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Save Me by Sly Severus

Rated: Professors •
Summary: A year after the war, wounds remain fresh. Survivors struggle just to keep surviving. They’re plagued with guilt, illness, and new prejudices.

Harry always thought his life would get easier after the demise of Voldemort, but he was wrong.
Reviewer: Hokey Signed
Date: 10/21/12 Title: Chapter 41: I Don't Know

I am now ready to state a few things I love about this fic:

1. The Malfoy family love you're able to display. It's just heart-melting.
2. The dialogue, especially between Harry/Draco and Hermione/George. You're really good at making it swing between teasing, desire, insecurity.
3. The fact that it's semi-fluffy AND cliffhanging, you can't wait to find out what's going to happen next.

Thought I should point out though, that there are some small typos in nearly every chapter. Have you had a beta look things through? It doesn't disturb me that much, I just think it's a shame :)
With that said, I have to say that this was a real positive surprise for me! I've been meaning to give Save Me a chance for ages, but I've had trouble logging in, thus not being able to read P-rated. And now, only 12 hours after I started reading at all, I'm hooked :) You are a GREAT writer, I'm truly impressed by both your seamless plot and the way you write tricky situations with such ease! Good job :)

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for the great, detailed review. You have no idea how much that means. I love all my reviews, but when I get a long, especially well-thought out one, I swoon. So thank you, thank you, thank you.

I love the Malfoys. I really do, even Lucius. I honestly believe that they really love each other and I have a great time writing that. Although it’s kind of hard for me to swallow when I stumble on a fic where they all basically hate each other…

Thanks for the compliments about Harry/Draco and Hermione/George. I didn’t struggle with Harry/Draco. They feel natural to me. By the time I wrote the first Hermione/George chapter, I was ready to scream. I honestly regret doing this pairing, but am glad that most people seem to be enjoying it. I really struggled with it, especially George’s character. That being said, the pairing had to stay because their relationship sets some pretty important plot points in motion. Besides, Hermione needed someone.

Fluffy? I smiled at this. It’s not something people usually say to me. I admit though, there are some fluffy-like parts. Not sure how that happened, really. Not something I normally do.

Ah yes, the typos. I had one other reviewer mention them on FF.net. I’m actually pretty disappointed that they’re there. I normally do a pretty good job with this stuff, but I guess I’m slipping lately. If anything in particular sticks out, please, feel free to point it out and I can fix it. When I get ambitious, I’m going to read through again and look for typos again.

Again, thank you so much for the wonderful review! You really just made my day. *huggles*



Reviewer: Hokey Signed
Date: 10/27/12 Title: Chapter 47: Interruptions

I can only agree with the previous speaker..!!

Author's Response: Haha. Thanks for reviewing.



Reviewer: Hokey Signed
Date: 11/30/12 Title: Chapter 1: Happy Anniversary, Ron

Oh Ella. You just had to make me start bawling, didn't you? From the moment Andromeda went into the room, caught sight of her sister and cried "Cissy". This story is so full of emotion I don't know what to do with it all! I'm sad to see it end but I'm happy about the way it ended :)

Author's Response: Awww. Sorry I made you cry. I get accused of that a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and thanks so much for reviewing.



Relativity by Padfoot11333

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary:

Failure: fail·ure: a fracturing or giving way under stress, a falling short.

Hermione has faced a boggart before. The problem is, she didn't succeed.

This is Padfoot11333 of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Mini-Challenge: The Boggart Challenge.

IT WON--alongside Gmariam's Afraid of the Dark. I am shocked.

Nominated for a 2013 Quicksilver Quill - Best Dark/Angst.


Reviewer: Hokey Signed
Date: 10/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: (a relative concept)

I enjoyed this little piece! Partly because it's sort of a new voice for Hermione, but still very belivable. And partly because this story doesn't pin her as a know-it-all ever since childhood.
Here you delved into why Hermione finds it so important not to fail (although I'm sure you could've gone deeper with a longer story). I like the idea of Hermione not being such a perfect student during her younger years, and rather that she was really nervous about not fitting in to the wizarding world, which she probably desperately wanted to do, and tried to read herself there. There have to be reasons why she tried so hard to be a good student.
All in all I think you've managed to write a nice story, true to Hermione's character and scratching on a few of the topics that make her more than just your ordinary straight-A student. Well done and good luck in the challenge :) (I was going to enter myself, but never had the time to write and explore my idea... I might have to write it now anyway, seeing as you've inspired me a bit :P Not the same character, though!)