Soooo. I've finally decided to bite the bullet and read a Scily. (Which is a miracle in itself LOL.)

I must say, I love your Scorpius. He's just so adorable and I felt quite sorry for him when he lost that match. It's probably my inner Pottermore!Slytherin coming out, hehe. And your Lily's just fabulous. I thought the touch with the apple was iconic and quite funny at times, and she's like Ginny, but not to the extent where she's a carbon copy of her, either.

The only sort-of nitpick I have is that a lot seemed to go on in this chapter so it did seem, if not a little rushed, then it glossed over parts at times. But I *believe* this was meant to be a oneshot originally, so I'm not really surprised at that.

But yes, you definitely have me intrigued, and I shall read on ASAP. See you on the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, Soraya. Yes, this was a oneshot written for a challenge (Forbidden Love, I think) and so the first chapter does have an air of resolution about it. But I sort of knew this would be expanded. I hope you like the rest of it, anyway.

Oh, I see you've met Teddy Lupin - heh heh heh. He's become the stud in this fic - ha ha ha. ~Carole~

I LOVED the Scugo references in there. LOL.

And despite being a Scorose shipper, I must say that even I laughed at the fact that you pretty much kicked that ship out of the window.

I

Author's Response: Yes, my Rose isn't very nice - ha ha. Of course this is all from Scorpius' POV, so you get to see a biased side of the Potters and Weasleys. ~Carole~

Carole! You are so evil, I swear! First, you're starting to make me ship Scily, and then you do *this*???? This isn't faaaaiiir. There has got to be a reasonable explanation for this.

It's got to be a horrible coincidence or something. I'm sure of it. I hope Lily forgives Scorpius soon, though. And I am glad that you didn't have chapters and chapters of Scorpius and Lily having this secret relationship before anyone found out. It's more realistic the way you wrote it.

I'll have to continue reading tomorrow, so you won't get any more rambly, silly reviews from me til then. Night!

Author's Response: heh heh. It couldn't all be plain sailing. There is an explanation- Scorpius is an evil manipulative Slytherin!. Thank you for getting this far. ~Carole~

I knew there was more to it! And I loved Teddy in this -- Blaise too. They're both so,,,, mmmm.

I liked that Scorpius was being realistic and honest about Lily. The last thing I wanted to hear was that he loved her because I don't think at this point, he knows that. And I liked the fact that Scorpius was honest :)

Onto the next chapter!

Author's Response: He doesn;t love her at this point. I don't think that's possible for him, but at least he admits it. Blaise *sigh* I love him too much. hee hee

Oh no!!! Carole, you really are too evil for your own good. It's no wonder you're a Slytherpuff.

I really was rooting for Scorpius and Lily in this chapter! But now, it's obviously going to be delayed for a bit, dammit. I hope Lucius is okay, even though he's far from my favourite character in this -- though I would like to see how you write him. My memory seems to be failing me but I can't remember the last time I read something with Lucius in it by you, so the next chapter should be interesting.

See you next time!

Author's Response: I wrote a Narcissa story that had Lucius in it, and he's been in AA for one chapter, but no, I don;t write him much. This is my canon for him. OOOOH, he is in some of my Draco fics like Shrouds (briefly) and um ... Till Death Eaters Do Us Part ... which is a bit of a prequel to High. Very rambly response - thank youuuuuu Carole

Scorpius got rejected? Nooooo. I have a feeling there was something important in that letter, though, so I'm wondering what it was that Scorpius so conveniently threw into the loo. I'll have to see.

I'm sorry none of these are SPEW reviews, Carole, but I wanted to review every chapter since you accidentally deleted the whole story and all your reviews went with it. Plus your story is far too gripping for me to leave anything remotely substantial and though I know you always reply to reviews, feel free to not reply since they're all in a row.

Author's Response: I usually reply because reviews are my life blood. ha ha.OOOH, good thinking. There could have been something he conveniently didn;t read. Or maybe Harry is the prejudiced git that Scorpius thinks he is ... heh heh. Thank youuuuu ~Carole~

YAY! They came out. Now to see Ginny's reaction -- this should be interesting.

And may I just say that Quidditch is most definitely your forte, Carole? You write matches so well.

This is a very short review because my mum is calling me -- but I'm on tenterhooks and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Thank God I don't have to wait for updates!

Author's Response: Thank you. The first Quidditch match I wrote was Tonks in Apparently Asleep (The Potter 100) and I struggled. The chapter got rejected twice, but I discovered through it all that I rather liked writing Quidditch, so I'm pleased you liked it. Thank you ~Carole~

You'd better keep Teddy and Victoire together. Just sayin'.

Aww, it was so sad about Lavender's baby. But I suppose it wasn't meant to be. I would have told you my favourite bits of it but that would be the whole thing LOL.

I really loved your Teddy in this. He was so sweet and I thought his job was an interesting one. Then again, if Kingsley got to protect the British PM, it's no wonder someone has to protect the American President. (I loved that you made her a woman!)

Another excellent chapter, Carole :) How long will it be? I'm sooo adding this to my favourites.

Author's Response: OH! Poo, I knew there was something I needed to do. It's actually complete. This is the prequel to High, you see. Sorry!. Um, and I'm wondering if anyone will pick up the reference as to who the President actually is - heh heh heh. Thankies ~Carole~

Hello, Lori :)

I’ve been meaning to read this story for a while, especially after seeing Toni’s lovely banner for it. And I was just completely blown away by it. It’s such an injustice that this hasn’t received as many reviews as some of your other pieces, because it is just as good, if not better. I really like missing moments such as this one; when written well, as yours was, it actually seems like it was written by JKR herself, and that makes it all the more enjoyable. I’ve always wondered what went through Fleur’s head when Remus arrived with the news of Teddy’s birth, and you really did this moment justice.

Fleur is a character who I think has often been abused in the fandom. She has been made over-girly or stupid or in some other way OOC. But you took her character and maintained her characterisation steadily throughout the story, despite it being a situation which we never saw Fleur in during canon. Despite it being written in third person, there was still a very personal feel to the story, and I think that was effective in making us understand Fleur as a character more, especially her emotions during such a difficult period of her life. You also maintained the darkness of it, without it appearing overly angsty. I was constantly reminded of the war, of Voldemort and how he had ruined so many lives, and this, I think, made it so raw emotionally.

I particularly liked the imagery used. I love me some good description, but also when something is described, not necessarily in a poetic way but vividly, bringing out the emotions of the story. For example, She imagined his tiny fist clutching one of his mum’s fingers. There’s just something so touching about this sentence because you painted such a clear picture of baby Teddy with Tonks. And I could just tell that Fleur was... if not jealous, then certainly broody :) Then, in the flashback to the second Triwizard Tournament task, I thought it was really well-written and again, it was described, this time very poetically. This, once again, was a missing moment in GoF I’ve always wondered about so reading it was really interesting.

Another moment that I thought was well-done was the interaction between Fleur and Madame Maxime. I’ve always been curious about their relationship as student and headteacher, something which was only touched upon in the books, so I really liked that you expanded on that too. Possibly something I wasn’t entirely sure of was Madame Maxime greeting Fleur with “’Ello” instead of “Salut” or “Bonjour”. I know that Fleur would normally revert to French when around French speakers, particularly those she is close to (like her sister Gabrielle in DH) so I thought it might be better to have the conversation in French. After all, they only exchange a few words anyway.

Apart from this minor qualm (and I think you wrote Fleur’s accent very, very well) I thoroughly enjoyed the Bill/Fleur aspect in the story. Bill was fully in character and so was Fleur. I can definitely see him underestimating Fleur, just like most of the Weasley family probably did. I thought the Gryffindor comments were very funny, too, and I think the way you wrote dialogue was very natural-sounding and definitely a strength of yours. And yet somehow, you managed to have a solid, dark tone throughout the fic - right until the end when it is a little more optimistic - and yet still include laughing and teasing and even romance. This, I think, is the mark of a truly talented writer, which you most certainly are, Lori.

Well done on an excellent story which I thoroughly enjoyed, and I hope to read/review more of your work in the future!

~Soraya~

P.S. Apologies if you got multiple notifications for this review, Lori. The formatting messed up several times.

Oh, Jess, I adore :D

Well, this is *you* we're talking about here, so there's no surprise that this one rendered me speechless. And written in first person present tense, no less. LOL.

This is one event I have always wondered about in canon, and I think you just nailed Regulus's characterisation here. And my heart just went out to Kreacher! Seriously, I actually wanted to hug him, which is no mean feat, I can tell you.

Oh, and by the way, I voted for this drabble in the Brawl :D I can't remember if you won or not, though.

Author's Response:

Woot, first review!

This is actually the Brawl drabble I've liked the most thus far. I remember distinctly despairing of the prompt, because, in my head, Marauder Era is a pack of poncey pranksters, not the dark and twisted. Then, while I was busy feeling sorry for myself, I decided to peruse the list of Slytherins on the Lexicon for some inspiration and out this came. Yay dark and twisted stuff. Even if it does technically have none of the warnings I usually employ (Sexual Situations, Profanity, Violence, Character Death). 

Alas, I didn't win that round, but I did have the distinction of being the only drabbler with no negative votes for that week. That's something, I suppose. :)

Thanks for the review!!!

~Jess