08/19/05
http://www.mudblood428.com
I'm a 25 year-old English grad student and HP fan from Somewhere on the Eastern Coast, USA. I've written fanfic before, but my ventures into Harry Potter's universe are relatively new. Most people know me as a fanartist anyway ;). In any case, on to the updates...
The AtDiC saga is almost at its end, but a prequel awaits just around the bend!
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Date: 09/10/05 Title: None
This is really good stuff! Your writing style is very poetic (which is something I particularly enjoy) and this has the makings of some of the most original stuff I've read on Mugglenet. You might have just made me an AU convert.
Author's Response: Thanks! That's the tone I wanted to capture for the early part of this, though I'm afraid it's going to get planty dark soon enough (evil grin). I guess I spent too much time reading classic sci-fi as a kid; the style suits me. Thanks for a much needed pick-me up!
Treacle Tart, Broomsticks, and Ginny by Melindaleo
Rated: •Summary: HBP MISSING MOMENT. What happened after Harry and Ginny left the common room after their very public first kiss? Here's my idea of their walk around the lake.
Date: 10/31/05 Title: Chapter 1: Treacle Tart, Broomsticks, and Ginny
Ever since you first reviewed my work, I've been reading your stories a bit at a time (I'm looking forward to hitting all of them) and just wanted to say that I love your stories. You're a real romantic and I love that. Thanks for sharing your talent with us :).
She Will Be Loved by unknown_force
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: We see people by what they seem to be on the outside, but can their greatest strengths be the result of their greatest weaknesses? As desire and passion tear through Ron, Hermione, and Harry's friendship, they begin to question whether they have found the right person to love, and at what price will they pay to correct their mistakes?
Date: 09/12/05 Title: Chapter 1: Reflections
LOL :) I love stuff like this. A little OOC behavior never hurt anyone - you've set up a really humorous dynamic there. Can't wait to see what you'll do next. Bravo!
Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks for the support. About the humorous thing: I was in a sarcastic mood when writing. I already wrote a few chapters, that are more about love and less about sarcasm. Hope you will still like them though! =)
Date: 09/08/05 Title: None
Loved seeing Petunia grovel. That was my favorite part :). By the way, I think you should give this story a proper title - It'll definitely help you draw more readers. Just a suggestion :).
Author's Response: thanks for thee review. WHAT SHOULD I CALL IT? I HAVE NO IDEA!!! HELP!!!
It's Witchcraft by Nicole_Riddle
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: When Draco Malfoy finds himself falling for the Gryffindor know-it-all, he convinces himself that it’s merely witchcraft. But when they both finally come to terms with the truth, nothing can stop them from being together. This is a tale of forbidden love and dangerous passion weaved into the Half-Blood Prince, where circumstances beyond their control might tear Draco and Hermione apart forever… Check out the long awaited sequal Fatum Amoris...The Fate of Love about Medea Malfoy and Patrick Potter now appearing in the other pairings section.
Date: 09/08/05 Title: Chapter 1: With One Look
Never thought anyone could convince me to enjoy Hermione/Draco till I read your fic! Juicy stuff -- keep it coming :)
Author's Response: That's such a compliment, thank you so much!
Date: 09/09/05 Title: None
Haha!! Loved it! You have a way with dialogue! Can't wait to see what happens next :)
Author's Response: You shouldn't have to wait long; I sent in the next chapter yesterday (9/8/05) Thanks for the great compliment; this is my first fanfic and I wasn't sure whether or not I was good at writing.
Another Side of the Story by Slian Martreb
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Everyone knows about what it was like for Harry Potter to enter Hogwarts for the first time and fight the Dark Lord for the Second. But no one knows what it was like for his best friend. No one knows what it was like to continue standing in someone's shadow. No one knows what it was like to always be second-noticed. No one knows what it was like for Ronald Weasley. This is an account of their first year through his eyes, told his way. No warnings, unless you count sibling rivalry as GA. I know the first chapter is long, but it's worth it to set the story off right. Enjoy! Please review and let me know what you thought! Please, please review! Chapter Eleven is up and I beg your forgiveness for being so long with the updating!
Date: 12/13/05 Title: Chapter 10: Classes and Curiosity
Yay! First term :). Reading this felt a little like browsing through my old high school yearbook - I was all nostalgic! I've really enjoyed your revisions on the first glimpse of Hogwarts - putting everything in a Weasley context was really good. The one bit of criticism I might offer - and it's a tough one, I'll admit - is that we've gotten a lot of Harry's story through Ron's eyes and I'm craving more of Ron's personal narrative. Arguably that's the most challenging bit of this fiction - turning Harry Potter's story into Ron Weasley's story - but it may help to think of Ron in "heroic" terms. For instance, it's simple to gloss over the fact that Harry and Ron became fast friends - but perhaps that's the bit of Ron's perspective that means the most to his character. Naturally, I wouldn't bring it up if you haven't already sort of nudged the narrative in that direction - you've just left me wanting more! Anyhoo, it was a fun chapter, a great read, and I look forward to the next!
Author's Response: Yay! Long reviews!
Shall do my best to try to add more from his point of view. I know that a really good paragraph could/would cover it, I just need to sit down and work it in.
I look forward to the next going through...Thanks!
Date: 10/12/05 Title: Chapter 2: Foward to the Future
This is really good stuff! Your dialogue between the Weasley's is just spot on - especially between Fred and George. Plus, the bit with Scabbers is a really nice touch of irony. Well done!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, thanks! Next chapter going through soon!
Date: 10/26/05 Title: Chapter 4: Brothers Re-banded
Maybe it's because I haven't read the next chapter yet, but this one was by far my favorite so far. I have no criticism to impart - you've brought the Burrow to life and made the Weasleys into a real 3D family. Funny, heartwarming, and entertaining - 10/10 :)
Author's Response: Glad to hear you liked it! And no criticism? *blushes* Aww...Thanks! I had SO much fun writing this chapter and bringing everyone back together again for one last go before Ron goes off to school! And the fact that you think I made them like a real family...*wipes away tear. Sniffle* Thank you!
Date: 10/26/05 Title: Chapter 5: Fires and Floo
Cool twist -- A girl from Salem, MA! You made it fit quite suggly into the Potterverse :). Again, your attention to detail is lovely and, though I had meant to mention it in my other review, I particularly admire your ability to create original magical objects/elements while staying true to JKR's world. Two thumbs up!
Author's Response: Original magical objects? Oh my god, you have no idea of how hard it is to come up with those! I can no longer remember where the idea for the cot came from and I haven't the foggiest idea of what the lump of earth actually is. (It might just be that.) Or, for that matter, what he got for her while he was wandering around by himself. Any ideas?
Date: 10/29/05 Title: Chapter 6: School Shopping
Okay... I'm scouring the chapter to see if I can find them. Here's the first:
When, out of nowhere, a voice came shouting over the noisy hustle and bustle of the other shoppers: “Fred! George! Fred!” (Fragment. If you tag it onto the sentence before it instead of breaking it off on its own, it'll be a little smoother.)
“See you on the trian!” he called, walking backwards. (Teeny typo in that one - likely only because your screenname starts with Slian!)
So yeah. Like I said - totally negligible stuff, but it might be worth checking it out. You could have a bazillion typos - this story is still the bees knees! :-D
Author's Response: The bees knees? *rolling on floor laughing* You're too cute, you know that? Kay, going to fix the trian typo (probably more because my brain wasn't working at the moment than anything else, lol), and I'll take a look at the fragment. Probably edited it and forgot to take away the period and lowecase the W or something. Will check it out.
Oh...you might want to check out my Author's Page again. *wink. wink.*
Date: 01/11/06 Title: Chapter 10: Classes and Curiosity
Is it just me or did you beef up this chapter? It's been a while since I've reread, so my memory is pretty shot, but everything seems awesomely fleshed out. Ron is so amusing - it's no wonder he's my favorite HP character - but you've made him even more so! When's the next chapter comin'?Cheers :). (Oh, and before I forget... *whispers* chapter 10 of AtDiC is up... *wink*)
Author's Response: Ha. You've probably looked at this more recently than I have.
Um, an update. Yeah. Right. *cough, cough* Well, since I last typed a chapter, I got a 9-5 job and my free time is spent writing out bunnies. (Am in middle of epic amount of Wolfstar fics as well as *secret* an SS/HG fic and a joint Ravenclaw house crack!fic) Somehow, despite getting the most reviews for this, it seems to get pushed to the side cause, in my head, it's already done. My apologies. Really. I will get back to it, hopefully, soon, cause if I don't, the bunnies that are stopping me will kill me.
Shall get to your fic as soon as I get a life of my own again! I haven't forgotten, really! Forgive me?
Date: 02/23/06 Title: Chapter 11: Broomsticks and Battles
Wow! Best one yet! And can I just say that I was particularly impressed with the way you started things off - from the very first sentence we were in Ron's head :). Also, I'm enjoying the moments where Ron is sort of on his own and digesting the events after they've unfolded. Brilliant chapter - 10/10!!
(PS: Chapter 10 is up. As promised :). It's a doozy...)
Author's Response: Yay! Shall scurry over and read it at the end of the day. My chapter twelve will be up...soon. Hopefully before the month is out....
Date: 04/11/06 Title: Chapter 12: Trolls and Truces
Yet another wonderful chapter :). Forgive me for taking so long to review - you punch them out infinitely faster than I can mine and RL has been getting the best of me these days! In any case, I really enjoyed revisiting these keystone moments in the HP timeline as told through Ron's POV. I must say, you write Malfoy marvelously - better than anyone I've read on MNFF so far!
Author's Response:
Of course I forgive you; just like you forgive me for taking so long to read ATDIC, right? RL-it sucks. One of these days I will get back to it.
Is that why everyone is reading this? I can't figure what the point is as it's all just so similar and I'm the one writing it. Oh well.
The Malfoy comment cracks me up. Like you have no idea. Cause I've just started writing him romanctically and my beta (who doesn't get the ship) doesn't see how either character is particularly signature. So, yeah, this makes me laugh. I'm going to have to point it out to her. I'm highly flattered, too...
Date: 10/29/05 Title: Chapter 6: School Shopping
I love the idea that we're seeing all these characters and places introduced through Ron's eyes. Like Lee Jordan, Mr. Ollivander, etc. Actually, you made me wonder for a moment if we were going to get to see Wood later on (as I have a huge crush on him. Don't tell...). Also, is Ron really a lefty? I had no idea! But I digress -- Really creative reimagining of JKR's world in this chapter (hehe... Ron puking in Gringotts), and aside from a couple of editing things I found, you've got a golden chapter! *throws confetti*
Author's Response: Honestly, I wrote this ages ago (like...five years ago, actually,) but there must have been something somewhere about him being a lefty or why would I have put it in there? *scratches head* You found editing things? Hmm...care to share them so I can make the corrections? Glad you liked it! *scoops up fallen confetti and throws it up in the air again.*
Date: 10/22/05 Title: Chapter 3: Letters and Ladders
Dang! Three chapters in one fell swoop! Forgive me for not finding the fic sooner - I'm not used to MNFF posting things as quickly as they have been these days! I promise I'll get to reviewing all your chapters - midterms have me a bit stretched thin at the moment, so bear with me while I take them one at a time. Anyway, onto the review...
Let me start by saying that your talent seems to refine with each chapter and it's really lovely to see it unfold. I really enjoyed the descriptions in this one - small details really make this chapter shine, and of course, the dialogue was really entertaining :). My only criticism is that Ron, albeit going through his growing pains, might be a little too edgy. I did read the A/N - it just surprised me a bit to hear an 11 year-old Ron call his brother a "bastard", if you know what I mean ;). But then, I've never been a pre-pubescent boy, so that comment could easily be tossed out, right? Anyway, two thumbs up, Slian Martreb! Bravo, and I'll be back soon!
Author's Response: Yay! Glad you liked it! I know that Ron is a bit 'edgy' but there is so much that he says in the books that most people don't even realize. I mean, just the 'Uranus' comment to Lavender in book three. And then there's the stuff he mutters under his breath....But you're right, it's a bit much, maybe I'll edit it out. But honestly, what would I put there instead, 'Jerk'? Any suggestions? And thanks for the review!
Date: 11/02/05 Title: Chapter 7: Trains and Trouble
Yay! How exciting! It was so neat seeing the different perspective on a keystone scene in Harry's Timeline. I can't wait until Ron and Harry's first conversation! (Oh, and the action at the Burrow was amusing as always - I always wondered how all of them handled the bathroom situation...) Two thumbs up, Slian!
Author's Response: You can't wait? Oh god, the tension mounts. I hope no one is disappointed. If you are (and you should tell me, please, once it goes through) let me know in reviews, and I'll add more to Ron's own thoughts. (Although I refuse to create a conversation between the two of them that didn't exist and I hate Harry, so I wouldn't even now how to if I did want to-just figured I'd let you guys know that in advance.) Glad you liked the second bathroom scene as well (although the first is my personal favorite. he he he.) Thanks again for the review!
Date: 09/09/05 Title: Chapter 1: How it Happened
Okay, let's try this again. Loved the fic so... *sprinkles some fairy dust, waves her wand*....
Date: 10/22/05 Title: Chapter 1: How it Happened
lol... I love that "Uranus" line... *ahem* So yeah, you could probably fit any number of things in there. Ron's favorite phrases might run the gamut of words like "git", "prat", "idiot", "thickhead", "buttmunch"... (just kidding about that last one). It's up to you!
Author's Response: Love the 'Uranus' line as well. (tee hee hee.) Thanks for the suggestions. I suppose I'll have to think on it though, none of them really strike me as being STRONG enough though, if you know what I mean. *sigh* Suppose I should change it anyway, right, even if I'm not so happy with it? Oh well. Here comes the magic quill!
Date: 11/15/05 Title: Chapter 9: Hats and Houses
Oh man... I don't know what's wrong with me, but I got seriously misty when I read Dumbledore's address to the students in the Great Hall (Nitwit, Blubber, Oddment, Tweak!). *wipes a tear* Anyway, you've done it again! Fresh, new, and undeniably Weasley :). Two thumbs up!
Author's Response: Ah, you poor thing! Still mourning, are you? Don't worry, the pain will pass. Glad, as always, that you liked it!