Hey, I'm Lilypudding AKA LongbottomsLady... I just started writing fanfic a few months ago, but I've been writing all my life!
I'm really sorry I had to delete "A Summer to Remember." I fell of the face of fanfiction Earth for nearly three months and once I rejoined, I had forgotton my plans for chapter two. I solemly swear never to attempt another chaptered story again and I am sticking to one shots. I am sorry for the pain it has caused any of my readers. The regret I put into deleting it is unmeasurable.
Series Status:
The World's A Stage for Lily and James: I'm updating that periodically; however, I'm only going to add a new story when natrual inspiration strikes. I'm thinking about songs from several shows, like RENT, Into the Woods, Guys and Dolls and maybe even Fiddler on the Roof.
IMPORTANT UPDATE: "I'll Cover You," a songfic to the song from RENT, is in a beta's hands as I type this. I'm hoping the nature of this song in the musical won't turn people off, as this fic completely focuses on Lily and James's wedding and has nothing to do with the homosexual relationship of Angel and Collins. "I'll Cover You" is a romantic song, and can fit many couples regardless of sexuality.
Stories Status:
Perfect for Each Other: Completed
How Did It Happen: One shot
Defying Gravity: One shot
A Mother's Love: One shot
Somewhere: One shot
Such Sweet Sorrow: One shot poem
Your Eyes: One shot poem
A Summer To Remember: WIP chaptered L/J
COMING SOON: I'll Cover You- One-shot L/J.
ABOUT ME:
I'm just a HP fan who is obsessed with musical theatre and dogs. I enjoy performing, even though I'm not very good at it, and my love of theatre is second only to my love of writing. I generally try to be a constructive reviewer - don't be insulted if I leave a long and not-so-positive review on your story, as I sometimes will, because my intent is to help. While I usually give long and guiding reviews on barely-reviewed stories, I'm not above the occasional "Great story!" review.
Ok, heres a banner for Defying Gravity, courtesy of Token from HPFF:
Banner by sayiansirius!
Well, I hoped you enjoy reading my bio and you enjoy my stories!
Wow, that was definitely the best poem I have ever read. Have you ever considered writing real poetry, like not fanfiction? Because if I was a publisher, and you wrote a real poem half as good as that I would publish it without a doubt. Excellent! I look foward to reading poetry by you in the future! Wow! I'm thinking it is Harry after OotP, or maybe Ginny? Great job! 10 zillion out of ten! I would write more, but it is so good I am still in shock! Wow, that was amazing!
Author's Response: Wow, that review really brightens my day. =D I've never really thought of publishing any poetry and I think it will be awhile before I do. I should have a bunch more written after Christmas top post on here though.
And this present, who could have given him this?
I'd originally planned to add more chapters to this, but this story has already said everything I wanted to have said about Remus. Maybe, if I decide to continue, I'd make it a seperate story. Until then, hope you enjoy this one!
Good first chapter. I think you should have mentioned how he got the diary- the summary was more of a prologue. Still I like what you've got here. Its excellent. I think you need to bring up the writing to a little more of a stand-out level, if you know what I mean, but that should improve with time. Great job. This story has so much potential, and I'm looking foward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: thank you, your review is very inspiring! I'm writing chapter two now, and i hope it'll meet your expectations
Aww, this is such a cute and creative fic! I would love to give constructive criticism, but I just can't find anything at all in this story that needs fixing! The only thing I didn't like about my entire experience with this story is my cheeks hurt from smiling so hard as I read it. I love how you had them saying, "Hoot" and then translating it into words. Such a cute, cute story! This is up there on the same level with "Buckbeak's Ferret Dinner." Great fic; I adored it!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! This was actually my very first fic that I wrote (over a year ago). I\'m glad that people like you still love it. The \"hoot\" translation was inspired by \"A Series of Unfortunate Events\" and Lemony Snicket\'s translations of Sunny\'s gibberish. I hope your cheek gets better :)
Wow, that was excellent. It was just beautiful! I'm wondering if you read any coverage of the Hurricane Katrina situation in New Orleans. Though I live far far away from Lousiana, I was really interested in learning about the hurricane. From what I know about it, your poem seemed to be exactly what New Orleans was like after Katrina. I thought the line, "dogs left to die" really stood out. Not only did it give me connection to the hurricane, it made me think of if I could leave my dog in such a horrible situation as the one you described. Excellent! I don't read much poetry, but I can tell this is a great piece of writing!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I actually wrote this for an English assignment on the book 'Children of the Dust,' in which there is a nuclear war and humans are almost wiped out. Now that you mention it, it does portray the Katrina tragedy - freaky!! I am really glad that you enjoyed my poem, it's such a good feeling to know that someone likes what you wrote...
Thanks again,
Lilly
Let me just first establish that this is a GOOD first prologue. I haven't read the first real chapter yet, but I know this story has a lot of potential. You've got some real good stuff here. However, I think you need to watch out for grammer a little more- I saw a few missed commas. When James and Sirius say, "Yes, please," for example, the comma is missing after yes. I think you are great at descriptions and writing... I loved the first two chapters! However, the dialogue between James and Sirius was a bit un-Marauderish, if you know what I mean. They did not sound like the proud and mighty Marauders- they sounded like wimps. I know the prologue is just a prologue and should be short, but where is the famous Marauder arrogance? I think it is good, but definitely needs some work.
Ok, this one was much much better. You asked for constructive crit and I'll try to give it, but they'res not much to crit. I liked Lily and her friends- they were funny and relaxed. They seemed to flow completely. However, the Marauders still seemed very very stiff. I think you should try to give the flow you give to Lily and her friends to James and his friends. It may be hard, and I have a feeling I know why you are more comfortable with writing girls than boys, but just put that flow into the boys, make it a little more arrogant, and you will be fine. I really liked this one!
Author's Response: Cheers. I guess, as you say, I am more comfortable writing for girls probably because I am a girl and it's hard to try and get inside a boy's mind and especially the Marauders as we know so little about them. I'll have a look through what I've written, I have to say I've probably given them more of a sensitive side because I thought that, as with a lot of people, aroogance is a bit of a front to mask true feelings if you know what I mean. Thanks again and keep reading :)
Great job! This is a great idea for a story, especially because Cedric's death is so overlooked after the deaths in OotP and HBP. It was very good and had potential to be extremely moving. I didn't like what you put in the summary about JKR though, that was a bit off-putting and almost concieted. Other than that, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I do think Cedric has a very interesting story--especially the more I write and the more I discover about him. I'm sorry you didn't like the summary... one of those dry humor moments. Perhaps I'll change it... when I come up with something good and not lame. Any suggestions? :) For now I'm working on the rest of the story... thanks for reading!
Why is this in Marauder Era? Did you submit it under marauder, or did it somehow accidently end up in Marauder instead of General by a modding error? It needs to be moved, because its really misleading to readers who want to read Marauder Era. Sorry, but its got to be moved.
First, let me establish that this is absolutely hilarious, but it needs some work. The summary... you really need to do something about it. Also, when Ron and Harry exchanged the "Don't ask" looks I think you put a puntuation mark you didn't need, I know something there didn't look right. Other than that, I really liked the whole plot! The "We're with da forks" part seriously made me laugh out loud! The emotional range of a teaspoon line is literally my favorite Potterism ever, being a devout Ron/Hermione shipper, and I loved seeing it be used in this content. Clean it up a little, and you have an absolutely brilliant story! Fabulous!
Author's Response: Nah, I like the end how it is :)
Author's Response: puntuation? The story needs some puns?
Wow, this is great. I've never read much with your OC Maeve except for the one about Snape being in prison, and I really like the approach you have here. 10/10 definitely!
Author's Response: Thanks, Lilypudding. :-) You should go read DoL and SS. ;-)
Wow, I thought that was great! You have a great vocabulary. I'm a big Remus fan and my sister is even more so (her nickname is Lupinslover) and it was refreshing to see him captured by such a talented author! You have great skill and will probably become very prominant in the fanfiction world one day. Great job for a first fic! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Wow, those are some of the most encouraging words I've ever been told! I'm glad you thought I captured Remus well; sometimes I get intimdated at the thought of trying, because I don't want to mess with him! ^^; Thank you so much, Lilypudding (love the name!)! I'm hoping in future I can be worthy of everyone's kind words!
Tell your sister "Hi" from a fellow Lupin fan!
Amazing... that was absolutely amazing. I'm not sure if you noticed the entire last part was in italics (just in case you don't know, to cut the italics after the letter use the tag ) but other than that I loved it. I wasn't sure who died first- Tom's mother or his father- and I noticed that Hagrid wasn't in Tom's year- but otherwise, it was perfect! I don't know what I can say. I loved it! It was just the perfect balence of emotions and reality. All I can say is "amazing!"
Author's Response: Thanks! You're right about the italics, I forgot to cut it out. Also, I'm pretty sure I said that Tom Sr. died before Merope, but maybe I forgot that too. And Hagrid is in a different year, seeing as Tom opened up the Chamber in his sixth year, and Hagrid was expelled in his third. But thanks for the review! If you have any stories, I'll stop by.
Awesome awesome awesome first chapter! I love how you've set it up... its perfect! Absolutely amazing! I don't know what to say but this is really awesome! I love how you've put James with a tradgedy, and I can't wait to see hwo James's father was involved. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Thank you for drowning in compliments! It's nice to think that my story isn't an utter failure.
Author's Response: I made a mistake. I meant to say "thank you for drowning ME in compliments!"
I like the approach of Lily not having a true friend or anyone really knowing her. However, wasn't she popular? Is she everyone likes her popular or has a lotta friends popular? I think it adds more mystique to her character- she seems A LOT like Hermione and I like that. 10/10.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I know Lily was popular, and it KILLS me to go against anything cannon, but things get better. I never compared her to Hermione, but it works! Thanks again for the review, love them!
I really like how diabotically evil Lily is! I love love loooovvvvvvvveeee this story! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: *cackles* Yes, I love reading and writing stories where Lily is nearly as evil as the Marauders. Thanks for the review!
Lily Evans has never particularily liked James Potter, but when she decides to look at him in a different light, she may change her mind... One shot song-fic, based on the song Everywhere by Michelle Branch.
Good job, this is a short yet very powerful one-shot. I really liked how you characterized James and the other Marauders. Judging from this story, you write the Marauders excellently. I found Lily very different from the usual fanfic Lily- less dramatic and over analysical, if thats even a word. Although at first the change in your Lily vrs. most other fanfic Lilys sort of put me off, I decided I really didn't mind because the story was so well written! 10/10!
Author's Response: hey, thanks for the review, I'm really glad that you liked it!! I'm glad that you like the way I characterised the Marauders, and as for Lily, well, i have always had different views on her as compared to most of the other writers on here, judging on evidence I found in the books. I'm sorry that you didn't seem to like that, but it can't be helped. I'm glad that you liked it overall, thanks for the ten!!
What a beautiful story! This is a great translation of Harry Potter to the time of Romeo and Juliet. This is the first fic of its kind that I have ever read, and I really enjoyed it. You've really shown that the story of Romeo and Juliet is timeless. Great story!
I really enjoyed reading this poem. It was very long, but still a joy to read. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed it. "Life will be a spiral staircase, a steep one with no rails." I really liked that metaphor, and found it really related to life. I found that poem beautiful. 10/10, definitely.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I'm glad someone bothered to read it...sorry about the length...but I was recently reading some Time and National Review articles about the war in Israel and I said, "Hell, I can make good stuff out of this." Thanks once again for the review.
Wow, I really think this story is very cute! At first, I was very confused because of the flashback... did James just spontanously come up to her and kiss her? I was sort of expecting more of a reaction - both the normal reaction of someone just coming up and kissing you and the overdramatic, Lily Evans vrs. James Potter reaction. However, I'm glad I continued to read the rest of the story! I really enjoyed the ending. In the end, you captured Lily's personality perfectly! Great job!
Wow! This is a really amazing and powerful, reflective work. Both amazingly poetic and stunningly metaphoric, this wonderful one-shot is both insightful and cleverly written. While it is a very unique peice of work with a very different subject matter, I really like this reflective monologue. This one-shot is amazingly powerful.
I really loved the clever, hidden metaphors and symbolism that you used to really give this work life. The constant mentioning of garden is really brilliant symbolism. It reminds me of the garden of Eden, and this simple allusion to the tale of Adam and Eve, a tale everyone knows, really gives your work life. While the symbolism of the thistle isn't as obvious, a quick dictionary.com search of the word "thistle" yeilded that it was a Hebrew word, further moving the Bibilical symbolism.
The vision of the girl at the lake is quite a stunning sight. I'm not quite sure why Mrs. Black keeps seeing this peaceful, serene dream or vision, though. I think you should try to make that more clear. While it is obvious she is Mrs. Black, I was a little confused for a bit and wondered if it was a memory or another painting of Mrs. Black. While I finally came to the conclusion it is a memory, maybe you could add what really happened on that day. However, really, it is up to you. The fact you never quite explained it gave this story a multi-faced ending and a lot of suspense.
This really is a great peice of writing. You show a lot of promise with the pen and I'm really looking foward to reading your further works. Amazing fic, and keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Wow! This is an amazing review you left. It\'s long and meaningful, and I can\'t thank you enough for that.
Hmm, I really didn\'t know that about thistle, so it was quite an accidental symbolism. First, I was going to use a dandelion, but that would have felt a bit weird, I think. I just needed something to represent Sirius - strong, rough, edgy, but a good person once you got to know him (thistles bloom, and then they are rather pretty; but if you don\'t know that they bloom, you might find them harsh and ugly).
The girl in the meadow was indeed a memory, and it was there mostly to show that at one point in her life, Mrs. Black had been happy. At one point life had been easier, and she hadn\'t been a failure.
Hmm, the more I think about it, the more I start to feel sorry for Mrs. Black. I don\'t approve her way of life, but I sort of understand her.