My, oh my, Seren. I really loved this. Your characterization of Ron and Hermione were absolutely amazing.

Hermione, as always, was getting her information from books and using her supreme logic skills to effectively argue a point and get everyone else to agree. She was using some of her amazing speaking abilities to help her even more in her argument, i.e.:

"There are few laws in human existence that ever stay the same," she began, "they change with time and circumstances, they evolve with society and progress with civilization. But amongst the staidness of a mundane existence, there is a beautiful chaos within us. A life force driven by love and compassion, which few seek and less obtain. It is this love that allows a band of strangers, held together only by their shared humanity, to lay down their futures for other strangers."

I also loved how you characterized Ron. Ron was upset that he couldn’t find Harry and was leaning to his other friend, Hermione, for support, as he tends to do. He can be independent, but he also needs his friends. And then his story about the ‘Second Great Muggle War’ was amazing. It showed that he did have a love for history after all, but it showed something else. It showed his great love for fame, but his understanding that fame was not everything.

Absolutely amazing. I plan on reading some more of your fics soon!

~Becca

Hi, Ivona Queens!

I just wanted to drop in and say that I loved this story. Arianna was an amazingly believable character. I liked how you gave her different personality traits- determination, for one. Arianna was afraid of flying, but she did it anyway. She was afraid many times during her friendship with Charlie, but she kept going and it paid off.

There was no doubt in my mind, throughout the entire story, that you had almost climbed into Arianna’s head- Charlie’s too, for that matter. You kept true to what we know about Charlie from cannon, but gave him more of a personality than what we see in the books.

Anyway, back to Arianna. She would stand out in a crowd of people even if I was five miles away. You knew exactly what she was like and how she would react. You never contradicted yourself- I’ve read fics where people talk about how smart the character is, but then they write a scene where the character fails a test they studied for. Or where a character is just so brave, but then they are too scared to face something slightly scary. Arianna was scared, yet determined, the whole time. She was persistant and kind, funny and confident. There was never one instance where I said, ‘Oh, she shouldn’t have done that! I thought she was ___!’. Great job, and I can’t wait to start reading the sequel!

Author's Response: Oh, wow! *bows* Thank you!!! Ari was much easier for me to write, partly because she\'s a girl, and partly because she\'s my own creation, so I don\'t have to follow the rules of cannon. I think that we really start to see Ari\'s character when she asks Charlie to stop calling her \'Arianna\' - by using her full name, she\'s still hiding her personality. With a nickname, she\'s more herself, and you can know her better. I hope you like the sequel!! =)

Hi, Harald! I saw others praising your work in the CR, so I decided to check it out.

What a lovely story. I absolutely love Ariel! And he's got a date! Yay! I felt so bad for him when Christian started dating Ivy. I love how you've portrayed everything about him. His love of sleep, how his mum thinks he doesn't write often enough, how he and Nessa get along- I just love it!!!!!!

I can't wait until Chapter 10 is validated! (*pokes almighty modlies* Validate Chapter 10 PLEASEEEEEEE) I will definitely be following this story from now on!

~Becca

Author's Response: Yay!!! A fellow Gryffindor!! I\'m so happy you decided to give my story a chance! I can\'t wait either till chapter 10 gets validated, *pokes mods with Becca* Thanks for the review!

What an interesting story. It was very interesting to see your perspective on what went on in Hedwig’s head.

I really liked your descriptions, especially in the first paragraph. You used beautiful, precise words to accurately describe a scene.

I also liked the fact that you gave Hedwig complex emotions. She’s always seemed much more perceptive than many of Harry’s other friends. In real life, I don’t think owls think like that, but that is one of the beauties of the magical world- anything is possible. I thought it was very interesting to see how she felt when Harry started to withdraw from his friends.

Great job all around!

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you liked the way I wrote Hedwig!

Well. I, for one, am amazed.

I don’t normally read much Hermione / Other Character, so I was surprised at how much I enjoyed this. The way you set the stage for this scene made me totally able to understand every single reaction that the characters had.

I also loved your descriptions. They were so vivid that I felt as if I was watching it unfold before my eyes, instead of reading about it on this wonderful site. Especially when you were describing Charlie’s reactions to what the Death Eaters did to the dragons, I felt that Charlie was a real person and that the dragon’s really had been abused.

All in all, I think you did an amazing job. I hope you keep writing!

~Becca

Wow, this is really wonderful. I haven’t read a lot of fics that were centered on the dynamics between Bellatrix and Andromeda, and I’m really glad I read this one. When we see Bella later in her life, most of the human element is gone, but she must have had it some time, and it’s great to read a story about one of those times.

A few nitpicks- When she finally spoke all the warmth had left her voice. I’d put a comma between ‘spoke’ and ‘voice’ here.

“You’re welcome,” Bellatrix replied as she walked off to the nearest store to buy her niece’s presents. Erm… St. Mungo’s isn’t in Diagon Alley. I don’t think it’s even located near there. And I doubt there are random wizarding shops sprinkled around London where Bellatrix could buy a toy broomstick, among other things. Maybe she Apparated to Diagon Alley? I don’t know, but this just wasn’t making sense to me the way it is now.

“I didn’t even know you had a daughter. With the Mudblood, I suppose. What’s wrong with her?” I love how you have Bella being insulting and caring at the same time. It suits her.

She may be the daughter of a Mudblood but that’s not her fault. She’s still my niece. Aw! Bella does have heart.

Overall, very well written. I truly enjoyed reading this story. Keep writing!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Wow. Just… Wow.

I’m amazed. This is utterly different than the normal characterization a person sees of Percy Weasley, and I must say I’m very impressed. You took a person who seemed to be a traitorous, self-centered, pompous jerk and showed WHY he seemed like that. Not only that, though, you took it a step further. You showed that he felt sorry for seeming like he does, how he wishes he could take it all back. And I’m absolutely amazed.

In this one-shot, you showed an incredible amount of development of the relationship between Percy and Penelope. You showed how they felt about each other, how Percy apologized for the actions that made Penelope think badly of him, and how they felt about each other after. You took their relationship from rock-bottom and raised it up so that is has the potential to soar in the sky. Your charictarization was perfect, while being just far away enough from the standard characters that you could tell that you had made the characters your own.

You have an amazing writing ability. Please keep writing! I’d love to see more of your Percy.

~Becca