Nice descriptions. You-Know-Who at the Dursleys, interesting. I like how you conveyed the fact that Harry didn't care about the opinions of the other residents on Privet Drive. Good Job!

This is really nice. It follows closely with the compassionate Dumbledore that we know from the books. I've never read a "one-shot" fic before, but this is good... I like it

Author's Response: Thakns for reviewing! Things have been so awfully slow on here, haven't they?

For my first foray into the One-shot world I very much enjoyed this fic. It was story that just felt good. Everything about this was spot on. I loved the bits about Luna and adding her feelings about touching ghosts. I think the pairing between Luna and Myrtle is a great idea anyway. They seem so very compatible in the way JK characterizes them and you do a great job of bringing them together in his shot.


The best part is it's a look at past events through someone else's eyes. I like to hear other's ideas about minor characters during other times. So much is focused on Harry that there is a lot of potential in the other students. It gives the reality that the others live their own lives, too, apart from what we see.

Author's Response: I\'m glad you enjoyed this, especially as it was your first oneshot. I have to say I enjoy the challenge of writing stories set either before or during the HP books and trying to make them fit believably with canon. It\'s like making a puzzle piece to fit in with a puzzle that already exists... both easier and harder than writing something totally separate/in the future.

I must say, Professor Meron is a very intriguing character. I especially liked the passage: “And you will all have formed your own prejudices, thought processes, likes, dislikes, talents, friendships, enemies, hobbies, habits, respects, disrespects, ideas about life, ideas about death, and so forth. Therefore, I will not try to win anybody’s favor in this class.” Such is true about the age of sixteen. It’s a time were many kids claim to know who and what they are, it appears that Professor Meron knows his fair share about people. I hope we get a glance at his backstory.


Something minor:“…the headline, which screamed: “Five wizards found brutally murdered in muggle neighborhood”. If it’s a headline, that should be capitalized “Five Wizards Found Brutally Murdered in Muggle Neighborhood.

I also liked the way you characterized Harry and Ron asking Hermione for answers in Astronomy well done. I notice that you mentioned you have more chapters to come in this fic, I hope they are posted soon!

Interesting start losing a Quidditch match. I like what you have so far and I hope you reveal some of the US team's first names, because I'm a real stickler for names, but the surnames you have now are great.

A little mistake, "finally, there seeker and team captain, Jonathon" That "there" should be "their".

I see this story takes place in '06, but will there be any mention of US Quidditch Legend, Maximus Brankovitch III? Just wondering for canon's sake.

I'm interested to see how far you explore the US Wizarding world. I have a fic on in the US, myself, so I'm always looking for others who choose to write in America. So far, good job and I'll be keeping an eye our for chapter two.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. I missed that there/their thing, I\'ll be sure to fix that. I actually had no clue about Maximus Brankovich the 3rd, I\'ll try to incorporate him in somewhere.

There's a certain suspense and gut-wrenchingness that comes with all hospital scenes taking place after the "Final Battle." I of course always want Harry to live, but the most popular decision is for him to snuff it. Regardless, this fic ties greatly with some of the characterizations we've been given.

As always, it's great to see the final interactions between hero and friend and this was no different. I liked Ginny's persistance and even Ron's plea to hang on. I would have loved to read what the Prophet wrote in their headline for the following day, which you might have covered in your sequel, but nonetheless an emotional work you've got here.

Well done.

Author's Response: I tried to think about how each person would react, as they would react the most strongly. So I thoguht about it and attempted to stay in character. No, I didn\'t cover the Prophet in the sequel, as its only about Ginny moving on and all, but that would be interesting to write an article about Harry dying... Thanks for reviewing!