This isn't bad...for a start. I think rather than having it be a one shot you should have it be the first chapter of a story... for a romance fic there's not really that much romance...it's well written though...

That was....very depressing. I was so happy for Ron, that he was going to marry Hermione and everything, because he had obviously had very little happiness in recent times, and then Hermione gets killed off. *sob*. I really like how you made Mrs. Weasley feel bad for Lucius, even though he's like totally evil. I think it accurately shows... the um..what's the word I'm looking for?...compassion maybe? of a parent who has also lost a child(ren). One question: Did Lucius kill Hermione? I'm glad you made it a one shot- it ends in a good place, and besides, I wouldn't want to be there when Ron finds out! Probably one of the saddest stories I've read, but probably also one of the best I've read. I commend you on your ability to write so wonderfully in such diverse areas. I laughed at Dear Dumby and cried (well, almost) at this. Absolutely brilliant. 10/10 for sure.

Author's Response: Thank you! I know, I felt really bad for Ron, I can't imagine losing everything - and then the one thing you had left. I'm glad you liked the bit with Mrs. Weasely feeling bad for Lucius, as I was a bit afraid that some people might not agree, but I think that any mother would. Hmm, compassion is a good word for it! Or maybe empathy? Yes, Lucius did kill Hermione, as a sort of twisted vengeance for Draco's death. That's why at the very beginning, it said 'bittersweet ending as one of the last of the Death Eaters is finally put behind bars' as that was how they caught Lucius, at the scene of Hermione's murder, but though it was good to finally get one of the last remaining Death Eaters, it came at a terrible price: Hermione's death. I did try to drop a few hints throughout the fic (about Hermione's murder), but they were very small! Thank you for your amazing praise, I'm so glad that you think so highly of my writing, and that it managed to provoke such different emotions - as that’s what makes writing worthwhile! Thank you for a wonderful review!

Not bad at all. The main issues I saw where with sentence structure and word choice. Some of the sentences, towards the beginning at least, were a little bit run-on I think. Also, some of them were a little confusing and I had to read them a few times to understand what they meant. This issue was mainly in the first half of the story, the second half was pretty much fine. There were also a few grammatical errors throughout, but that's not that big of a problem. Um, personally, I don't view Lily as the type of person who would get so scared from just walking around in a forest, but that's ok...maybe she is...Overall, you did a pretty good job. I don't see why the first reviewer said there was nothing positive to say, because there are certainly a lot of positive aspects about your story.

Author's Response: Thank you!!! You\'ve given me some ideas on how to improve this fic and also what to look out for in my other ones! Thank you for your review!

I like it! It's very original. It's kind of depressing, but that's okay! The end is happy! It was very well written. I like how you switched point of view between Ginny and Lily. Great work. Keep writing, because you're good at it!

Author's Response: Thanks, it kind of had to be depressing...to fit in with everything, it would\'ve been weird if the final battle had just finished and everyone was dancing about singing and eating candfloss! Hehe. Thanks a lot for your review and I am definitely going to keep writing. How could I stop after a review as lovely as this?

Very nice. I liked it alot!

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad.

Aw, poor James. hehe I like the idea that they were friends, that's different than most stories. Good job, I enjoyed it.

Author's Response: I\'m glad you enjoyed it. That\'s what I was going for!