So far, your story is progressing nicely. This chapter definitely advances the movement of the relationships, but I was a little suprised by some of the reactions. I thought that the squealing of the seventh year girls about Cassie and Sirius might have been a bit overdone because they are seventh years. To me it almost seemed like the reactions of the first years to James were more mature than the reactions of the seventh years to the budding romance between Cassie and Sirius. However, I really like the way you have Lily reacting to James and how she is really the only one to pick up on his slightly odd behavior. You definitely highlight her quick mind with the connection she makes about the obituary being for James' dad. I look forward to seeing how her "discovery," as you titled the chapter, will affect the way she acts towards James. Keep up the good writing.

Author's Response: thank you for reviewing again!!!! i can understand what you mean about sirius/cassie and the squealing, but you have to think about sirius- he is hot and he has his own fanclub. he's kind of like a mini celebrity. also, Vega is more mature than most seventh years because of her older sister. (andy was not one of the squealers, she just really likes to gossip. hopefully she wouldn't be squealing about her own cousin, cuz that's just wrong.) anyhoo, I really appriciate your reviewing and I like to hear ways I can improve. I see what you mean on that stuff, and I will keep it in mind in later chapters. THANKS!!

Another great chapter to read. I like the way this chapter followed right on the heels of the last one so we, the readers, got to see the immediate aftermath of James and Lily’s little interlude before breakfast. Of course, there wasn’t really much going on that had to do with that, but it was good to see that anyway because it showed that their moment together didn’t really change everything immediately. What I really liked about this chapter, though, was the fact that you show them in class. I felt bad for James in Transfiguration, but I think you did a great job of portraying a compassionate McGonagall without having her slip out of character.

However, there were a few things I noticed in this chapter in regard to the writing. The first thing is that you should be careful when you use dashes because there should be a space before and after a dash, and you forgot the space before the dash twice at the beginning of the chapter. Also, something which is probably just a typo, you forgot the opening quotation marks in this line: ’ Frank Longbottom, Lucius Malfoy.” The boys glared at each other evilly.’ There should be a double quotation mark right before ‘Frank’ as that appears to be a direct quotation and you use a double quotation mark right after the period after ‘Malfoy.’ Another spot that is probably just a typo is the bolded area in this sentence: ‘Hatred had been mutual as soon as they had laid eyes oneachother’ I think that should actually be three words and read ‘on each other’ instead. These three little things didn’t really detract from the chapter itself, but I thought I should mention them so you could keep a look out for stuff like it in the future.

All in all, I found this chapter to be as pleasant to read as the three preceding it. I like the way you have the Defense Against The Dark Arts Professor pairing up the students and putting Sirius and Remus with the girls they like while putting James with Severus. That was quite a nice touch to that scene. Of course, the fact that Lily followed Sirius and Remus out of class as they took James to the Hospital Wing was a great touch as well, especially when James woke up and was completely surprised to hear her voice. Ending the chapter with his dream was very interesting because it shows how alone he was feeling at the point when he lost consciousness. It will be interesting to see what happens next. I can’t help wondering whether or not Snape got in trouble for using Sectumsempra the way Harry got in trouble for it. Very nice chapter.

Hmmm, very interesting beginning. I can definitely see Lavender wanting revenge on Ron and Hermione. The way you make her out is really funny. I especially like the part at breakfast where Lavender turns to Harry and all of sudden she can't stop herself from saying all that stuff. It's brilliant. The only thing that confused me was this line: 'If Lavender was old moldy-shorts, she would be laughing evilly until the cows…. Erm make that Crumpled Horned Snorkacks….' Who is Lavendear refering to when you write 'old moldy-shorts'? Am I completely missing something or is that something that will be divulged in later chapters? Anyway, I definitely enjoyed reading this and can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Oh... Woops! Moldy-Shorts, is a name some people use to refer to Voldemort , when kind of poking fun at him. It sounds kind of alike and has the same number of syllables. Luffles your reveiw by the way.... Thank You! (anyone notice how I respod to every single reveiw??)

I think you have a great beginning for your story. Your prose is absolutely fantastic and really makes me see the surroundings. Adding Vernon in to push Lily out of the house was a fantastic little detail. Lily does seem awfully melancholy, but is slightly jarred out of it with the unexpected appearance of James and Sirius. I loved that fact that his house elf was following her, and I wonder if there's more to that. Anyway, I hope your second chapter gets posted soon as you've already submitted it. I will be interested to see where you take your story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!! I have the biggest obsession with imagery, and thus I was "all of a flutter!" (*hehehe*) to hear that you can really see the setting--ah, how lovely is life? Quite lovely!! Yeppy!! I must thank you profusely for such a superb review--hearing (or--well--reading to be more accurate) all those wonderful things was absolutely splendid, and has officially made my day--thank you for that!!!

I like the way your first chapter focuses on Lily, but you add a little bit of James in with his phone call. Of course, the little comical bit with Sirius in the background was a fantastic touch. The one thing I would say is that you probably meant to write Mrs. Evans when you wrote Mrs. Potter during the kitchen scene where Lily was presumably talking to her mother about James' phone call. Anyway, I'm on to read the next chapter! Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out that mistake, its corrected now.. And thanks for the review.. you really are too kind.

This chapter, although long in coming, was definitely worth the wait. The opening sequence where everyone is eatcing is really funny, especially Twinky's comments to Sirius. It only gets better after dinner with the two different groups are in their own rooms. I like how you slip Twinky in at this point of your story and really show her obsession with Sirius by listing all of the ways she has tried getting into the boys' room; I was laughing while I read that. I also enjoyed the Rapunzel part. Having the Marauders standing outside in the storm was pretty funny, especially when Lily shoots James down. My favorite part, though, is the end when Lily and Valerie get into an argument. It may seem odd that that is my favorite part, but I think that argument might force both girls to really examine the cause for it and lead to some revelations for each of them. I can definitely see how that part of the story might be the driving force behind some other things that happen later on. It will be insteresting to find out.

However, what kind of review would it be if I didn't make some kind of nit-picky comment? So, here are a few comments. One of the biggest things I noticed throughout your chapter was the missing commas around the name of a character who is being directly addressed by another character. You don't forget it all of the time, but you did forget it ten times in this chapter. So, you may want to keep an eye on that. Also, at the very end of this chapter, I think you have two typos. The first one seems to be in this sentence: 'How COULD Valerie's say such mean things?' I think 'Valerie's' should only be 'Valerie' instead. The second place I noticed a typo was in this sentence: 'Valerie's cheek were bright red and tear threatened to spill down her cheeks.' I think 'cheek' should be 'cheeks' and that 'tear' should be 'tears.' Now, I'm not sure about the 'tear' one, but I'm very sure about the 'cheek' being 'cheeks' because 'were' is plural.

Now that I've gotten that out of the way, I can go back to more pleasant things. Overall, this whole chapter was written very well and kept me riveted to the screen. It really moves your story right along and leaves me wanting more. I am anxious to see the way the argument between Lily and Valerie affects the atmosphere instead Allison's house. There are so many possibilities of what could happen that my mind is on overload trying to figure out the most likely one. I'm sure I won't guess it as this is your story, but I will have fun speculating. Very nicely written! Happy Holidays!

Author's Response: Haha, I know we say this a lot but we really love your reviews. You had me blushing in the first paragraph, thanks for all the nice comments. I'll be sure to fix the typos. Wow, we feel like actual writers... people speculate over our plot. Its an amazing feeling to know that you have fans... Thanks a lot. Merry Christmas :)

Great chapter. I love the way you start the chapter by giving a little explanation of how James actually went about calling Lily, including the little bit about what he said when her dad answered the phone which was hilarious. The whole part about the dinner party is fantastic since it forces the boys and girls to be around each other. I like the little twist you add about Valerie liking James when you give your descriptions of the girls. You are setting the story up for an interesting scene between Lily and Valerie when Lily finally recognizes her own attraction to James, unless Valerie has moved on by that point of your story. Also, I noticed a couple of places throughout your story where your dialogue formatting could use a little tweaking. There were a few places where you ended a line of dialogue, or leading up to some dialogue, with a comma but started the next part of the sentence with a capitalized letter when it should not be capitalized. Other than those few dialogue formatting errors, your whole story was amazing. I am anxious to find out what the boys end up doing to the girls since they are staying the night in the same house, not to mention how the parents react to it. Your whole story is fantastic and I can't wait to see where you take it from here.

Author's Response: We absaloutly LOVE your reviews, we will fix those mistakes. Thanks again for the review(s).

The fact that you started this story off with James failing a few times is really interesting. I mean, most people portray as the type of person who can never lose, which ends up being the case, but it's great to see him having to try more than once to succeed. Another thing I really enjoyed about the beginning of this story is the way you don't actually say exactly why James is trying to climb the wall, aside from Sirius talking him into doing it. That bit of mystery really piqued my interest because I wanted to know why James was trying to climb the wall. Of course, when I found out that it was because he was trying to find a way to get to Lily, I totally understood his rather idiotic, though romantic, behavior.

What did seem slightly odd to me was the idea that he would've even been able to climb up there. It is just odd that the founders wouldn't have thought of that type of thing when they created the other obstacles, such as the stairs turning to slides, that kept the boys from entering the girls' dormitory. Of course, maybe they never considered that a wizard would use a Muggle means of climbing up the wall and that's why James succeeded. Either way, it's such a great idea that I'm really glad it worked.

Once he actually made it to the window, I loved what James did. The banter between him and Lily was really great, and I love the fact that she caught him before he actually fell the first time when he lost his hold. I mean, you don't make James an utterly charming person that Lily can't refuse but, instead, do a wonderful job of keeping him in character by making him sound fairly full of himself. The fact that Lily was ready to shut the window on him is nicely done as well because it keeps her in character as well. My favorite line of the whole story came during their exchange, and it was when Lily said:
"I’ll wait while you go get it. Go on. Down, boy.”
That just fit Lily so perfectly that I couldn't help laughing just as much as Sirius and Remus did when they heard it from their spots at the base of the tower.

That was another part of this story that I really liked. The fact that it was told from Remus' point of view so that it encompassed more than just the exchange between Lily and James. Getting to see the reactions of the rest of the Marauders who were waiting for James was just brilliant. It made me relate to the story so much more because I could put myself in their shoes and enjoy James' wooing that much more.

Finally, your ending was such a great way to wrap up the story. What better way to end it than to have Lily mimic James' actions just to have a chat. I mean, she could've just as easily gone up to his room using the stairs from the common room, but the fact that she chooses to do what he did is a nice way of showing that she really was equal to him in ability. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and love that fact that the closing line was given to Lily in a story that showed more of the Marauders than it really showed her. Nicely done!

Marvelous! Simply marvelous! I could never envision a better way for the last battle to go. The Defendo Familia spell is brilliant. I love your explanation about how Harry went to the professors and, between them all, they figured out a way to protect everyone all at once. Also, the way you have Madam Pomfrey and Professors Lupin and Slughorn creating a potion to minimize the effects of the pain in Harry's scar is genius. Of course, the reason I really love this story is the way you weave the comic and the serious together, especially here at the end. I was a little shocked when the Death Eaters and Voldemort showed up, but I loved the fact that it was a trap set up by Harry and all of his loved ones. My only qualms with this chapter were some canon errors, such as the missing capitalization of 'p' in Patronus and the misspelling of Ollivander, which has two 'L's. Howeve, aside from that, this has been the best last battle fic I have read. Everything about this story was enjoyable because of the way you set everything up. This was definitely a job very well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words and the corrections. I'll be updating those spellings and capitalizations. I'm at a slight disadvantage since I only have the tapes with me on the road, where I do most of my writing, but I certainly will be using the lexicon to check on how to spell character names (and other things) from now on.