05/06/05
A Gryffindor in the MNFF forum. I'm coming back from a long hiatus from fan fiction writing - I'm slowly but surely getting my writing fingers back into shape.
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The Daughter of Light by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: An Irish witch languishes in the darkness of her family home, confined by her father and circumstances. What will it take to bring her out of this exile? The chance to return to Hogwarts? The opportunity to participate in the fight against Voldemort and his Death Eaters? Or will it be Severus Snape, a man she did not expect to see again in her lifetime?
This is canon compliant to OoTP but written pre-HBP.
Reviews and constructive criticism are most welcome, and thanks go to Ashwinder who kindly beta read the chapters for me. :-)
Date: 02/12/06 Title: Chapter 3: A Discordant Note
*stares warily at the nitpickers below* The horrors *giggle* of being placed under SPEW scrutiny. *lol* Guess it's a good thing that they only picked on little typos or word suggestion *lol* because otherwise there's nothing more to pick on. The descriptions are amazing, I was too engrossed in it that I hardly notice anything.
I like the smart-alecky exchange between Snape and Remus. You mangaed to do this and still maintain that they're mature adults. :)
Date: 07/13/05 Title: None
You've weave this whole new world so masterfully. It doesn't feel like the usual HP fics at all ... it's darker and somewhat unknown / original fiction element (since we are altogether unfamiliar with this new setting of yours) as well as magical ones, but we know it's HP because of elements that stayed true to the canon. I love how you made this possible.
Date: 02/11/06 Title: None
Good Start I like the banter between Marietta and Cho. It really depicts the friendship they have. I sort of shows why she defended her against Harry. Great ending as well ... Hope you'll continue this.
And Fate Be.... by Seren
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: "No one stops to consider for a moment why I'm so dependent on those books of mine, why I have so many. I am different. I do not prattle, I do not gossip, I do not twirl my hair and flutter my lashes. Clothing is meant to cover my nakedness, not flaunt my body. I am not covered in cosmetics, nor do I read the silly rags that the girls in my dorm read. I seek knowledge, and truth. I want permission to be myself. I want to walk down the halls of my school, of my world, without hearing the half-whispered remarks about me. I want to sit with my friends, and know that they appreciate my company, and not the fact that I can revise their homework. I want to live." A moment in Hermione's life, where she contemplates her past, present, and future.
Date: 02/04/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
Amazing how much of Hermione you've captured in this short piece. I especially like how you reminded us that Neville was the first to befriend her and how she always try to help him because of that.
I love how you separate things to new paragraphs so to give them emphasis ... somehow like a free verse poetry (e.g. placing I want to live on it's own paragraph) . I had a suggestion for this line:
I read the silly rags that the girls in my dorm read. I seek knowledge, and truth.
And freedom. Love, I left behind a long time ago.
Although I would suggest that you place Love, I left behind a long time ago. on a new paragraph. It just seems to give more emphasis that way :)
Another very poetic and insightful piece. Great story, Seren!
Date: 02/11/06 Title: None
A Great start. I like the way you describe the setting in the beginning of this story.
Your OC Koreen and Theodore seems pretty fleshed out.
Good lUck and hope you continue writing.
The Worthy by Seren
Rated: •Summary: The Last Battle has begun, and the Last Stand is pitched in the Ministry of Magic. After Remus Lupin is felled, Harry and his closest friends defeat Voldemort, and Prophecy is fulfilled. But it is not the end; the Veil stands as Judge, Jury, and Executioner, and only the worthy may survive. Not a Sirius returns from the Veil fiction.
Date: 08/17/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Worthy (One-Shot)
I love your theory about the veil. The description of the battle scene in the beginning was great. I can almost picture it happening; but I especially love the descriptions of what happened to those rejected by the veil... it's graphic but not overly so. The voices from the veil simply fits about how Luna says she can hear it whisper in OOTP. I like how you gave Snape a believable redemption. The great thing about this fic is that it starts with action and then moved on to a bit of court room uhh... drama? (descriptive one) ...and finally comedy. ^_^ I love Snape's wit and Hermione's last comment. This fic is a rare piece of one-shot that's got a bit of everything.
Date: 03/09/06 Title: None
I usually see Draco as a mere spoiled brat... cocky but inside he's weak. This a different look to his persona. Although not the way I see Draco's family life ... it was well written. I like the flashbacks and especially the ending where Harry wakes up. It's something I don't read often ... and it connects. Great job!
The Unseemly Proposal by sparx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The reign of Voldermort comes to an end, and with it ends the prestige and power Lucius Malfoy once had in the Wizarding World. In order to regain the respect of his fellow wizards and to make them believe that he has turned over a new leaf (which he actually hasn't) and has graciously accepted muggles and Mudbloods, Lucius asks Hermione, a Mudblood, to marry his son, Draco, a pure-blood. Obviously, they both refuse, but Lucius isn't going to give up easily. After all, he wants his status back. He still has a few tricks up his sleeve and is determined to play match-maker. What happens next is a series of events that serve only to bring Hermione and Draco closer, both literally and figuratively speaking. Read to find out how this one unseemly proposal causes absolute chaos in their lives! THIS STORY IS NOT HBP and DH COMPATIBLE! Hey all! Check out my personal info for the expected date of the next update. =)
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23- Double Date
The part where Draco can't remeber Viktor doesn't seem realistic because Draco is a QUidditch fan. On GOf he went out of his way to speak to Krum ... Viktor Krum is afterall a Quidditch superstar.
Although I love your characterization of Draco and Hermione. Good story :) Sweet it doesn't forego the canon fact about Hermione's relationship with Viktor and that on Ron's feelings.
Author's Response: Hmmm, I suppose you mean during the Valentine’s Day chapter? I guess I wanted to show that it wouldn’t occur to Draco one tiny bit that she would be dating Viktor. To him, when Hermione told him “Viktor”, he could have easily taken it for anyone else. That’s why it took him a while to process the information. But you did make a good point; Krum is THE best Quidditch player in the world and Draco should know him all too well (especially since in GOF he was practically worshipping him). I'm glad you like the characters of Hermione and Draco, and the fact that I try my very best to stick with the cannon. =D thank you so much for the review!
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None
I just love how you depicted Snape. Those snappish ... or should I say Snape-ish comebacks are my fav.
Author's Response: Oh I do enjoy Snape's wit... Cheers!
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None
A volcano pimple? *lol* Snape always was pretty good at inventing his curses. Utterly evil of him...^_^ Can't wait to see her give that slimey git a dose of his own medicine. ^_^
Author's Response: Definately! Snape is great though, I hope she doesn't do him too much harm! Thanks!
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None
Harry thought Sirius was dead? ... ^_^ Emperor's new clothes *lol* Oh that's mean but he deserved it. *lol*
Author's Response: The perfect revenge. *evil cackle* And yes, I'm of the opinion Sirius is still alive, so he appears so in all of my fictions! Perhaps I'm delusional.... Thank you!
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None
There's a formating error: I passed them on my way out, joyful voices muttered :< /p>
That line: “Did you see how the hair on his back curled?” -- just had me laughing ... I can't believe I'm feeling sorry for Snape but ... *evil grin* The git deserves to be tortured a whole lot more.
Author's Response: I've just fixed it - thank you for pointing it out. I was trying to see the dqarker side of the Potions MAster... Perhaps I went a little too far. I'm glad you've enjoyed it! Thanks!
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None
*L* I agree he deserves that.... Dumbledore, such a sneaky and funny old guy he is ^_^
Author's Response: DUmbledore is a crafty little thing, poking his nose just about everywhere and who better to meddle with than the Irksome Potions Master - I can't begin to imagine who else would be as much fun! Glad you've enjoyed it! Thanks!
Squib Sequestered by wendelin_the_weird
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The time has come for one man to answer for his atrocities under Umbridge's regime.
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: (This is a one-shot)
So rare do I see a character study about Filch (of all people). To be honest, I never liked Filch, he's such a bitter and evil man (in my opinion) - yet you manage to make me to feel sorry for the guy.
I like that he's still so in character throughout this story - his flimsy justifications for his actions holds conviction because you made he sound as if he believe in them. You really managed to make Filch come alive in this story. ^_^
A Friendship Reforged by michelle_31a
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A missing moment from OotP, Ginny reflects on her relationship with Luna Lovegood.
Date: 03/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Friendship Reforged
Some corrections: Parenthesised means take-out and boldfaced add. :)
Ginny shook her head, holding her ankle protectivel(l)y
The Ravenclaw gave a heave and rolled the red-headed Gryffindor off (of) her.
she found herself standing in the middle of the road that led to Hogsmeade village proper.
Ginny caught sight of the Ravenclaw a bit further up the road, dragging along and old weather-beaten trunk behind her.
. She('d) didn't know anyone by that name, certainly not at Hogwarts.
All that aside love your characterization especially of Luna. The way she could be funny and ditzy and brutally honest. Oh and that part with Ron acting real doozy is pretty funny. I enjoyed reading this.
Maeve's Birthday. by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A companion piece to Snape's Birthday and a little off-shoot of Harry Potter and the Daughter of Light. It helps if you have read Daughter of Light but it's also a stand alone piece if you fancy a bit of spring magic.
Date: 03/18/06 Title: Chapter 1: Maeve's Birthday
a slight correction:
Love collided with the spiral(l)ing freedom of her spirit as it escaped the confines of her body.
As always I love your descriptions but the line that struck me is: “I won’t deny you have a sharp tongue but real cruelty involves much more than that. You have never hurt anyone, have you?”
because it's definitely true ... although sometimes people are deemed cruel because of the things they say. It's what they do that defines cruelty. And somehow she indirect struck him where it hurts because he had done things to people...
Lovely piece ... the emotions between Snape and Maeve is evident and subtle. I wish I can write romance the way you do. ^_^
Lycanthropy by MereRanger
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Based on Lupin's transformations into a werewolf and the horror that he must endure at every full moon. Warning: PG-13 because it might not be suitable for some. *A Shakespearean-style sonnet*
Date: 06/03/05 Title: Chapter 1: Lycanthropy
Beautiful! I just love Shakespeare. I admire poems like this. I myself have difficulty in following meters so rather not go there ^_^
P.S. You've inspired me to go massacre a bit of Shakespeare (just for fun) *L*
Author's Response: YES! I've corrupted another mind! Thanks for reading my poem and I hope you enjoy doing Shakespear a bit of damage (it can be quite entertaining at times)
An Insider's View by CCCC
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A series of one-shots from inside the minds of various characters. Different formats and styles for each character.
This is a past featured story, but from way back before they did rosettes for it. Bellatrix, Gargoyle, Ollivander, Sorting Hat, Filch, Rita (New)
Date: 07/13/05 Title: Chapter 2: A Guardian
This is so unusual and such a great read. Dumbledore's Gargoyle *L* I love the little details about what happened to the other gargoyles that were made with him and his rants about portraits. *L* It has never occured to me before how similar their jobs are. Although gargoyles seems a more prestigious choice of a guardian.
Poor guy ... *L* Dumbledore just has the weirdest tastes in passwords *lol* can see why he's frustrated *L*
I also want to say that the names for the gargoyles seemed fitting, they sound old and prestigious
The Avalon Chronicles by Scarlet Crystal
Rated: •Summary: King Arthur is a legend, but it has its routes in magic. Morgan le Fay, or Morgaine, or Morgan of the Fates, was a witch. She lived so long ago that she, too, has been reduced to legend. Avalon, the great magical place for true magic, existed. Powers greater than those of most wizards resided there. Here is its tale.
Date: 04/30/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Avalon Chronicles
It's not easy to write a story that moves at such a pace without using dialogues and you managed this amazingly.
I love how you started this to say that this story took place during the peak of the Roman Empire where they gained control of Britain. Thus a start of a whole new era. A time to 'Romanize' old beliefs and setting of new traditions.
Your story has just the rigt amount of vagueness to give it a mysterious feel of the old and forgotten ways.
Love the idea of a new cycle of the old ways and power fading to give way to the new. Although I still don't fully grasp how the new sword would help ... then again it does add to the mysterious and vague feel you've brought into this story.
Malicious Intentions by Lurid
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: This story follows the Trio, Bill Fleur and Ginny after Hogwarts, Engagements and Marriages... and children. Bill and Fleur's daughter Millie is haunted at Hogwarts by her younger sister. The only “abnormal” thing about this haunting? She was believed dead … but is most definitely alive.
Date: 05/23/05 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Prologue
This is certainly unique ... I've never encountered a Bill/Fleur fic before. Good job ... BTW I didn't read the next chapter yet because I'm afraid I'll get confused ... where's chapter 2 ... why is the next one labeled chapter 3?
Author's Response: Dont' worry Nutty, it's not your eyesight going! The mods accepted chapter 3 at the same time they rejected chapter 2, so I sent it in again for the 6th time a few days ago. Hopefully it will be 6th time lucky *crosses fingers and looks skyward*
Author's Response: Dang. Got rejected. Maybe 7th time lucky then...