Real name: Unknown
Age: 20!
Sex: Male
What I like to do: I love to listen music (yeah, cliché, I know), to write (what a genius), and to dive, whether it is free diving or scuba diving. I actually have my PADI Open Water license! That will allow me dive anywhere (although a river full of piranhas could prove to be a really bad idea ^_^' ).
Beta?: Yes, I am a beta Accredited by Perfect Imagination :D Well, at least I was... >.> It seems that due to inactivity my accout/accreditation got deleted. I'm still waiting a response from the admins, so I'll let you know!
Stories so far:
- "Wait for Me" (4 chapters; H/G and R/Hr)
- "Sleeping Sun" (one-shot; H/G with a bit of R/Hr)
-"As the Dusk Grows" (one-shot; J/L)
- "Come Back..." (one-shot; H/G)
- "Ocean Soul" (a one-shot about Tom Ryddle and how he lost his innocence)
- "Longing..." (My first poem, R/Hr!)
- "A Night At The Owlery" (It was a challenge entry: 'Write a scene from the books that could have been witnessed by an owl' It won the second place!)
- "Once" (My second poem. H/G)
- "Starlight Dreams" (My very belated chaptered fic).
- "Revival of Autumn" (This is a one-shot centered around Autism. For mature readers only. Not that I want to feel exclusive, but such a sensitive topic demands certain degree of matureness.)
WIP: I'm working in a long chaptered story named: "Starlight Dreams". Unfortunately, the beginning has been a tad slow given the problems of the queue and some other problems I had with chapter two, but I hope to get the rest sorted out from then on :)
Also, there's a one-shot called "Strangers" that will be submitted very soon!
Music: My favorite bands are Nightwish, Apocalyptica, Rhapsody, Avalanch, Metallica (the old one), Guns n' Roses, Helloween, Iron Maiden, Megadeth, Dream Theater... and more I can't recall now.
Books: I love Lord of the Rings, and any good book I can find. It can be about anything, as long as it is worth reading.
Instruments: I play piano, and a little bit of guitar, drums, but right now, one of my most desired ambitions is to learn how to play the cello.
Useless fact: Oh, and by the way, my first language isn't english, so please forgive me if you find any horrible spelling/grammar/punctuation mistake.
Recommendations: I want to recommend Narwen3's story: "To See You Through The Dark". It's an excellent story (not to mention completed)! You will surely have an incredible time reading it. Don't forget to leave your review :)
Oh, I was also beta-ing for this story: "Switched" by Cheslin. If you want a really original story, go check this one :) A story of how the cats of Hogwarts have an active life and role in the war literally under the noses of their masters :)
And at last, but not least, I would also like to recommend "Harry Potter and the Battle to the End" by lisa_lovegood (I know I haven't reviewed, Lisa, but I will!!).
All great stories :D
**NOTES**: Okay, I already got one chaptered rejected due to a too long author's note (amongst some other things. Don't think that the mods have treated me unfairly :p ). So I figured out that I could use this space to say all those things I wanted to say regarding each chapter, but that I couldn't. I warn you though, that they may contain spoilers, so only read them if you have already read the chapter.
-Chapter 1: The very first chapter (duh). I really gave a lot of thinking to this chapter, deciding if this was the way I wanted to start the story or not. I've read many stories that start with something very close to World War III, but I thought I'd prefer to start with some introductory chapters.
This chapter's purpose was to give heads up to the readers about Harry's current train of thoughts and feelings towards... everything.
-Chapter 2: Well, just for the record, I updated my lousy summary for something that is hopefully better :)
Ah, this chapter... the last 'introductory chapter' (at least in my mind. Still, this chapter hints about some... stuff that will later appear). You also get to know what's happened to Hermione and the Weasleys, what are their thoughts, etc.
Ah, I almost forgot! In this chapter you see a somewhat emotional Hermione that has a certain redhead in her head ;) Now, I'm aware that some could consider her OOC. However, I do not think she is OOC because she is a girl after all, and (in my mind) she is simply sometimes more sensitive.
In this story I'll try to show that other side the books don't show: Ron and Hermione's POV. I've always thought of Hermione as someone who, whilst it can cost her some trouble, is sensitive to her feelings. That's why I added her thoughts regarding Ron :) That's all for now (or until chapter three gets approved!).
-Chapter 3: It is not up yet, but I just wanted to explain why it has taken me such an awfully long time to put it in the site.
One reason I cannot explain at the moment... I know, I'm not being mysterious at all. It's just that I can't really say at the moment, but I will tell you as soon as I can. The next reason is that I had to find a beta! Fortunately, I'm very pleased with whom I now have the honour to work with :) And finally, the last reason is that I rewrote the whole chapter. The problem is that with the old version I never was completely pleased. Now though, I'm more than pleased with the new version! Right now it is at hands of my beta, and I'll submit it as soon as I get it.
~Astro
OceanSoul
Woot! First of all, having this box ready to review is one major improvement! Sometimes we are too lazy to click on reviews and then in submit a review :) Anyway... GREAT JOB! I was dying for this chapter! Just out of curiousity, I decided to check, and I was surprised to see: "Chapters: 46". Ahh, the sweet emotion of starting to read a new chapter, and the bitterness of finishing it :) Ok, now down to business. Well, before saying which one is my favorite part, I have to say that your descriptions were amazing! I know what you mean with the difficulty of writing them, but I think you were victorious! Their dialogue was not too short, but long enough (just the right length!). Now, my the parts I like the most (but not my favorite):
"But who?" Voldemort hissed viciously. "Who will be left to remember?"
Ron fought his way to the front of the crowd to stand at Harry's side.
Ahh, this part was awesome. But not only when Ron moved forward, but also when Hermione and Ginny did.
"Love rebuilds!" Hermione cried. "It takes more strength to build a mountain than to destroy it!"
"You've taken people that I love from me, and it hurts, but it's built me up to who I am." Harry drew himself up to his full height and extended Ginny's wand.
This was deep! :) I loved how you showed us, readers, how greatly important is to love rather than hate. I also loved the next part when Voldemort says something like: "I'm not a man. I'm a god." Very in character!
I liked also that Harry decided to talk only to The Quibbler. That's something I'm sure I hadn't seen ever before in another fanfic. Usually, after the last battle, Harry goes and gives a press conference or something of the sorts, but I liked your twist :D
Ah, Dumbledore's final instructions and words are also very deep and well thought. I liked what he says to Minerva, but I also loved the way Harry reacts afterwards. He has been through so much things with everything bottled up inside... it was only fair (?).
Finally, my favorite part... :
"Tomorrow," he announced to the room. "We celebrate those we've lost. Now is the time we mourn them."
They were the last words to be spoken that night. The darkness was spent in silence, all remembering as they shed tears for their friends.
Wow! One of your best scenes in my opinion. Words just in harmony with the situation, and the description just the right length to let us know how much they are hurting, and yet leave it to our imagination. I loved it!
Now, you must have heard this a lot of times before but: 10/10!!! (although I think the rating system is gone D: !)
Author's Response: I think one of the things I wanted the most out of this chapter was for the readers to see things the way I was envisioning it. I wanted to put the image in their minds and force out all preconceived notions on how it could have been.
The line \"I\'m not a man, I\'m a god!\" was from a one-shot that I submitted last year. It was rejected because they didn\'t think it could stand alone, and I didn\'t want to do another full story at the time. It was the line I missed the most and I was thrilled when I realized that I could use it here. The idea that Voldemort is so arrogant and in all his desires to never die, what he wants to be is a god. Of course, in mythology, many of the gods are destroyed due to hubris, or excessive pride.
Okay, history lesson over. Thanks for the fantastic review and I look forward to hearing more from you as the story finishes!
Hi. As I said, I'm going to start reviewing now. Guilt is just too big! Anyways, I liked this chapter. I think you captured tension very well, and also what Harry did to Malfoy was above childish actions; it was very mature, yet powerful at the same time. I liked also Ginny's reactions and fears to all this. So, this is a 10/10. Great job. Btw, I agree, I hope to see the next chapter soon ,)
Author's Response: Welcome! I'm glad you came! I was on the forums a couple months back and I asked for help and ideas on how best to deal with Malfoy. You'd be suprised (or not) how much animosity there was towards him and how many barbaric suggestions were given. Not that they didn't have merit, but as you said, I wanted something more mature. I figured his arrogance was the most precious thing towards him so I wounded his pride a littl-- a lot. ;) Thanks for the great review!
Ah!!! The traitorous email glitch is once again responsable of a late review. How did I miss it? >.
Author's Response: Hahahaha, kill the traitorous email glitch. Thanks for coming despite evil email!
Ah!!! The traitorous email glitch is once again responsable of a late review. How did I miss it? >.
Oh, another brilliant chapter! To be honest, I did think that Snape would help them, but don't ask me why I thought that because I don't know :| Once again you created the chaos atmosphere perfectly, and that spoiler was just evil :o 10/10, I still love your story, keep up the very good work :D Oh, and I hope you don't mind I'm getting some tips from your story for my chaptered story (about plot construction; don't think I'm going to steal to steal your plot! I would never do that :D ). Good job, and update soon ;)
Author's Response: I want Snape to be good!!! I WANT IT SOOO BAD!!! Criminey. I'm starting to sound like a broken record. But, it's the truth so I must speak it. Ah well, they say that imitation is the sincerest form of flattery. Heck, I hope that one of these days somebody does steal my plot. It would make me feel special, almost like JKR, but not quite. ;) Go ahead and use whatever you need. I'm honored to know that you're taking the tips. I actually sent the chapter in two seconds ago!
OMG!! Agh!! Why does this always happens to me? I'll never do that smiley again :/
You probably don't understand me at the moment, but I'll explain. I had just read your chapter "Picking up the pieces" and I swear on everything I love that I then wrote a very long review about your chapter... Then I went to check my review and saw only half of this smiley --> > . < What happened? I inserted the html code for italics, but somehow that smiley messed up everything. I don't know why nor how, but you can only read the first two or three lines!! Sorry Narwen3, I swear I'll do that review again, but right now I am about to leave. Gahhhh! Why me, Lord?!
Author's Response: *sniffs* That\'s okay I\'ll just. . .just. . .*buries face in arms and sobs* Okay, I\'m better now. Sometimes the computer is just plain stupid. ;)
Ok Narwen3, I'm about to call the angry mob right now. I have their telephone number in one hand and the other is reaching for the phone, so you should really hurry before the mob gets to your house and starts knocking furiously at your door :) Naw, just kidding. But I wanted to tell you that I'm still checking your story... but no new chapter D: I know you must be busy, but the wait is killing me :) Sometimes when I have writer's block, I come in here with the hope of seeing a new chapter, so please haste your writing skills :D We are all dying to know what happened next! ~ <3 AstroFire
Author's Response: Dearest AstroFire, I cannot tell you how grateful I was that I read this review after I updated, yes you heard me right, I updated! It was an exciting thing for me too, and it took me an hour and ten minutes to type. My fingers are seriously cramping and it's all for you guys! ;) It's in the hands of the mods now, but I really appreciate you coming back to remind me! Hopefully it will be up this week!
Agh... the wait is killing me *"the wait" hides the baseball bat it had been so gently using against my skull* (lol >.> <.<). Anyway, what happened? Is it still at queue or did it got rejected? Ah, shoot, I'm dying here to know :O
Author's Response: I have no clue what's going on with it. I can't check and see if it is still in queue because they are updating the site so I won't know if it even made it until Friday. Trust me, I'm dying just as much as you!
Gahh, how I missed this chapter? I'm supposely checking once in a while, and yet it was only till yesterday that I noticed it, but only had time to read it till now. Well, first of all, awesome chapter! I think that battle scenes are one of the hardest to write, but you did an amazing job. Second, you are very brave killing of all that people, but then again war brings death to all. I liked that Snape actually walked back into the fight and engaged Bella. I loved their dialogue (oh and I think you got Snape just perfectly; all his lines were accord to his character). Now, Pettigrew's actions really caught me unprepared after reading he had killed Trelawney (he killed her, right?). Nevertheless, he really repaid to Harry, although all the bad things he had done. Finally, giving Harry Ginny's wand is an interesting twist, so I'm eager to read your next chapter. Very well done! Your story never stops to amaze me :D
Author's Response: Urgh, but you are right. The battle scenes were extremely difficult to write which is why I was so paranoid about how this chapter was going. Call me a sadist, call me crazy, but I love stories where people die because it shows that they have a reason to be fighting. I needed Snape to have his moment with Bellatrix, if only for my own sick pleasure. He had talked about his loyalty to Dumbledore, now he needed to prove it. And through it all, he still has to be a foul git, even if he's on the good side. Yes, he killed both Trelawney and Cho but again, he had to have a slight redemption and repay his debt. I'm glad that you've enjoyed this story so much and given me reviews that were well thought out. Outstanding job on your part!
Author's Response: Whoops. That sounded a little confusing. When I said he that last time, I meant Pettigrew. :O.
Wow, what a coincidence! I never thought you would update just a couple of hours (or less) after me putting a review O_O Hmmm...I have to remember that the mob threat does works :D Oh well, thank you for updating Narwen3, we'll finally going to see past that evil cliffy :) You rock!
Author's Response: I would have feared for my life but thankfully I did get it up. I just hope the mods can hurry so I can finish the last couple chapters. I hope you enjoy what's coming!
Really good one, i like the fact that Ginny is more independant and strong, she can handle Harry. I'm a big H/G supporter, and i love to read fics like this one, not because they support my ship, but because they are well written.
Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review. I'm glad you like my writing. I put a lot of time and effort into it, and it is gratifying to know that people like what I come up with.
Very good, i like the idea of new prophecies. I think something i also like is that Harry is more stable, in almost all fics i've read, Harry is way too depressed for Sirius death, i mean, he has the right to be, but sometimes writers exaggerate too much that feeling.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. I'm not to sure about the amount of grief that Harry has over Sirius in some stories. I just didn't see that he was that close to Sirius in the books, and thought he had developed a more meaningful realtionship with Lupin, but I think JKR is going to go the way of a really depressed/angry Harry for a while herself, so I guess everything is up for interpretation.
You know i really hate you? A love triangle!!! I'm serious, i hate you for doing this, but anyway, i like the idea of Ron and Harry speaking instead of Ron trying to kill Harry. I can't deny i was upset when i read about the love triangle, but the story is good.
Author's Response: Ah, there has to be some tension, and I really didn't play with it enough, but what better way than a love triangle?
Well, i'm still mad at you, but anyway, i think it makes things more interesting, though i liked that Harry now has a familiy.
Author's Response: Hey, I just write what the characters tell me to. Don't get mad at me.
Well, i like the way Ginny is growing, i mean, i know she is scary and all that, but i like that she shows so much power. Anyway, i really liked it.
Author's Response: Yep, Ginny is growing, and is scarry. Not someone I would want to have angry with me.
I think the best part is when Ron tries to crush Malfoy, I really liked that fight, it's showing us of what Ron is capable of doing when he wants to :)
Author's Response: Yeah, Ron has had about all he is going to take from Malfoy and his "little" friends. Good thing Hermione stopped him or Malfoy would be dead, and the Ministry would not have been able to sweep that under the rug.
Hmmm, very interesting. New prophecy, new tasks... great chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks
Ah, guess who? :) Well, I thought I would follow your hint and review at least one chapter, so you can see if it is working or not.
Many things come to my mind, one of them being that you have a very intriguing writing style; you keep the reader engrossed from the very beginning. I think that's something hard to achieve, but your words just call us.
"But now, as Bill walked slowly up to Fleur and slipped his arm around her shoulders and her hand into his, they both stared aimlessly out the broken window, its fly screen protecting sliced and floating outwards in the warm breeze of the July night." I loved this line particulary because it not only describes the scene, but subtly describes their feelings and the impact it has upon them.
Good job so far! I'll try to read the rest, but unfortunately I'm experiencing a lack of time due to all the things need to be done for moving out to another country :) Keep it up! (oh, and I hope you recieved an email :@ )
Author's Response: Oh, indeed i did recieve an email! Thank you muchly for helping me!
Oh, your praise :$ no ones said that to me. In fatc, one reader commented that my writing has gotten better as it went on. Seeing as this is the first chapter, totally un-edited, I hope that you have more comments to come! I feel, however that it is VERY \"fanfiction\" the kiddie kind. So hopefully, my new stories are leaving the junior me behind. =)
And i sympathise with the moving. I HATE moving. Takes up precious time needed for writing. =) thank you once again for the lovely review!
Nice story! I've read since Power of Emotion, and I can say that you are a very talented author. Your plot was very well written, and it never seemed unrealistic (er... forgetting the fact that it is all fiction, but you know what I mean ,) ). Good Job! :D
AHH!!! I'm speechless! After so many chapters, after so much time... YAY!!! [/crazy episode]
Anyway, I loved this chapter. It finally gave us what we had so desperately been waiting for! I loved it! I liked how you just didn't make it a 'one-night stand'. You made them stop and ask themselves if that was what they really wanted. Ah, and the sweet affirmative answer!!!!!!!! ColorsOfAngels, I bow before you. You have certainly made me very, very, very, very happy!
Author's Response: Im glad.....and i wanted something that would push them together in a way that wasnt normal but i wanted them together for real not an accident....you know what i mean? and yes...it did certainly take me long enough to get them to this point didnt it? lol...