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07/24/05

Reviews by Cassie Payne

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Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None

It's not terrible, but it could use some focus. Spend a little time planning. If you could fire off an entire chapter listening to a song (and I think you know where you are going, even if I can't figure it out) think how much better it will be with an outline!

Right Under His Nose by CathCarl

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Harry comes back from serving detention with Ron and finds Ginny and Dean in a rather compromising position. A strange and confusing set of new feelings erupts... like wanting to punch Dean Thomas senseless. But what's confusing Harry most of all is that Ginny no longer seems to be just Ron's little sister... she's a beautiful girl, standing right under his nose-- exactly where he hadn't been looking.

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Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/18/05 Title: Chapter 13: It's Like Magic!

I can not believe you are only 17. Please wrap this up - don't leave me hanging - then give up fanfiction and start writing for yourself. You are that good. And please let us know when you get publshed. I think me and 42,000 other people will head straight to the bookstore.

Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/10/05 Title: Chapter 5: The Thin Line Between Love and Hate

very nice, you do an excellent job with the dialogue, and they stay in character. And you were pretty prophetic based on HBP!

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Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/05/05 Title: None

nice, I liked the "you matter to me" line. The whole "who was mad at who" at the beginning was a little confusing. But overall very good. Keep it up!

Author's Response: thanx!

Age of Innocence by GinnyAtHeart

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: In the age of innocence, friends discover that not everyone is innocent. Especially not who they expected to be. Everyone makes mistakes, even Hermione Granger... Post-HBP AU

Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/05/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Reveal

Good imagery. I could feel Hermione's pain and Harry's concern quite clearly. The pregnancy wasn't really a surprise, but you did a good job piecing the clues out little by little. Keep writing!

Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/05/05 Title: Chapter 2: Secrets and Regrets

Ok, I'm with the "are you in the right thread" crowd. However, if I change the names, setting, etc, you have a really good plot going. Think about doing this outside of HP fanfiction. And watch your POV - even the most gifted writers have trouble pulling a POV witch off.

Harry Potter and the Legend of Infinity by peskypetunia

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: So many tiny things can change the outcome of our futures. How much do we already know? How are Ginny and Lily so much alike? Surprise weddings, painfull losses, and Ron without a voice, leaves the seventh year at Hogwarts to be the most interesting yet. Please review.

**Please see Author's note in Ch. 24, The Last Riddle**

Reviewer: Cassie Payne Signed
Date: 08/15/05 Title: Chapter 1: Back Where we Started

Nice, I liked Remus calling Petunia "Penny". You are right about the read/review ratio, it's a bit disappointing, but I think it includes people without accounts who can't review. Keep writing!

Author's Response: thank you so much for your input! I think you are right on about the people without accounts. I hope that I will get many more reviews with the next chapter!