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Promise of a Spring Moon by Kerichi

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary:

April showers bring May...hassles? Bridesmaid blues and big trouble from small favours complicate Tonks' life when all she wants is to bring her love for Remus into full bloom.


Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 05/28/14 Title: Chapter 6: Illusions of Spring

Crantz and Stern! What a great R&G Are Dead reference. So funny I laughed out loud. Oh and I'm loving all of your RL/NT stories by the way.

Author's Response: Yay, you liked the reference! And thank you (I know it's terribly belated).



A Different Kind of Love by Nymphea

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: James gives Lily a letter on the last day of sixth year:
I’m going to be perfectly honest with you—I’m not that good with feelings. I usually just ask Remus; he’s pretty good with that sort of thing. But I can’t ask Remus to write this letter for me, so you’re just going to have to bear with me while I set the record straight before the school year ends and I forget how to describe my feelings about things between us. [2000 reads! thanks guys!]
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 04/23/14 Title: Chapter 1: A Different Kind of Love

That was so cute!
I love that it's rather poetic, without loosing the teenage boy feel.



One True Love by leahsm2

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: In two very different bedrooms, two very different girls prepared themselves for a winter ball. They both primped and preened and made themselves ready. They also both looked up at the moon as it rose gently in the grey winter sky and fervently wished for the exact same thing.
I am leahsm2 of Slytherin and this is my entry for Prompt Three - Melting a Winter Heart of the Winter Snows Challenge 2008

Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/15/14 Title: Chapter 1: One True Love

I really liked this!



Jemzi by Belledeg

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: Jemzi Zabini is the seventeen year old daughter of Blaise Zabini and his wife Harper, and is about to join her fellow witches and wizards at Hogwarts for their final school year. Jemzi is famous for being the once best friend of Albus Potter. However, a mysterious argument last year that only the two of them were witness to has ruined their friendship and they are now practically enemies. No one knows the reason for their fall out, only that it has caused a great divide in their friendship group.

Jemzi's best friend and Albus' cousin, Rose, suspects that their friendship expired because of strange and unwanted feelings between them. Feelings which, despite their fall out, have not gone away. Feelings that are similar to those she has for a certain Slytherin...

So can the next generation of Hogwarts students learn to forget past actions and forgive?

Nominated for "Best Next Generation Story" and "Best Other Character" in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards

This story features Harry Potter, Ginny Potter, Lily Potter, Luka Krum, Blaise Zabini, Harper Zabini, Zacharias Smith, Leon Holmwood, Tristan Wells, Rose Weasley, Scorpius Malfoy, Jemzi and Albus plus many more.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/21/14 Title: Chapter 6: Hey, Weren't You My Best Friend Once?

Your dialogue is fantastic!



Scorpius Malfoy and the Sins of the Fathers by Hotrav

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary:

We are all influenced by the actions or inactions of our parents. The same is true of Scorpius Malfoy; he has been raised by an overly protective mother and a father who is still coming to grips with the mess that his own father made of his life. Scorpius knows that he will be judged at Hogwarts by what others know or think they know about his father and grandfather.

At Hogwarts Scorpius will meet:

Albus Potter the middle child of ‘The Great Harry Potter’ and Quidditch star Ginny Weasley Potter. A boy who not only has things to live up to but an older brother ready to remind him of who’s boss.

Rose Weasley, Albus’ surrogate sister/first cousin, struggling in her own way, not her mother’s way, to succeed.

Kaitlin Jones, daughter of Tornados player Owain Jones and favorite niece of Gwenog Jones, who is at home on a broom and lost almost everywhere else.

Jimber Dokes recent immigrant from the West Indies trying to fit his own magical heritage Vardoo with the Western style of magic taught at the school

Thad Vance, the Gryffindor Quidditch captain, his grandfather and all of his uncles and aunts were killed by Death Eaters, maybe Lucius Malfoy

Meanwhile in London, Draco and Astoria Malfoy try to build a new life and legacy by betting all they own on a Potions Shop in Diagon Alley.

Beta Reader - Apurva Patel Chapters 1-3

Carol Paquette Chapter 1

Hogwartsbookworm Chapter 4-15

In memory of my Father Horace McConnell 1934-2010


Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/13/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Encounters on the Platform

Very well written. I like how well you mix OCs with Rowling's characters. A lot of stories I've read really struggle with that.
Also, making the Malfoys poor is an interesting twist. I like it.



Heiress of Evil by voldiexx

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Whew, those thirteen years were nasty, but Voldemort's back and better than ever. He's got plenty to do, consolidating a power base, punishing traitors, and not letting the haters get him down, but he's spared some time to look over the custody agreement he signed fourteen years ago...

Annabel Curry wanted to spend the summer getting a tan, perfecting her Cheering Charms, and ensnaring Terry Boot. Instead, she's spending it with her dad the mass murderer and his unshaven goons. Oh yeah, and the shower doesn't work, AND NO ONE BUT HER SEEMS TO CARE.

First dates. Sparkly nail polish. Magical plumbing fiascos. Some heartwarming father-daughter moments. And some not-so-heartwarming ones.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/31/14 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

This is very funny. I'm glad you are writing it.



Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/31/14 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4

executioner chic - bahahaha so funny!



Penumbra I: The Rubicon by elizabeth_austen

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Part One in the "Penumbra" Series.

They call it the War of Blood, a cataclysm which will decide the fate of all sentient life and of wizardry. The Wizarding World is diseased, but Voldemort is just the canker. The worst elements of wizardry have now gathered, not only Death Eaters and Dementors, but all elements of darkness, because underneath it all, invisible to most but nonetheless present, there is an ancient war raging.



As he departs on the Horcrux Hunt, Harry Potter finds an unexpected ally. After he disappears, the unrest and corruption in the Ministry starts making things difficult for the Order and easier for the Death Eaters, Voldemort has found a new and deadly ally, and in the meantime, an elite group of goblins begin planning their own fight against Voldemort.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 05/24/14 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

First, excellent title!
I like your writing style. I am also intrigued by your characters. This is shaping up to be pretty interesting.



I'll Always Remember You by Eleanor Lupin

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Why does Arthur Weasley so hate Lucius Malfoy?
Does Narcissa Malfoy actually envy her older sister?
Because following your heart is all well and good in stories, but in real life, happily ever after doesn't always work.
And you never forget.

This is Eleanor Lupin writing for the Great Hall Cotillion!


Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: I'll Always Remember You

Very well written.

I'm kind of hoping you've written a follow-up...



Half-life by welshdevondragon

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary:

Neville has the rest of his life ahead of him, but all he can do is look back. Molly feels as though she has already lived, and will spend the rest of her life sifting through her memories and regrets and never living in the moment.



AU in that Arthur Weasley dies in Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix. This is Jamie/AcaciaCarter’s and Soraya/babewithbrains’ fault, and therefore I present it to them.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/11/14 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Wow! That was absolutely beautiful! I loved it!



Awry by Liet Dumbledore, Kaitlyn Snape

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: At the end of sixth year, Lily hates Severus. She can never forgive him for that one word, no matter how careless. And so, when she goes home, Lily spends only a short time in her neighborhood before joining Mary in Godric’s Hollow.

At the end of sixth year, James loves Lily. She is his life. He lives to see her each and every day. And so, when he goes home, James is looking for a new way to win her heart in the coming year. Remus comes over, and the two hatch a plan.

At the end of sixth year, everything is as usual.

At the beginning of seventh year, everything has changed.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 07/24/14 Title: Chapter 6: Prevaricator

I'm glad ya'll started writing this again. It's a fun read. =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! We will try to update more frequently, but you know how life can be sometimes. We are very glad that you enjoy it. Just curious- is "ya'll" part of your natural accent, or just for fun? :) Thanks again for being loyal to the story!



James and Me by Northumbrian

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary:
Annabel is having a bad day. Her sudden and unexpected meeting with a face from her past is unlikely to improve matters.

This was Northumbrian of Ravenclaw House writing for Round Three of the 2012 Character Triathlon. This is now a longer chaptered story.

Nominated for: Best Original Character (Chaptered) story (for the narrator, Annabel) and Best Next Generation Story - Quicksilver Quills 2013

Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 04/10/15 Title: Chapter 5: Tiger

Oh man! This is such a great story!
Your James characterization is fantastic!
This chapter was excellent in terms of setting up for later chapters. Between the Robin-Hood-is-real-and-Friar-Tuck-is-the-Fat-Friar storyline, the tease that someday Annie will get the full story of the wizarding world and James' involement with the group that wanted to get him in trouble, I'm really looking forward to reading more.
I will say that I'm not a huge fan of James' backstory in terms of Kirsten. It seems a little to crazy to be true.

Author's Response: Thanks.
I'm glad you like my far-from-perfect James.
The Robin Hood theme will continue for some time, and along the way Annie (and you) will meet other members of the Drakeshaugh gang, and learn how James got into trouble.
As for Kirsten, the story is a little crazy, but only a little.
-N-



Assist by Cinderella Angelina

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Everyone's having a hard time after the war. Percy Weasley thought he was doing a better job pretending he was fine, but Susan Bones can see right through him.

She, on the other hand, is totally fine. She's not pretending at all.

This is Cinderella Angelina of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Cotillion 2013.

(Yes, 2013. Laugh with me. Or at me. I'm not picky.)
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 09/24/14 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I just discovered this story, and I must say, I'm glad you decided to pick up writing it again. I really hope to see you finish it because I have loved it so far.

One thing I love about this is how unique it is. There are a lot of stories about the wizarding world after the defeat of Voldemort, and a good majority of them center on the Weasley family. However, you don't see a lot of stories about the older brothers. This is probably because they are more difficult to write.
You have done a marvelous job writing Percy. You've captured his diligence and desire to impress authority figures very well. You have also done a great job showing his grief and fatigue, as well as his feelings of self-doubt and his concern for his family that is bordering on guilt. I can tell this story is well thought out. As a reader, I appreciate the level of effort you've put into this.

My favorite quote from this chapter is, "All at once, she became a little more human to him. Not that he'd consciously been thinking of her as an emotionless automaton, but other than the time the day before when he had nearly brought her to tears, she had only shown him an imperturbable, professional exterior." I don't exactly know why that passage stood out to me, but it is particularly well-written and I have a feeling it represents an important shift in thier relationship.

All in all, this story was very well written. Keep up the good work, because I really want to read more.



The Falcon and the Peacock by Equinox Chick

Rated: 6th-7th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: The year is 1543, and the heir to the Malfoy estate, Lucius, encounters the young Lady Elizabeth Tudor in the grounds of Hatfield House. It is a meeting, he later discovers, of his mother's engineering, for it is of the utmost importance that he strikes up a friendship with the King's daughter. But the Lady Elizabeth has a powerful protector in her governess, and only the highest political machinations can overcome the will of Kat Champernowne.

In the ensuing Tudor power struggle, no one factored love into the equation, least of all Elizabeth.

Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling, but I think you know that by now.

This is Equinox Chick with her fourth entry for The Great Hall Cotillion.


Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 04/29/14 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Love

As usual, your writing is excellent.
This story was particularly good because it was unique.
Also, even though JK didn't write it, it has become a part of my version of canon.

Finally, this brings "Weasley is our King" out in a whole new light. =)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I have to admit that I giggled a lot at the Weasley is our King connection - hee hee.



Greenhouse Seven by Oregonian

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: In his tumultuous seventh year, Neville thought he had found his life's direction. But the shadow of war covers and changes everything even in Greenhouse Seven.

Written as my Final Exam in the 2013 Missing Moments Class.

Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 05/18/14 Title: Chapter 1: Greenhouse Seven

I like your writing style. I also really like that you showed Professor Sprout preparing for the coming war. The book doesn't show that, but I never liked thinking that they did nothing. Very well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Sydney, for writing a review for my story. I'm glad you like my writing style; it's the only way I know how to write. I think of it as pretty much straightforward and direct, unlike the denser and more convoluted style of some other authors. Much of the joy of fan fiction writing is the opportunity to fill in the material that didn't make it into the books, such as what the professors did to prepare for the inevitable war. There is more about these characters in my most recent story, The Crofter And The Snake. The entire seventh year is a goldmine of untold stories. I am also enjoying your story, and I hope that you will keep it up to the end. (There are so many great but unfinished stories in these archives. :(



Beloved Son by Oregonian

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A chance meeting in a graveyard brings the two ends of the tragedy full circle, and ties them together in a knot of completion. Loss never fades, but the remaining pieces can make a new whole again. Rated AU for the assumption that Lily Potter's father was still living at the end of the second wizarding war.

This story won First Place in the Terrible Two-Shot Challenge.

This story was nominated for the 2014 Quicksilver Quill Awards: Best Non-Canon Romance and Best Alternate Universe.


Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 06/18/14 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Wow! This is a beautiful story.
Your characterization is great. I love Lily's dad.
I can't help but think that Harry would seek out his grandfather if he found out he was still alive.
Or maybe he would (somehow) be convinced to do an interview for the Prophet. In it, he talks about wishing he knew more about his family. Eileen sees the interview, shows it to Lily's dad, then he contacts Harry.
Just a thought. I would love to see Harry meet his grandfather. That would make him so happy.

Author's Response: That's an interesting idea! I hadn't really thought about it, but it makes sense that if Petunia never told Harry anything about his parents and he learned not to ask questions about them, it may well have been that (in this Alternate Universe) she never told him that his grandparents were still alive. So it seems reasonable that Eileen would be instrumental in finally getting the two of them back together. While Harry and Dudley were both children, Petunia had custody of both of them, and since she was estranged from her father, I guess she had the legal right to decide whether or not their grandfather got to see them. But now that Harry is of legal age, even by Muggle legal standards, he can associate with whomever he wants. It would make an interesting little story. And thank you for the review. I'm so glad you liked it.



Of Love and Nargles by FluffyNargles

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Okay, so, when Harry is around, I can't really formulate a completely coherent sentence... Or eat anything without my elbow ending up in some kind of food - like a butter dish. But that has nothing to do with the fact that I fancy him (because I don't). Like my dear (and completely non-loony) friend, Luna, says, it's all because of the nargles.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/12/14 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

It's really fun!
Just curious, where are you going with the talking-to-Merlin thing?



The Harder Struggle by Ericfmc

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: This novel picks up immediately after the Battle of Hogwarts. The novel follows the central characters over the next four months as they try to recover from their ordeal and find a direction for their lives. It is set against the social and political fractures that remain, despite the death of Voldemort, and that threaten renewed conflict in the future. A harder struggle looms, a fight for the soul of the wizarding world, a fight that our heroes cannot ignore. HG/RW , HP/GW

Due to editorial differences with the moderators on this site, only the first 3 chapters are available here. However, the story is now complete and all 29 chapters can be read in full on another site.
Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/21/14 Title: Chapter 1: We're Alive

Good writing.
I liked your room service joke.
I will be following this story. I hope you keep writing.
I also hope you handle this time well. Most authors either don't give their characters enough time to mourn or they over-do it.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. I'll let you be the judge of whether I give the characters enough time to mourn or if I over-do it. The characters actually have a lot to be celebrating as well as mourning and I hope to reflect that, as well as the fact they have been through a lot of trauma and need time to recover.



Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/21/14 Title: Chapter 2: Heroes

I liked the way you set it up so the trio could have a little time together before facing the real world. I think JK would have done the same thing. I liked the line "All three dreaded leaving that room." It really summed up the feelings quite nicely.
I think sometimes you could explain the characters' feelings better if you used fewer words. I found myself just skimming over the long paragraphs talking about what we all know the characters are thinking.
Other than that, its a great start.
Oh and I noticed a minor grammar mistake: 'one's" in Ginny's letter should be "ones" (no apostrophe.)
Keep up the good work.
I look forward to see where you're going with this.

Author's Response: Thanks again for your detailed review. I appreciate it. I'll bear in mind what you say about wordiness. It is difficult to know what to leave in and what to leave out. Different readers want different things. You should have seen the first few drafts, far more wordy. Thanks for pointing out the grammar mistake. I will fix it.



Reviewer: Wenlock Signed
Date: 03/27/14 Title: Chapter 3: Reunion

Hi! Its me again. I hope you're not getting sick of my reviews...
So as usual you understand your characters well. But this isn't meant to be a character essay. I still think you're over-expaining a bit.
I like where this story is going but I think you need to be a bit more subtle, especially because it seems like your villain will be the subtle, calculating type.
For example, when you introduce your villain, you could say something like this:
Percy turned his eyes from the happy reunion to gaze upon the crowd. He saw (describe the crowd). Standing alone was a tall, menacing figure, quietly appraising the Weasleys Oliver Grantham, senior partner of the old Wizarding legal firm of Bellbocks, Grantham and Popplefrock and member of the Wizengamot. Percy thought to himself, "I'm glad he fought on our side. He would be a formidable enemy." How right he was.

Author's Response: Hi Wenlock, I very much appreciate your reviews and the time and thought you put into them. Constructive criticism is the best type of review to receive because it enable me to improve my writing and the story. I guess I am over explaining somewhat. Part of why I am writing this story is to process my own feeling and thoughts at the end of Deathly Hallows and finish it off properly for myself. That does mean some rehashing and over explanation at this stage until the new story properly opens up. There are 26 more chapters planned and I hope you stay with it. Eric