10/25/07
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The Epic Tale of the Hogwarts Food-fight by Gin_Drinka
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: "Some mistakes are too much fun to make just once."
After Lily Evans, Head Girl of Hogwarts, starts a food-fight with James Potter, Head Boy of Hogwarts, they are both given detention for the rest of the year, and are assigned a 'detention journal', which the staff say will help to settle their 'overwhelming and disturbing differences'. We have come across Lily's journal; her take on why the whole affair ever started, her intriguing relationship with one ‘supreme git of the galaxy’, the extents to which she will go for revenge and where it will lead her...
"And if for some unknown reason you come across this, Potter, and the paragraph above does not manage to penetrate your unusually thick head and convince you of my stupendous dislike of you, I hope the following sentence helps: I HATE YOU!"
Date: 09/11/10 Title: Chapter 13: 37th Detention... and my confession under duress
Great story! Their antics make me laugh every chapter and Lily's slow realization of James' true character is spot on and really believable. Don't take too long getting the next chapter up! I can't wait to see Lily finally do something about her feelings.
Fate's Toll by Aria Gray
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Harry has been on the run from both friends and enemies for five years, alone and unable to do magic. Finally, someone from his past catches up with him and Harry is forced to tell his story. The truth is more shocking than anyone could have expected.
Date: 01/17/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
please please don't leave it like this. please post the sequel! we all want to know what happens!!!
Date: 01/17/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
please please don't leave it like this. please post the sequel! we all want to know what happens!!!
What If? by Mem_Marie
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: What if something came, something so unexpected and unbelievable, that it had the power to change your whole life? A secret of such overwhelming power and horror, that you were forced to change not only yourself, but the way you saw the world as whole?
We all fancy we know the Potters; mischievous and powerful James, beautiful and strong Lily. But how do we know? In the end, might they have just been human?
[Dark and extremely AU; you have been warned…]
Date: 02/15/08 Title: Chapter 1: And This Is How It Starts
This is really interesting, I can't believe James and Lily would just leave like that, but I think I can see where this is going - the both of them surviving, and meeting Harry years later. This is a good idea and I can't wait to see how the plot unfolds.
Update soon!
Author's Response:
Well, looks like you\'ve already got the plot figured out! I promise to make as engaging as possible though, k? 8D
And as to the doubtfulness that Lily and James would ever just leave - I\'m totally with you. They for sure wouldn\'t – not in canon. But that is why it\'s all under AU. It really is a fascinating idea to entertain, yeah?
Anyways, thanks for the review! I always appreciate feedback
Changed by Aevylonya
Rated: Professors •Summary: Three years have passed since Voldemort fell, but nothing is as it should be. The Order is struggling against a group of dark wizards with an unknown agenda, and no one has seen nor heard from Harry since the battle. Many believe him to be dead, and the Order fears that he has been taken captive. Meanwhile, this new uprising of dark magic poses a greater threat to the wizarding world than the Order could ever imagine...
Date: 05/27/08 Title: Chapter 3: Different
Another great chapter! Who's POV (if anyone's) are the italized words in?
Author's Response: Ah, well, the POV of the voice in italics shall remain a mystery, for now. You should be able to figure it out after the next couple of chapters, though. Thanks for reviewing! Next chapter will be up soon.
Date: 05/15/08 Title: Chapter 2: The Little Things
I love this so far! It'll be really interesting to see how you play this out, and all the changes you made from the books: how Harry turned evil; why he did; Remus being alive, etc. One qualm I have though is I want to know more background to what is going on; because you have changed some of the plot, somethings little things can be confusing. This may all be explained later, and I'm rambling now, but all in all this is definitely a story for the favourites - and I have pretty high standards for that list!
Keep the updates coming!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love long, constructive reviews! Don\'t worry though, plenty of explanations for changes, etc., will come. Chapters 7 & 8, especially, will be pretty thorough as to the reasons for Harry\'s change. I find fanfictions that have Harry going evil with no plausible cause rather weak, so mine won\'t be one of those, that I can promise you! I have finished chapters 1 through 7, so I will add them with about a week\'s margin, I can imagine.\r\n\r\nAgain, thank you so much for the constructive review - please continue to read! The next chapter will be up in about a week.
Date: 08/30/08 Title: Chapter 5: Thoughts and Apologies
Great chapter! The italics are still kind of confusing, but at the end of this chapter, it seemed like Harry was writing down his memoirs. Or like the italics is all part of a really long speech to a victim of his in the future. I'm very excited to see how this turns out! Oh! And I love how you're incorporating stuff from the 6th book. Update soon!
Date: 08/30/08 Title: Chapter 5: Thoughts and Apologies
Great chapter! The italics are still kind of confusing, but at the end of this chapter, it seemed like Harry was writing down his memoirs. Or like the italics is all part of a really long speech to a victim of his in the future. I'm very excited to see how this turns out! Oh! And I love how you're incorporating stuff from the 6th book. Update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love your reviews; they're always very constructive. And something you said in this one is dangerously close to being 100% correct. But I won't say what. I'm thinking you can probably guess though... Anyway, thanks again! The next chapter will hopefully be up sometime next week.
As It Is by Pendraegona
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Bridges fell, Muggles were murdered, a wave of despair swept over Britain...and two dentists moved to Australia.
Wendell and Monica Wilkins had no children, but that was fine with them--all they had ever wanted, after all, they had found in the quiet town of Charters Towers.
Or rather, the daughter they didn't know they had loved them enough to let them go.
I am Pendraegona, and this is my submission to the Worlds Within a World challenge.
Date: 06/30/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This was very well written, however, in DH while explaining to Harry how she obliviated her parents memories, she then also says that if they ever come back from the Horcrux hunt alive, she will track them down and lift the charm. I'm just curious where you got your information about memory charms being permanent. But great story none the less.
Author's Response: A chocolate frog for pointing that out.\r\n\r\nJK has been my hero since I was ten, but consistency isn\'t really her strong point. There is that part you mentioned and I forgot/disregarded, but other than that, I\'ve never heard of a memory charm being \"lifted\". It\'s doesn\'t seem to be like jelly legs or body binds, etc. where there is a simple counterjinx. I tried to cross-reference the times memory charms have come up using the lexicon and trying to figure out the specifics of the Bertha Jorkins and Gilderoy Lockhart cases. While the memory charm had to be recast frequently on Mr. Roberts in GOF, that was because there were continual wizarding slips--as far as I can see, there aren\'t any references to memory charms being successfully removed. Perhaps I\'m just averse to the idea that there\'s a magical fix to almost everything. I\'m really glad you brought it up, though--someone ought to start a thread on the forums for this.
The Dunnest Smoke of Hell by Scarlet Crystal
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Harry Potter lies face down in the dirt, surrounded by a ring of Death Eaters in the Forbidden Forest. Narcissa Malfoy approaches, lowering hand to the boy's chest to see if he yet lives. Everyone knows what happens next: Narcissa announces Lord Voldemort's triumph as Harry plays dead. What if, in this crucial moment, Bellatrix did not trust her feckless sister? What if she strode past her celebratory comrades and knelt by the Dark Lord's fallen enemy, wishing to feel for herself the absence of the boy's heartbeat? This is the story of that tragic turn of events.
Date: 10/16/08 Title: Chapter 1: I.One.
I love this! It's such a great idea to explore. Bellatrix's, Lucius', and Voldemort's characters were especially in character. This chapter was very gripping. I can't wait to read more!
Date: 03/09/09 Title: Chapter 4: I.Four.
This was so good! You really made my heart cry for Hermione, as well as the rest of them! This story is really great and this is clearly one of the cases where a story goes under appreciated because of hard subject matter; it deserves a heap more reviews than it's got! I know I'm not one to talk as I don't review much myself, but people: GIVE THIS STORY A CHANCE!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your generous review! I certainly hope other readers get around to giving it a chance. More chapters on the way, of course...
What Better Way by MagEd
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: I hadn't seen him since I was eleven, but he had a rather distinct look about him. It was hard, after all, to forget that black hair that stuck up in the back and the bright green eyes behind those glasses. And the scar — I had always thought it neat to have a scar shaped like a lightening bolt.
Jane Martin sees the odd, quiet boy she went to primary school with years ago in a jewellery shop and she's shocked to see how much things have changed for the boy with taped glasses and baggy clothes. *one-shot*
Date: 09/27/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
So adorable! I can completely imagine a curious Ginny and a ruffled Harry, trying to explain himself. My brain is overloaded with all the fluff!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
The Vindication Of James Potter by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary:
"James Sirius Potter, it is the judgment of the Wizengamot that you have been found guilty. You knowingly, in possession of sound mind and body, used the Cruciatus Curse and the Killing Curse in the intentional torture and murder of one Gregory Goyle the Third."
James Potter was going to Azkaban for the rest of his natural life, and his whole family was in shambles. His wife and child have fled the country, his sister was missing, and his parents were a wreck. However, James knew that he had larger problems: his guilt was coming more and more in question.
Though he knew that James was withholding information about the circumstances of the murder of which he had been found guilty, Harry had secrets of his own; however, even he could not handle this torrent of trouble alone. Can Harry trust his darkest confidences to anyone? Even family?Â
How will the Potter clan stop the downward spiral into pain and disaster, and can they recover what they've lost?
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This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Next-Generation Story.
Date: 10/20/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
I love this concept, it's so interesting, so different. I can't wait to find out why James feels Goyle deserved his fate and what Lily has to do with this. Two things I think could be improved though: first, the characters' dialogues are often too formal so it doesn't make them seem 'real', so to speak. Try to make them speak as you would. For example, use Dad instead of Father, etc. Second, if you are using point of views, try to keep it to one POV per chapter or section but don't change POV's every few paragraphs.
Good work, and update soon!
Author's Response: Ah, the old POV problem. I wrote it the way I did because this story is largely POV oriented, and it has everything to do with the development of the plot. In JKR's story, a majority of the story was oriented around Harry, but in this tale of mine, there really is no main character. The story itself is almost the main character, and the supporting cast is used as a tool to keep the story going.
And the dialogue...would it surprise you if I said I really do talk like that? I'm a total vocabulary dork. Thanks for the review, and the update will be up as soon as they pass it through the queue.
Bottle Understanding by Potterworm
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: If Snape hadn't transferred his grudges onto a student, and Harry hadn't hated his professor as a result, they wouldn't have been friends or allies, but perhaps there would have been a grudging respect between them.
Date: 03/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Bottle Understanding
Oh, this was very good! I especially loved the last paragraph: it summed up the whole story perfectly and was really thought-evoking!!
Author's Response: I'm really very glad that you liked it. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
The Note He Left by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
A note was discovered in the aftermath of Harry's capture at Malfoy Manor. It's sweet, it's romantic, it's...complete fluffy rubbish.
What will happen to this heartfelt missive? Will it find its intended recipient, or will it be lost in the wreckage of Voldemort's former occupation?
Date: 05/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dearest Ginny
Ooh finally, you write a Harry/Ginny piece!! I had to double-check a couple times to make sure this was actually you! Lol.
Wonderful piece of Draco characterization you have here; you captured his thoughts and feelings after the war perfectly, as well as his ever-evolving maturity. And Harry's letter was so sweet and heart-felt.
Great job! Keep it up!
Amber
Author's Response:
Aww, thank you, Amber. I may hate this story pretty passionately, but it seems to have gone over quite well. It's been read more in the past 4 hours after being validated than some of my other (much better) pieces, lol.
I added Draco to this to keep my own interest, honestly. He and Harry are the two characters in the Potterverse that I understand on the deepest level. I wanted Harry to write Ginny a letter and never send it, but I also wanted Draco to understand that he owed Harry his life. Sure, rescuing someone from Azkaban does not equal message delivery, but that's not how a Slytherin's mind works, lol.
Thanks for reading/reviewing, and I look forward to reading more of TBitR, which I'm assuming is on hold until school lets out (which makes a ton of sense). Until we cross paths again...
Jess
Long Road to Nowhere by Inclination
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: "Peter probably hates you, you know." A look at Sirius' life from the age of thirteen to his death, focussing on his relationships with the Marauders, especially Peter.
Date: 07/12/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This was so, so beautiful because you managed to create a tangible, obvious abyss between the Marauders and Peter, and yet still managed to maintain their naivete at the same time. Sirius realizes that Peter is being pushed away, and yet he doesn't see the full consequences of that until it's too late. And at the end, where Sirius asks Remus whether he thinks Peter hated him was just wonderful and sad.
Just wonderful! Keep it up!
Amber
Author's Response: Thankyou :) I'm glad you liked the Sirius and Remus interaction. Those two are just my absolute faves <3
The Sound Inside a Shell by Alice in Potterland
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: "Voldemort meant little to us then. It was just a name our frightened parents tossed around. They had grown up during Grindelwald's reign - knew nothing but fear. They were paranoid. To us, fear was tangible only in the moments spent considering another loss to Slytherin on the pitch."
Wedged comfortably between two eras of turmoil, the students of Hogwarts never imagined they'd go down fighting. Life at school was defined by teenage rebellion, tough classes, and nail-bitingly exciting Quidditch games. Grindelwald's defeat was news of the past, but some told of a new dark wizard on the rise by the name of Lord Voldemort...
But for Alice Emerson and Lily Evans, for Potter and Black and the rest of her class, that was simply irrelevant. The outside world stopped at Hogwarts' gates until tragedy in their fifth year brought it violently to the forefront.
Date: 07/20/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: Another Day at the Office
Interesting beginning! And Harry's characterization is spot on with how I always imagined after.
Author's Response: Thanks! After the teenage years he had, I think Harry'd be thirsting for adventure. :)
Falling, Fighting, and Firewhiskey by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
James was living the dream. He was the star player on England's 2030 Quidditch World Cup team, and he was showing the world how it was done. That was, of course, until foul play sent his world asunder.
Albus saw his brother's livelihood snatched away in the blink of an eye, but more than that, James was...different. He was cold, angry, and callous - a far cry from the man he was before. Harsh words and even harsher attitudes put them at each other's throats.
Date: 08/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
This was really good! You did a great job of showing James struggling not to fall apart from his injury all while keeping it in someone else's POV who wasn't sure what was going on all the time. And I can totally image James and Al brawling it out over the coffee table, and Harry wanting to pull out his hair b/c of it!
Keep it up,
Amber
Author's Response:
Hello, Amber. :D
These two are my favourite minor characters. I just feel like I know them, so writing them together just seems so easy an dnatural for me. I just always imagined that James is the impressive athlete, whereas Albus is afraid of heights.
This started off as a series of drabbles for a SPEW activity, and I decided to write a serieal, mostly because I couldn't be bothered to come up with an original idea for every prompt. I decided to submit them as a story of their own, because the story kind of wraps itself up.
Thanks for reviewing, and it's lovely to hear from you again. Take care, and I hope ot see you around again soon.
~Jess