05/04/09
Hi there! My name is Hayden. I'm a Hufflepuff on the Boards. I love fanfiction, writing, and Tom Riddle. At the moment I've got a story up: A Great and Terrible Beauty, which is something completely different from my normal writing. Also, most of the answers start coming out towards the end of the story, and I really can't wait until I get all of it done. Give it a read, and I hope you like it!
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My Troubled Tyrant by Belledeg
Rated: Professors •
Summary: Keedie Dante has experienced many amazing things during her time at Hogwarts, including the hushed up drama that was the Chamber of Secrets. However, with two overachieving friends and a headmaster who does not even know she exists, Keedie feels that perhaps her seventh year will not be too spectacular. However, Dumbeldore sees her potential as a writer and enrols her in a simple writing course. Here, she meets the mysterious and terrifying Tom Riddle and they instantly get under one another's skin. She is drawn to his dark determination towards some unknown goal and he is fascinated by her, in every way. However, Tom's friends do not approve of Keedie and her unconventional ways and Keedie has many people trying to keep her away from the dark young man as well. Something inside tells Keedie that she can make him better, but even he assures her that this is an impossible task. But she's not one to give up easily...
"He is a dark one, Keedie. Try not to let him consume you entirely."
This story has the characters Albus Dumbledore, Armando Dippet, Moaning Myrtle, Rubeus Hagrid, Aaron Dante, Harry Potter, Ebony Abbott, Minerva McGonagall, Melena Creevey, Ollivander, Gregor Holmwood, Horace Slughorn and, of course, Tom Riddle and Keedie Dante...enjoy!
Winner of "Best Romance Between Other Characters" and nominated for "Best Female OC" in the 2009 Quicksilver Quill Awards
Date: 05/16/09 Title: Chapter 11: Dark Blue
Please, please, please update soon! I am so addicted to this story! I have to know what happens next. Let us know!
Author's Response: Chpter twelve is in waiting, I swear! It's a long and juicy chapter at that!
Date: 08/23/09 Title: Chapter 24: Defying Gravity
KEEDIE IS BELLATRIX. That's why Bellatrix acts like she's the only one who understands Voldemort! She loves him! She couldn't fix him, she became a killer for him! But that's not true, Voldemort wouldn't punish Keedie. And Keedie sounds like she's been gone ever since Voldemort left to experiment with darker magic.
So now for your big twist... I don't have anything right now. I'll come back later and guess. But right now we're all just sitting tight and waiting for the next chapter!
Hayden
Author's Response: Soz. Keedie's not Bellatrix. She'd never kill Dobby and Tonks! Nice try though. Big twist will be revealed in the chapter after the next. :-)
Date: 07/19/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You
But if Keedie's prepared to accept him as he is... but he dies in the end, so won't Keedie be sad? Unless you're twisting the words from the book around. Like you said she's prepared to accept him as he is. And in the book, it says that 'and Tom Riddle lay dead upon the floor, arms slayed' or something. Are you saying she's accepted him as Voldemort? That can't be right, though. When Tom dies, he stays dead, right? So Keedie will be heartbroken, if she can't move on and has no other choice. How will this end??? I'm so excited! Please update ASAP! And how long is the epilogue? You won't be able to post much longer, or it'll give everything away.(Not that I mind.) And so Tom knows that Bellatrix loves him... hehehe please make something dramatic of that. She needs some good filthy slaps around the face.
I'm still anxiously waiting for the next chapter... even though its only been a day since you updated. Still. I.
Author's Response: From what we see, Bella isn't very subtle. When I say she accepts him as he is, I mean that they won't have another horrible, messy break-up that leaves me with lots of angry reviews to answer. :-)
Date: 07/19/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You
I'm twisting up J.K. and your words up. Of course he stays dead. What am I thinking? Honestly, me and my logic...
If Keedie has a dream about the cave, then does she go to it in real life and see all the peeps he's killed? And how would she raise the child??? Without a father... what a burden the kid has on himself. And I'm 98% sure that it's a boy.
I like the part where it went -
" What're you looking at, Dante?"
"Oh, you know, something ugly looking back!"
One of my favorite parts in the chapter, lol.
Hugs, Hayden :)
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad someone picked that up! I honestly am going to miss Lestrange. Who else can keeds vent her sarcasm on. I'm proud of the acne comment too. :-)
Date: 08/12/09 Title: Chapter 23: Thanks For the Memories
Who is the Slytherin girl? What happened? Could you tell me?
Where do Tom and Keedie go? And does Keedie get drunk or start feeling giddy because of the pregnancy? I remember an excerpt when Keedie suggests that the both of them go flying. If she threw up in the sky, that would be funny :0
Hayden
Author's Response: YAY! Over 250 reviews! Yeah, it would be funny just not for the Londoner below them. If there was a Slytherin girl, she meant nothing.
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life
I've still not gotten over my shock. The baby is going to die fosho, but Keedie has the whole dying scene to get through next chapter. So what if she still dies anyways? You're definitley tricking us. You said there was a big twist.
You never said Keedie was going to be alive in the epilogue, but you never said she was going to be dead either.
You know what I think? Mint might be Hedwig. Or no, was Mint a different kind of breed?
I like the quote from the motion picture in the beginning. Because Tom lost everything, which could mean that Keedie died, he's telling Harry that he will lose everything.
The orpahange scene was pretty good. I like the part....
I'm back! I had to pick up some school supplies so I left in the middle of writing this, but I'm here.
Anyways, I like the part in the orphanage where Amy Benson and Dennis Bishop run away and Tom didn't have to move a muscle. Nice.
I'm not going to call you a crazy woman but I'm still suprised and sad that Keedie is about to die. *Heaves a big sigh*
Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter where undoubtedly things will get even darker.
Hugs,
Hayden
Author's Response: I used the quote from the film because there was just something intriguing in Voldy's face when Harry said he'd never know love. Next chapter soon :)
Date: 07/12/09 Title: Chapter 20: If I Can't Love Her
AAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHH!!! YOU'RE EEEEEVIIIIILLL!!! How could you do this to such a cute, sweet innocent little girl like Keedie? *Sobbing uncontrollably* Like I said before- I love Tom. Forever. And I hope that Tom can smash Gregor to a pulp after what he did to Keeds. And what if her dad takes her away from Tom after finding out what happened? (Just a thought, she might only have to go to the hospital wing for a while) I still think that the voice could be Tom himself, but you aren't giving us any more clues than seductive and soft. Oh well, maybe we'll find out in the next chapter, since you asked now... I like how you decorated the Hall, that would have looked nice in real-life. And please decribe every move they make while they fight in the next chapter. I like fighting. Anyway, this is a great chappie, please update! *hugs & kisses*
Lovemagic
Author's Response: Would you believe a writer who gets into the head of Tom Riddle could be evil? *smiles*. Yep, poor Keeds. She may get taken away by Aaron, she might be fine, she might lose all memory of Tom, she might get the voice knocked out of her head or...she might die. We just don't know. ;-)
Date: 07/19/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You
I left out one of my parts in my second review. I was Going to say that I.
Author's Response: :-)
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!! SAIF I WILL HAUNT YOUUUUUUUUU! How could you do this to me? We're supposed to be the best review team ever! Best friends, right? But you betrayed me! *sobs* I mean, come on, nine reviews behind my back!
So anyways, this was a great chapter. I like the part where Ollivander knows that Tom is in the darkness and then Olive says come and visit me anytime, and then I remembered that he does come back to capture him! It all sort of backfired on Olive, I guess. And when Tom comes back in the night and FINALLY says 'I love you'. And he comes back in the middle of the night! When she's sleeping! How romantic, I think. Perfect scene. My favorite part from that was when she touched the skin of his wrist. I don't know why, but when she touched his wrist, I started thinking- oh, he's SO manly now... just the way I like him. It's funny how they ran into each other when they were young- they were right in front of each other- yet kept in the dark! (Evanascence- bring Me To Life) I also remember a few chapters back that she screamed down the whole school when she found Myrtle's ghost. I wonder if she was a part of that.
Oh, and Saif, in your 'Third review just to annoy Hayden', you misspelled seriously. Honestly, 'SEROIUSLY' and 'WEEKNESS'. I'm being mean, but I'm really mad at Saif right now. One of these days I'll leave ten reviews behind HIS back and see how HE likes it.
Hayden.
P.S. This is a long review. Just enough to match up to Saif's REALLY SHORT reviews. If i get any credit for it. And PLEASE tell us what I'm onto!
Author's Response: I love the I Love You bit!
Date: 07/19/09 Title: Chapter 21: A Guy Like You
Apparently these review things don't let me use those.. greater than less than signs. I love My Troubled Tyrant, and it'll be the fic and I forever. *Sighs Happily*
Well. This is embarrasing :)
Author's Response: I love it too, if I do say so myself and I shall miss writing it. I'm amused that it's started off lots of Tom/OC fics everywhere.
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life
I think that the new excerpt is sad. Now we know that she dies, and how she dies in his arms... nooooooooooo....
But Saif is right, they will be united through death, I guess. But then Tom can't go on because his soul isn't intact. Unless you can figure out a way and make us all kind of happy again!
Please make them have a sad/romantic scene when Keedie dies. I just want to read that type of dying scene right now :) Keedie was so sweet and innocent... and now look what happened to her.
Hayden
Author's Response: The death scene is my favourite scene, morbid as that sounds. All I will say now is remember the gemstone Keedie gave Tom and the love letter she promised to write him. Those two details are important. ;)
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
Haha, I'm back! Slowly I will catch up to you, Saif! This is BATTLE! We'll break the barrier, don't worry Belledeg. I wonder if that dream Keedie had about Voldy and his cave is a memory. That would be interesting. As for the 'bug', don't call it that anymore, everyone knows what it is, lol. What I can't wait to find out is will Tom find out? What will his reaction be? Shocked? Annoyed? Happy? Does he CRY? Does Tom take her to St. Mungo's and then the Healer's all 'Mr. Riddle, will you please come inside my office for a moment? You're girlfriend's pregnant.' The excerpt was good too, and I hate Melena thinking that she's helping Keedie by hiding her letters (why can't she see? It's not a "thing", it's love!) and I'm glad that she realizes Tom loves Keeds. But Gregor won't let go so easily, I'm guessing. Please update soon!
Hayden.
P.S. I forgot what the excerpt before this one was about. Can anyone remind me? :( Hugs!
Author's Response: Melena means well...she's jealous, and that brings out ugliness in people.
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
And a third review...just to bug Saif!
Where does Gregor work? In Gringotts? I think that's in... Diagon Alley! Why has Melena been keeping in touch with him? I don't think that they get married, they aren't best friends, so maybe they run into each other? And the fight's coming up soon! Oh, I hate that this story is coming to an end. I hate that Voldy's going to die, and I've said it so many times before, but WHAT ABOUT THE CHILD? ABOUT KEEDIE'S HEART? WHAT AM I ON TO? Does my resurruction stone idea get any credit? I'm not ready to let it go, I'm so proud of it! But we'll come with pitchforks and torches when the last chapter comes out, don't worry. If we're not satisfied, then we will all hunt you down. I hope that Saif and the others agree with me. We love this story. The end must meet our high expectations we have come to expect of you or else :( for you. But we love you!
Hugs, Hayden
Author's Response: Would you be disappointed in me if I said I haven't thought about where Greg works?
Date: 08/30/09 Title: Chapter 26: Bring Me to Life
So... is Voldy hallucinating when he talks to Keedie? I'm sure she wouln't come back as a ghost, so that must be it. I want to see Bellatrix finding out about Keedie somewhere in there. And we'll see how she and Voldy take that!
I am *still* sad and its been about 4 or 5 hours. My heart is all heavy and weird. We all loved Keedie, you know.
Hayden
Author's Response: I loved Keedie too. Bella will find out about Keeds, and she won't take it well. :-)
Date: 07/31/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
Did you people know... (this is about Saif again) But when Saif first started leaving reviews, I was like 'Who's this jerk leaving so many reviews? One after the other.... and then I started to review even more and then eventually we started competing for reviews! But now I know he's not a jerk who leaves really short (yet constructive *grumbles*) reviews, he's a nice kid and we've become friends. Good times, gooood times.
Belledeg, we're missing you so much! Everything seems so jumbled up and messy without you to sort us out and give us those interesting updates! Please come back! I can't wait for the next chapter! Wish I knew how long you'd be gone, but oh well, we'll all have to sit tight and wait.
Hayden
Author's Response: Hello you! I´m not officially back, I´m just borrowing somone´s lap top for an hour. Two hundred reviews, I´m impressed!
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 17: Song to Say Goodbye
NOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!! OMIGOD!!! What the heck!!! Tom got dumped! Please tell me that they get back together again! Gosh, I was crying in places of this chapter, it's so... just... sooo... I don't know what to say, it's really sudden and tragic. ( My breathing's all hard and my heart is all weird. I have to take deep breaths.) But I have to say, if you had to make Keedie trash someone, I'm SO glad it's Umbridge. And I think the dude in the darkened space is Gregor. I really don't like him, but I'm guessing that Keedie actually talks to him. And then she gets mad at him again. You know what? I know this is waaaaaay off the point, but what if Keedie and Tom don't get back together and years later they have what's in the epilogue, then Keedie turns up in the battle, and even though she's married to Gregor or some other prat, she says she still loves him in a way, and then they all die? Tee Hee. Why do they all pinch the bridges of their noses though? I don't get that part. I like when Tom cusses. Is Dolores in school as the same time as Tom in real life or is it just something to put in?
I really hope you can update soon, because I'll be pondering over this chapter until you post. Cheers!
Author's Response: Thanks for this review, I sorely needed it to cheer me up. I hate Umbridge with a passion and I needed Keedie to fight with someone, so I thought I'd combine my hatred with the scene. As for Gregor, I'm quite honestly glad nobody likes him. I'm so sorry they broke up but, if it makes you feel any better, Tom will certainly not be giving up. :-)
Date: 06/22/09 Title: Chapter 17: Song to Say Goodbye
Sorry, I didn't realize that last review was so long. It's a lot of rambling too. I was all 'Oh, crud' when i saw it. Really sorry.
Author's Response: Don't be silly, I love all reviews. Also (for anyone who cares) there's a picture of Keedie Dante over on the beta boards.
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
And again! Really sorry about this, but I'm still mad about the nine reviews Saif left. Is the epilogue going to have a quote or something? Because we only know its called the "Epilogue". A sad song, maybe? Colin Creevy is going to die. Keedie will be so sad. If she's alive. We are still at a loss to understand what will happen at the end. And I don't think you gave us any excerpts with Harry's dialogue in it besides the one with the duel. Is his only part in the last chapter the duel? He has to know about Keedie to (I want him to know! And feel more sympathy for Voldy!), but you said this wasn't AU. I wish it was. I wish they could all have a happy ending, but the fact that you're going to kill them all makes sense. If you kill them, we'll remember this story even more and leave us with something to think about. Just like in Charlotte's Web by E.B.White, There was no way to save Charlotte from dying, because if there could have been saving her, then there would be no interesting story. I don't know what to say, we know what's coming but we just keep reading to find out what happens! I wish...
Have a nice trip,
Hayden
Author's Response: I've found the perfect song for the epilogue, so I'm chuffed!
Date: 07/28/09 Title: Chapter 22: Learn To Be Lonely
Will we ever find out what Tom wrote to Keedie in his letters? Something lovey-dovey... but not too much. Or maybe just a little more than formal. Also, Does Keedie still have the handkerchief from Tom, or does it all disappear? And is the next chapter going to be just memories? I'm excited for what they are. And maybe Tom could show some of his memories!!! Yeah!
Hayden
P.S. I'm getting there... just four more.
Author's Response: The handkerchief will come back. Maybe the letters will be a one-shot when this story's over. :-)
Date: 05/05/09 Title: Chapter 9: Right Here In My Arms
This is really interesting!!!! I can never find enough Tom Riddle stories and I love this one!!! This is so good, with all of the jealousy and hopelessness and everything! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!
Author's Response: I totally agree, there's not enough Tom Riddle. Updates should be pretty regular, please keep reading and reviewing!! :-)