UHHHAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!!! Perfect!!! Made me gasp more than once!!!! LOVE IT!!
I LOVE the storyline! The way you described her touching Snape was done amazingly well. Hermione's thoughts read true. And Snape seems really nice in your fan fiction though his progression of tolerating Hermione seems completely plausible because Snape needs to trust people's intentions before he can trust them as a person.