There are a few other stories I have written, and these have been removed to put them onto another site. You can read them at http://www.fanfiction.net/u/991894/ My apologies to those who have put those stories in their favourites list - thanks for that by the way!
If you read my stories, please review them, whether that review be good, bad or otherwise. I need feedback! Don't make me beg. It does nothing for my dignity.
Your Prologue piqued my curiousity and the first chapter didn't give too much away. I look forward to reading more!
Author's Response: Yay!! Thank you!! You've made me a very happy bunny!! (not in the literal sense...)
This was so beautiful in it's darkness, it left me breathless and quite speechless. Well done.
Hmmm...Me thinks that Dumbledore is very curious about young Harry. You're leading up to a twist, I can feel it! lol
Bring on the next chapter!
Author's Response: Hahaha...You know I like writing twists. But we\'ll see if I can turn this into one. ~Sara
I like the way you've started this. I'm looking forward to reading the next installment.
Author's Response: Thank you!
I really like that you've layed the groundwork for a very involved story. Between Ron and Hermione's obvious relationship problems (I'm assuming that they are together), Ginny being lonely and pining for Harry and Harry trying to convince himself that he's in love with Matti all make for a potentially awesome story.
To echo what someone else said in your reviews, a beta might be a good idea. I'm not sure what other beta's do, but mine basically reads my story, edits any spelling and grammatical errors (which we both oftentimes miss!), points out any inconsistancies and helps with the flow of the story and gives me inspiration when I get stuck. The story fubdamentally stays the same, but it's soo much better after Bec has read it! If you need an editor (or beta) I'd be happy to be yours.
Lastly, I went to your profile and I'm am amazed that you're only 14!!! Good god woman, I thought you were so much older than that. You're writing style is so mature. I've read fic from people twice your age that is no where near as interesting and original. I'm very impressed!
Author's Response: Awww, thanks soo much! I'm glad you liked the story, and thanks for all the compliments! Maybe I do need a beta... how do Beta's work? I don't really get it. I mean I know what they do, but how do they read your story? Anyway, thanks for offering ^_^ If you would it would be very helpful. I have problems with my dialogue, or so the moderators tell me ^_^ Thanks for the review!
Oohh, I jst so want to sock both Harry and Mathilda in the chops! What a cowardly way to break up with someone and I reckon that Mathilda isn't the real deal, either. I must ammend my last review - Ron and Hermione were together, past tense. I get it now. On to chapter three!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I have to say that I reckon Harry's a bit of a jerk. Even in the real books, even though I'm not sure he's THAT much of a jerk in those. Everyone seems to think Matilda is an imposter or something, but she's not! She's actually got a very sad History which comes up in chapter five. My friend, tonks_667, suggests that I kill her off. I guess I'll have to see where the story goes! (It sounds silly, but I'm rooting for Ginny. I know I can make whatever I want to happen happen, but I feel like this story has a mind of its own!) Anyway, thanks for reviewing! ^_^
...and the plot thickens... :D
Serioulsy, though, I really like your style, and you're concepts are very original. A rogue sorting hat? Who would have thought? One thing though, and that is I cannot see McGonagall blindly following the Ministry on anything, but I'm sure you have your reasons. :)
Well done, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: ^_^ For once someone didn't say they were confused by it! I'm actually regretting the rogue Sorting hat, because the way it goes rogue doesn't seem realistic to me anymore. Especially since I read something on J.K's site that proves it wrong!
You are right, McGonagall wouldn't do that. I never really thought of that lol, but thanks for pointing it out ^_^ And about that Beta position? If you would, could you be my beta? ^_^ Anyway, thanks for reviewing. I love reviews!
"Aside from blood, he didn't believe there was anything left in the world that was truly pure, but Lucius lifted his glass anyway."
After the betrothal dinner, Malfoy's tete a tete with Narcissa transforms a marital arrangement into something more satisfying.
It's not often that I read fan fiction that portrays the relationship with Lucius and Narcissa as anything other than loveless and controlling. I really liked the 'tete a tete' between them and you gave us a better glimpse of how strong Narcissa can be.
Hehehe...Bellatrix hairless, hehee...
Author's Response: There's an old Brit film called "The Witches" with Anjelica Houston as the best witch- she turns the boy hero into a mouse- and in film witches are all bald, wearing wigs. I got a kick out of thinking of Bella like that. ^_^
It's not often that I read fan fiction that portrays the relationship with Lucius and Narcissa as anything other than loveless and controlling. I really liked the 'tete a tete' between them and you gave us a better glimpse of how strong Narcissa can be.
Hehehe...Bellatrix hairless, hehee...
Author's Response: Cool, a Matrix review (what I call any second copy- the film said deja vu was just a glitch in the Matrix, heh) so now I can say what I forgot to before....Thanks! ^_^