Great Chapter. Keep up the good work!

Great job! I love the cliffhanger! I hope you get the next bit up soon! have I mentioned I just love your stuff and you rock out with your socks out? Great Job love!

Interesting, I can't wait for more! I can relate to you, senior in college, life...why does it vex us so? I hope you are well and that you know there is a huge family out here for you to converse with when life bites you in the butt. And they wonder why I sit on a pillow...

Interesting, very interesting. I like, love it, just want more of it! great job!


Author's Response: Are you by any chance a country music fan? :)

great job, good start. You did a very good job establishing the situation and characters. Update soon!

Author's Response: thank you very much :)

I loved it. Very realistic. Please write more. I am a first time writer too and I thought you did a fabulous job!

Author's Response: The happy hour by the lake is giving me some problems, but I hope to post it soon. The trouble is coming up with something a sixteen year old boy would want to dwell on that won't throw me into an NC17 rating - and hour of hand holding just won't do. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

This is an excellent beginning! I hope that you update quickly!

So let’s try this whole reviewing thing again! So, your story moves quite quickly. It is a fast and easy read. I like the fact that you don’t venture away from your plot. You are a very calculated writer. I would like to see you go much more in depth in the scenes, character relationships, and general reactions. These characters all have a lot of intensity and emotion, don’t shirk that. I don’t know how I feel about Harry being the head of the Order. He has a big task to find and destroy the Horcruxes. How can he do that, study, and run the Order. It’s an awful lot for a teenager. Another thing that bugs me is Ginny. She isn’t really the wait-and-see-kind of girl. She would fight for Harry, even if it is subtly. I like that you are bringing his relatives into a more active role in your story, but it kind of feels glanced over. It is still early yet, so I think you will probably give us a lot more before the fic is over. Overall, this is a really great job. I can’t wait to see more!

Author's Response: Well as to Harry being the head of the order and finding the Horcruxes with a helping of study time. Well running the order and finding Horcruxes is one in the same, also when you have people as good as Harry does alot of the work is done for him. He set the direction and tone the order does the work. Also all the studing so far has been review. They will step that up, but a change in day to day life is comming for the group.

As to Ginny, I wont defend that I admit she was not compleatly in char. That had a lot to do with the story taking me where it wanted to go. I think I will at some point revise her part some.

I would agree they have been glanced over a bit much. I may druing a revising work on that.

I am happy to have you reviewing my story you will most likly keep me honest, and give me the carp I so richly have comming.

I really like your beginning. I can't wait to see how Ginny fights to keep Harry. Please update quickly!

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I am glad you like the story so far. The second chapter is in que now.

Excellent start! Definately get a beta, they are the best people in the world. To get one got to forums from the homepage before you sign on then scroll down to 'Want to be a beta' that forum is designed to let experienced or at least qualified people advertise to help others with their stories. You have got an excellent beginning! I really think you can expand upon it and make it fuller so take your time and enjoy it! Great job