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Anyway by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: George is suffering from losing Fred, until the one person who understands comes back.
Date: 07/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: After
First off, George and Sirius. Bravo, well done. NEVER would have thought of it, and the way you wrote it, it didn't seem strange at all that Sirius was dead and George was talking to him, seemed the most natural thing in the world.
"James and I... we laughed at the possibility of being apart, we didn’t even consider death... we were too young and full of life to ever die... we didn’t make any effort to cheat death because we thought it couldn’t get to us.”
This is my favorite line, it just seems so perfect, and just such a Marauder thought. They were so young when James died, and Sirius and James were so bold, and sometimes reckless, this line just seems to suit them so perfectly.
I also rather like George telling his brother, "I'm going to live anyway." It's very bittersweet, and a bit heart-wrenching to imagine him saying that to his twin brother's grave.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review.
Stars Apart by Willow Rosenberg
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: The sequel to “Tricksterâ€: The Marauders return to Hogwarts for their seventh and final year. Lily and James juggle more responsibility than ever, and James learns that convincing Lily to go on an actual date with him is harder than he would have imagined. Remus frets about post-Hogwarts life while Peter drifts even further from his friends. But when Sirius discovers a group of fourth-years who are bound and determined to steal the Marauders’ title of Greatest Hogwarts Troublemakers he wages war, rallying his friends so they can maintain their legacy. Meanwhile, outside the castle grounds, Voldemort is gathering supporters in unending preparation for a much darker battle…
and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart
i carry your heart(i carry it in my heart)
-E. E. Cummings
September 2012: HEY guess what I couldn't wait, and the third installment, "World Enough," is UP NOW under James/Lily. Or just under my name. Or at this link: http://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=92131. Yay! :D
Date: 07/17/11 Title: Chapter 1: Way Back Home
You have a great gift for writing humour, so many things you write cause me to literally laugh out loud, World's Best Grandma...in Trickster Peter talking about his mother's self-help books and then holding James's hand later...how DO you think of these things?
Author's Response: awww, thanks! honestly, though, i never really plan it...the great thing about these characters is that they tend to write themselves :)
Date: 08/13/11 Title: Chapter 1: Way Back Home
Cliffie much? ;)
I love how you portrayed Sirius and Regulus's relationship. It's hard to see them written as fighting whenever they get a chance, and yet it doesn't make sense to have them be close Weasley-like siblings either, so the way you put it seems to make perfect sense :)
Loving James and Lily together, also sad Remus and Sirius talk of the future. . .if only, if only. (The woodpecker cried.) And Peter and his mum :)
Lovely chapter, as always.
Nightmare by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: It's three in the morning and one nightmare just melts into another.
Date: 07/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: Nightmare
Again, stunning characterization of Neville! Love your mention of his bunny slippers, those are the kind of details that I really love and just seem to make a story that much better. And I love how you extended the friendship of Neville and Seamus as well, I didn't really think before about Seamus having even more scars and cuts and bruises than Neville, but your fic provoked me to and made me think more about him. Also love the last couple lines, perfect ending.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Family Matters by LollyLovesick
Rated: 6th-7th Years • Summary:
Barty Crouch Jr. and Regulus Black; two boys with different expectations thrust upon them.
This is the story of how their paths cross, merge and then divide, leading towards two different endings; one tragic, one heroic.
"The Death Eaters, I want to join." I stared at him. His blue eyes were steady, his mouth set. He looked resolute. He had thought this over.
And then I got it. I finally got Sirius.
Nominated for Best Dark/Angsty Story in the 2011 Quicksilver Quills and for Best Marauder Era in 2012. Thank you so much!
Date: 08/01/11 Title: Chapter 2: Regulus: Black-blooded
First of all, I love how you handle your characters. At the same time they are very relatable, (Not that I'm having the pressures of whether or not to become a Death Eater, but you know what I mean :) ) yet I love the little wizarding allusions like the clarity just before catching the snitch that Regulus experiences.
I also love how you mention how all of the Black's are full of anger, even if they all handle it in different ways because this seems very true. They all seem to contain much anger and fury, whether they bottle it or bellow it.
As of now, I'm more drawn to Regulus than Barty, Barty seems to me a little bit whiny, but maybe that's because I know with his circumstances it would be much easier for him to stay on the good side than it is for Regulus.
Also interesting to see how you have Sirius going after Regulus, with Regulus choosing to leave him behind. It's nice to think that Sirius used to actually seem to like his brother, no matter how much he scorned him later on.
Very good thus far, I'll catch up hopefully soon :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much for that long, lovely review! It absolutely made my day :) I'm so glad you found it good enough to comment on!
I do believe that Sirius shares a few personality traits with his mother - even though their moral beliefs are opposites. I also think that Regulus, like most little brothers, adored his older brother when very young, then start to feel shunned when Sirius grows older and start to prefer his friends to his family. That's how I remember being in my early teens (and I'm the youngest of three.)
And remember that Sirius DID in fact leave his brother alone with two very "difficult" (I'll use that word for now:P) parents when Regulus was only fifteen. That must have hurt a lot, because no matter how much sibling-rivalry there might be, one does expect one's siblings to stay even if things get rough.
And Regulus is just fifteen. His judgement is not fully developed yet. He might think he's leaving his brother behind, but can he really?
Thanks again for the review, I hope you will read the rest... And if you do, I hope you'll like Barty better! Because he is a bit of a dramaqueen inside and he is perhaps whiny, but I really do love him anyway :)
Raindrops by Gmariam
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
He returned with a quiet sadness and a surprising new responsibility to keep him focused. She returned with a misplaced bitterness and the matching position that forced them to work with one another. Yet fear, resentment, and stubborn arrogance kept pushing them apart, even when they were meant to be together.
Winner, Quicksilver Quill for Best Canon Romance. Thank you!!
Date: 11/03/11 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter Twenty-Two
Aw, your last sentence was adorable! Thanks so much for changing the rating just for now, it was pretty frustrating not being able to read it.
I'm really liking Lily when she's not fighting with James, and I'm liking the way you're playing out her relationship with the other Marauders as well, particularly Sirius.
Date: 10/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One
They're not mad at each other! Very relieving :) I like the idea of James' notes, particularly the idea of it being folded like a stag. I'm also worried about James's dad. . . And Avery. . . And the whole Sirius/Airlene(sp?) thing. . . Oh why can't everything just go absolutely perfectly for a change?
Because it wouldn't make good writing, obviously. But yours continues to be excellent, which is great and really difficult to do, considering how long this is. Keep it up :)
-Annie
Date: 09/04/11 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter Thirteen
I did enjoy the Quidditch actually, kept me at the edge of me seat, I couldn't tell which way you were going to go! It was fast-paced and interesting, not slow and repetitive which can happen. There's nothing quite as disheartening as a Quidditch loss, poor Gryffindors.
I liked your description of Lily waiting for James, she seemed sad and sweet.
Now let's just see what they're going to talk about. . . ;)
Date: 09/15/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One
What a cliffie, though I suppose Sirius's secret has been a mystery for the whole fic so far, now I'm just even more intrigued to know who it it, as well as interested in what happened between Sirius and Regulus.
Interesting how you had James and Peter share a moment. You did it well, stating how Peter would not react at all like Remus or Sirius, but that he would simply listen.
Great chapter, post when you can!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm especially glad you appreciate the Peter moment, because he never gets them and I was sort of happy to be able to do that for him, lol. And yes, Sirius has a secret and there will be more about that coming up. I hope you enjoy finding out more - thanks again for the lovely review! ~Gina :)
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter Seventeen
Arghh another cliffie! Sirius always leaves me hanging. Nice job on the chapter. I was a little annoyed with Lily, but I guess we're really seeing where Harry gets his stubbornness from :)
Author's Response: Haha, good point about Harry's stubborness. Lily is very stubborn, and proud as well. Yes, another cliffie - next will be up soon. Thanks so much for the review, I appreciate it! ~Gina :)
Date: 12/20/11 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter Twenty-Eight
Awww :) What a sweet ending to such a lovely story!
I honestly enjoyed the whole thing, from the bickering to the romance to the battle scenes, though boy is it a relief to be past the bickering.
Really, this is such a great piece as a whole, especially for being a longer chaptered fic. Sometimes those tend to drag, or lose direction, but this didn't.
So congratulations for writing such a wonderful, and interesting story to read and keep up with :)
-Annie
Date: 11/21/11 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter Twenty-Four
Oh wow! What an action packed chapter! And done so well, I was on the edge of my seat as soon as Sirius stumbled in. Great characterization and really great job with keeping up the pace in this chapter!
Annie
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Annie! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I always get worried about writing action but as long as I can visualize it, it eventually comes along. Better than Quidditch, anyway. ;) Thanks again! ~Gina :)
From Dark to Light by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
The darkness looms the harshest before dawn, but light will always cross lines drawn in the sand.
This is the story of the battle of Hogwarts.
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This poem has been nominated for a 2011 Quicksilver Quill: Best Poem.
This poem has also been nominated for a 2012 Quicksilver Quill: Best Poem.
Date: 07/08/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
The meter just flows and it is so simple, yet so eloquent at the same time. There seems to be no forced rhyme, to find a word that works simply because of the need to rhyme isn't evident here(If that makes sense). Just very nice to read :)
Author's Response:
Thank you. :) It wasn't easy to do, and I always spaz about that a bit, but I'm happy that you find my hard work worth it, hehe. Thanks again for stopping in and reading my poem.
~Jess
Yearning by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Plants, Hogwarts, and Hannah the barmaid. These are Neville's loves and goals... if he ever gets the courage to ask for them.
Date: 07/22/11 Title: Chapter 1: Drinks on the House
"It's funny how the silly things often seem the most important." (Don't know if I quoted that correctly...frankly it's 3:30 am and I'm surprised I can even keep my fingers on the keyboard. Sorry. I'm getting side-tracked.) Love that line, it fits in wonderfully with Luna's characterization, something just full of obvious wisdom which other people have over-looked.
I really liked this story, very refreshing and nice, the way you play out how their relationship started. Interesting how you made their friendship start by having him be there for her because of her mum, nice take.
The only nitpick I have is the ending, which seems a little fast, him asking her to marry him, it just seems a tad too rushed.
Also, wonderful characterization of Neville, he seems just like the good old Neville Longbottom from the books. Hannah as well, though she's a minor character, you've derived so much for her and it just seems to suit her perfectly.
Author's Response: Luna's one of the easiest characters for me to write-- you just need to know about weirdness. The ending was a little fast, but Neville would do it that way in my mind. Thanks for reading!
Under Snape's Regime by joehook
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Neville and his friends have no choice but to return to Hogwarts. But will it even be like Hogwarts anymore, with Snape as Headmaster? Neville must stand strong while Harry, Ron and Hermione are surely on the run miles away...
Date: 08/25/11 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 - The Silent Song
Wow, that was such a good idea, having Snape silence the Sorting Hat. It just felt so wrong, like such a disgusting and immoral thing for someone to do.
Very good so far! Everyone seems in character and good description as well, I'll leave another review when I catch up with the rest.
Date: 08/25/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Rebirth of the Army
All caught up :)
First thing I'd like to comment on is your chapter titles, they're actually quite nice and sort of Rowling-esque.
I think it's great how you brought in how much affect the trio really had in Hogwarts. It doesn't really seem like too much in the books since they're always with each other, but seeing it from an Neville's point of view, it seems as though people (in particular the Gryffindor house) really sort of look up to them, just having them there and standing up for things, it gave the castle a boost. I like how you had Neville keep the poster of Harry's face just for a little symbol of hope maybe. I also like how you made it clear that without Harry's leadership and Hermione's intelligence it would be much tougher to learn new spells, yet even without them, the D.A. are still going to keep it up.
Again, your characterization is all good. I have a feeling that the Fidelius Charm is going to come in handy. . .Good job so far! Keep it up.
We Were Soldiers by RosaSB
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: We were children once. Young, innocent, carefree. Unhindered by the trials of life.
We were friends once. Our lives filled with such joy and happiness we were untouchable.
We were ordinary people, looking to a bright future. But the ordinary, became the extraordinary, and with one small swish of a wand, we were so much more.
Date: 08/14/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Sixth Year
Ohh, very good so far!
The beginning reminds me a bit of JKR's style of beginning the books to be honest, describing the setting and everything in detail before setting out the action.
One nitpick is it's a bit difficult to keep up with all the characters in the Great Hall as you kept referring to them only by their physical appearence. You refer to one as the "boy with greasy looking black hair and dark beady eyes," and then have "the skinny dark eyed boy" say something. Are they both the same person? I'm assuming both are Snape, but it can get confusing.
Sonja seems like a well-developed character. Quiet, seems smart, mixed opinions about her fellow classmates. She definitely seems like a Slytherin, but not a Pansy Parkinson type Slytherin if you know what I mean ;)
Interested to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! That's quite a compliment :) I always like stories with a bit of action right at the beginning, so thought it fitting.
Yes I see what you mean, I was trying to describe without going over the top, if that makes sense? I'll be sure to keep an eye out for that in future chapters should it arise.
Thank you :) it's always hard intergrating an OC into the fray whilst trying to make it believable. I'm hoping I get the balance of her character just right so she seems like a true Slytherin, without her being to stereo-typed.
Thank you very much for reviewing, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter, which should be up soon!
Over the Next Year by Arial Felchem
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: What happened to Harry, Ron, Hermione, and all the others in the hours, days, and weeks following the Battle of Hogwarts?
Date: 08/19/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Tears and Turkey
Oh, that was very sweet. First off, I'd like to applaud you for keeping Ron and Hermione in character, for I think it's one of the toughest pairings to write, and they sitll stayed very much in character during their little moment.
One little thing is during the, "They all stood with heads bowed and the reality of the situation crashed against them all again." It's good that you mentioned this, but however I think I'd play just a LITTLE more into it.
I really like how you had them check on Harry, it seems likely that Hermione would want to keep a very close eye on him after everything. Also nice how you have characters like Ron using Voldemort's name.
Also great to have Dumbledore commending Ron and Hermione. They have truly beem immensely brave and fantastic friends.
This would work well by itself as a one-shot, but I see you have it as chaptered. I'm interested to see how the rest will play out.
Author's Response: thanks for the detailed review! i'm glad you thought ron and hermione were in character, that was my goal. as for the "reality of the situation" bit, keep reading, because i'll definitely be playing more into that in chapter five, when we get to the funerals. glad you seemed to enjoy it overall, i hope you like the rest!
Date: 10/12/11 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: The Awards Ceremony
Ah! This was SO good, best chapter yet I{d say. (My aapologies for bad typing, this keyboard is kind of rough and difficult to use.) But honestly, wow.
Spot on with Harry{s, Ron{s, and Hermione{s reactions to the awards. Harry feeling awklward and reluctant about accepting it and everything, and then when you brought in Dobby? Gah, I wasn{t expecting it. It killed me.
And George throughout the entire chapter, in my opinion, you portrayed him perfectly. I thought he was excellent, the wink, how there was no debate over who collected the award for Fred, the turning to someone who wasn{t there. . . It was just devastating to read.
So amazing chapter, keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and thought the characterization was good. I loved doing the Dobby bit, he definitely deserved it! : )
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Running into the Weasleys
Aw, you really wrote Mrs. Weasley in a heart-breaking way. I think you did the best job with characterizing her this chapter, she just seemed so spot on. Mr. Weasley was great as well.
I think that on the whole you are doing a great job with Harry still, and the entire trio in fact. They're very difficult to write since they're the center of the books themselves, but you're still keeping them in character. Especially the very last part, Harry seemed very, Harry.
"Any desire to laugh, though, died as he turned, almost against his will, to face George." I thought this line was very interesting, because usually George is the cause of the laughs, yet here, it's just such a devastating situation that even to face him would cause Harry's laugh to die in his throat. I thought George's characterization just seemed a little bit off, but it's such a crazy thing for him after Fred died that I suppose he would really be so different from what he was like before, I dunno, George after Fred's death is just really difficult to put into words.
I'm really liking it so far, keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely, long review. I'm glad you think the characterization on most of the characters is pretty good, it's important to me to try to stay as close to canon as possible. The George-sans-Fred is definitely tricky to write because there's none of it in the books except for when Harry sees him kneeling by the body in the Great Hall...it's one of the many things I wish we could have seen more of in the books. Glad you're liking it so far, though! : )