Well......They seemed to get over Hermione's death really quickly. Wasn't there a mourning period? I'm sorry I'm being so critical, but, I just....I don't know. Off to read more....
Author's Response: Ah, it's okey-dokey. But to tell you the truth, they haven't had much time to mourn! What with everything going on!
What the crap?! Who are you? And what have you done with making sense? This made sense, but then it didn't. I'm being honest here, so don't get angry, but, I really don't get it. Okay, I'll read on, and maybe it'll all become more clear. (you have to understand, that what people say about me is: "The lights are on, but nobody's home.")
Author's Response: I don't understand how this confuses you so much! Please feel free to e-mail me and I'll explain what I can.
I still don't really get it...I suppose you're over 100. Any way, update soon! I can't wait to read more!! But, the whole outburst with Snape...It seemed more like it wasn't Dumbledore yelling...You know? Okay, well, before you cuss me out, I'm gonna quit. Happy New Year!
Author's Response: Like I said, e-mail me if you are really confused. I won't cuss you out! Happy New Year and keep reading.
Evil cliffhanger writer...Okay, we'll try this again: If you want to separate certain parts in your chapter, us < > and put 'hr' inbetween them. You can't put it at the end of a sentence either, you have to end the part, press return...
Don't put spaces between the < > okay? just hit return do this < > and hr inbetween! this is what you'll get:
Hey, what happened to Ron's Secret Admirer? I liked that story and was looking forward to reading more...oh well. Okay, well, I hope you update soon! I can't wait to read more to this story, it's really good for your first!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I deleted the secret admirer one because it was going NO WHERE. I was going to have all this drama and Draco and all this stuff..lol..but Let me Love you has a better plot. I think you'll like it more...I've almost got it all written..i just have to submit it!
Very good, but I can't help but feel that having Muggles in Hogwarts is wrong. I mean, they can't even have Muggle things there. Sorry, just weird. Anyway, great chapter and I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: That's why Fiona's going home! Thanks for reading!
great chapter! oh, and one thing, Honeydukes has the candy. Zonko's is the joke shop! lol! it's an easy mistake anyone can make! lol! i really like this story, but 547 words?!?!?! girl, once you get to 1000 it's best to stick with it! lol! honestly...lol! you are very worthy to have a spot on my faves!!
Author's Response: Haha, I changed that..thanks for teling me! Sorry about the 547 words thing..I was lazy and illiterate! PLease keep reading....it'll get real interesting in the next few chapters......
hmm. Well i like the plot. But you're going too fast! no one even talked in this chapter. Everything was rushed. I think you should use more detail, like describe how Ron looks, shoot he could be a goblin for all i know! lol! i'm not being mean, but you really need to add detail. sorry.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot! Great advice! I loved your stories, keep writing! But in the meantime, I'll take your advice..thanks a lot!
good. very good. you still need to add detail! omg! how would you feel if you got a chapter that had over 1000 words?! it felt good for me, and i've stuck with it ever since. listen, you need to add more detail. and use the spacers in between times in the chapter. that way people don't get confused! i love your story, but the detail needs to go up a few points. like, what color were Fionna's eyes? Were her teeth white? was she wearing a skirt? or blue jeans? explain things like this, i just don't want you to get flames for lacking in detail and description. i did for my first story, that's why i deleted it. but try and get over a thousand words, it's not hard really. just motivate yourself and you can do it! believe me, sometimes i think i'm only going to have 950 words in a chapter, but then it gets to be way over 1000! a cazillion stars!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks AGAIN! You're the best review-er i know! please keep reading...the next chapter i write will be over a thousand words..I promise! The next chapter is going to be the best!
Cute. I like it so much! But, I am a little lost because it's been so long since I've read! Hey, I have a new story, it's called Unworldly Desires and it's a Hermione/Draco story! But, this story isn't rushing, you're taking your time, and it's getting good! That's just like with my sister's-well God-sister's wedding! She was so nervous, and the night before she could hardly eat! lol! Well, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thanks, keep reading!
wow! you are begining to be such a great writer, but you just need to add more detail! lol! i'm begining to get addicted to this story! awesome!! i can forgive you for lacking in word count. lol! oh, and a few mistakes here and there, simple ones. keep up the GREAT work!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks again, please keep on reading!
“Madame Pomfrey!” Dumbledore said, rushing in. “I came as soon as I heard!” Dur! That should have been MP's response!
holy ****! that was so good! i can't believe it, you've taken my advice and added detail! wonderful! i love it! lol! hehehe! keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks so much. Please keep reading 'n' reviewing!
oh! that was such a cute chapter! a promise ring...how romantic! how funny! i just put that into one of my future chapters! keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Haha..I've been brewing on that idea for months!
i really really like your story! but here's a bit of advice: sit down and try and think of a catching summary. this summary didn't really catch my attention, but i gave it a shot and i love it! and another thing, if you want to separtate your chapters into a few parts use this just take the little"." out and it should work! that way people don't get confused or anything. but, as your story is getting longer, it's getting shorter at the same time. like, when you said that Hermione wore makeup, like what color did she wear? she could have it on like a clown for all i know. this is the same advice someone gave me a while back, and now look at me: Detail is my middle name! lol! just try and take my advice, detail and discription. that is what you should be thinking when you write new chapters! keep up the great work!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! You've given me loads to work with! Keep reading!
okay, sorry it didn't work. if you want to seperate your stories use these: in between them put "hr" then it'll separate the chapters into a few parts. sorry.
okay, sorry. it still didn't work: < > there. then put hr in between these >< but use them the other way around. sorry, but at least your reviews have been boosted!
Author's Response: Haha..thanks!
Getting better and better! Even though I really don't support the H/G ship, it's still good....
Author's Response: Yah, buuuuutttt I do ship H/G...and its my fan fic...so LAY OFF! Omigosh Im so totally joking! :) Thanks for reviewing!
i have one thing to say: IT WAS TOO FRIGGN' SHORT!!! and you are sort of rushing into things, with Ron and stuff...don't make them get married to soon!! i know, i really don't have room to talk, but don't make the same mistake i did! i love this story!! you're 14 huh? that's cool, great age...keep up the great work!!!
Author's Response: Haha...Im sorry, I was in a rush and only had time for that much. I was going to add more, but the next chapter will be over a thousand..i promise!