prefect badge? There's only one Head Boy...
"eyes as empty as a cookie jar once placed in front of Sirius..." Haha I like this similie. It seemed out-of-place in such a serious situstion, though.
"and he waved to them, arrogantly." Try "pompously." The word "arrogant" is soooo overused with James...
“'Is your girlfriend dead?' a cute, innocent voice asked." Haha. I love little kids. That was pretty cute. Are you going to bring this kid back? The only thing with this is that people write about first years like they're first graders... I dunno if that's something an eleven-year-old would say, but it was pretty cute anyway.
“'It looks more like Remus after full moon.' Sirius began to laugh, but he fell silent instantly, after seeing Remus glaring at him." So Sirius does know when to shut up... It's good that you've shown that Sirius knows how far he can push his friendsbefore they explode.
I loved “'Voldemort!' Sirius coughed. The entire hall flinched at the sound of the name, except for James, Remus, and Dumbledore." It showed how Sirius just doesn't care. He's just in his own world.
“'That will be enough, Mr. Black,' Dumbledore warned. Sirius, however, seemed very pleased with himself at being called 'Mr. Black' because he sat up straighter and smiled." I liked this. It showed that Sirius is a guy... Well, you know what I mean. He just wants respect.
"Sirius stuck out his tongue at James and James stuck it back." I'd use "his" not "it" cuz it took me a second to decide if he was shoving Sirius's tongue back into his mouth... I liked that they're sticking out tongues at each other. They're "big kids" but they still goof off and are completly silly.
Another good chapter :) I like how James brought Lily a flower because I love flowers... :)
"On the opposite side was a boy with sallow skin and black hair. None of them were smiling…" With the DH out you'll have to have her awknowledge that Lily knows Snape... it'd actually be pretty easy to fix- just do something like add her saying "Hey, Sev..." then she gets beat up and either she wonders what he was doing, or have her catch him looking troubled by all of this, or omit him from this scene.
"All the recollections came rushing back to Lily like a shotgun." I'd use "like a bullet" since guns don't tend to move much theselves... I like your similies :)
"She’s five, you know…" That made me smile. It helped me understand your character Madame Curtis. I love sweet old ladies :)
I love Juli and Remus!! I like Juli's reactions to him because it reminds me very much of myself.
"Potter… was… acting/being… mature..." Try 'acting... or being...' because it's really informal this way.
"...her kind wandered to Potter’s lily..." You mean her mind? :)
"James wished that he could find out if Julianne liked Moony, but he hadn’t figured out a way to get that information without rousing suspicion." I liked this because it's something I see my guy friends doing. They're really careful when they want to be.