11/07/05
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Hey, I'm Lilypudding AKA LongbottomsLady... I just started writing fanfic a few months ago, but I've been writing all my life!
I'm really sorry I had to delete "A Summer to Remember." I fell of the face of fanfiction Earth for nearly three months and once I rejoined, I had forgotton my plans for chapter two. I solemly swear never to attempt another chaptered story again and I am sticking to one shots. I am sorry for the pain it has caused any of my readers. The regret I put into deleting it is unmeasurable.
Series Status:
The World's A Stage for Lily and James: I'm updating that periodically; however, I'm only going to add a new story when natrual inspiration strikes. I'm thinking about songs from several shows, like RENT, Into the Woods, Guys and Dolls and maybe even Fiddler on the Roof.
IMPORTANT UPDATE: "I'll Cover You," a songfic to the song from RENT, is in a beta's hands as I type this. I'm hoping the nature of this song in the musical won't turn people off, as this fic completely focuses on Lily and James's wedding and has nothing to do with the homosexual relationship of Angel and Collins. "I'll Cover You" is a romantic song, and can fit many couples regardless of sexuality.
Stories Status:
Perfect for Each Other: Completed
How Did It Happen: One shot
Defying Gravity: One shot
A Mother's Love: One shot
Somewhere: One shot
Such Sweet Sorrow: One shot poem
Your Eyes: One shot poem
A Summer To Remember: WIP chaptered L/J
COMING SOON: I'll Cover You- One-shot L/J.
ABOUT ME:
I'm just a HP fan who is obsessed with musical theatre and dogs. I enjoy performing, even though I'm not very good at it, and my love of theatre is second only to my love of writing. I generally try to be a constructive reviewer - don't be insulted if I leave a long and not-so-positive review on your story, as I sometimes will, because my intent is to help. While I usually give long and guiding reviews on barely-reviewed stories, I'm not above the occasional "Great story!" review.
Ok, heres a banner for Defying Gravity, courtesy of Token from HPFF:
Banner by sayiansirius!
Well, I hoped you enjoy reading my bio and you enjoy my stories!
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Date: 02/26/06 Title: None
Ooh, first reviewer! This is going to be short and sweet: I loved it! I can't wait to read more chapters. I really liked how you described it as "a bitter pill to swallow." You also described the transformation of Hogwarts from school to hospital well. Well done first chapter, and I look foward to reading many more!
Buckbeak's Ferret Dinner by Islander
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: So Harry seems to have gotten over the loss of Sirius. But what about Buckbeak, the hippogriff who spent the last to years of the man's life with him? Find out in this one-of-a-kind fanfic!
Date: 08/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Buckbeak's Ferret Dinner
I'm pretty sure I've read this story on HPFF a very long time ago and really enjoyed reading it then, but I just want to tell you that I remember reading this story and still love it. This is one of the cutest and most breath-taking one-shots in the fanfic world. As fellow one-shot writer, I know it is hard to pack all those emotions and feelings you want to convey in such a short medium. You did a great job with this fic. In my opinion, this is one of the greatest one-shots ever written! Amazing job!
Author's Response: Wow, really?? Now I think my own cheek is going to hurt from smiling so much! I truly like this fic myself (I\'m more pleased with it than my fic \"Under the Emerald Spell Light\"). I\'m so glad that you found it so wonderful. You\'ve made my day!
The Potters and The Blacks, a Family Torn Apart ... by Lurid
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A One-Shot written based on the events that happened that fateful Halloween night. This particular Fic was written when I was in Year 7 for an English "Harry Potter Book Review" task, and is now on the screens of your computers three years later. (Pre-OotP)
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
Great job. I loved how it moved from one persons point of view to another. It was very suspenseful. There were definitely somethings that needed fixing though. My suggestions: I thought the dialogue between Lily and James was too forced. They sounded like college professors. They need to sound more human-like. Second, there were a lot of paragraphs squished together. After someone speaks, there should be a new paragraph. Also, in certain parts, like about the whispers, I noticed some grammerical errors. Besides that, its a worthy try and I look foward to reading more stories by you in the future. Keep up the wonderful work!
Author's Response:
Formatting is a problem. Thank god Lori is a teacher ^-^ Grammer was never really a strong point, but apparently, most teachers in the ceritficate tests seem to by pass that stuff. After joining up wihgt Mugglenet and wrangling in Lori [I make her sound liek a piece of cattle!] has really helped wiht my English skills.
I'm nto quite sure wqhat you mean about the whispers, though. I shall go bakc and read.
I have another fic called "Malicious Intentions" It's currently up to 10 chapters, I'm submitting the 11th as we speak!
The Importance of Being Single by erikthephantom
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Fourteen months after leaving Hogwarts, Sirius takes it upon himself as a seasoned veteran of love to educate a "naïve" Remus on the dark, inner workings of the female mind when the former receives a letter from a girlfriend demanding his time. Pointless, yes, but Erik enjoys procrastinating.
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Importance of Being Single
That was amazing. The dialogue between Remus and Sirius was wonderful- fast paced, witty and a pleasure to read. The only thing I would suggest was to make the letter from Sirius's girlfriend a little more understandable- were they going out already and she then wrote him a letter, or did she just sponatonously wrote him a letter? Maybe I need to read it more throughtly... but really, excellent job. There were no other errors, great grammer, and about your comments on Lucid's review, don't worry about the midterm, if you look into it, the American revolution is almost as interesting as HP. Anyway, 10/10 definitely!
Author's Response: thank you lilypudding! i put in a little line for remus that kind of infers that they'd been dating for a while (haha not Sirius and Remus, Sirius and the girl). and you're right! the revolution IS pretty much as interesting as HP! (at least I think so!!)
Inheritance by NapoleonComplex
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Lucius is summoned to do the Dark Lord's work.
Narcissa does not believe her family can survive this.
But the silent boy hiding behind the door knows only fear, passed down by his parents.
AU warning for those who do not believe the Malfoys are capable of emotion.
Date: 03/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: Inheritance
I really liked this. The way you told an intriguing story by using such great rhyme was fascinating! I can't say any more but great job!
Hogwarts: A Musical by QueenHal
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A SPEWish Covert Cupid for TheVanishingAct. Happy Valentine's Day, Professor Pat!
It's Seventh Year, and the new Headmaster has decreed that students must take some sort of course to fulfill the new Art Requirement. Our favourite characters have decided to take Drama. What kind of hilarity will ensue when the night of the first dress rehearsal arrives? Expect Hagrid as a Tree, Ron as Godric Gryffindor and Malfoy as the Amazing "Dancing" Ferret.
Ron/Luna, Prof. Pat/Hermione, Blaise/Himself
Date: 02/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot
Ok, this is good. I love theatre and I've always thougt if they did a Hogwarts musical it would be really really funny. It was perfect! Just curious, did you take the "it will run for fifty years" thing from the Producers? Cuz that was in one of the songs (The Producers is one of my fave musicals of all time) Anyway, I really liked the song lyrics and thought it was really good.
Author's Response: Actually, it's from the Moulin Rouge song 'Spectacular Spectacular' :) Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!
Lost by Foxy Wolf
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: It’s Valentine’s Day 1998 and Ron Weasley is figuring out how to confess his undying love to the girl of his dream. But how do you tell Hermione Granger your true feelings without embarrassing yourself in front of her? Ron decides to make an attempt on writing a poem. A poem of confessions, hope and love.
Date: 02/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: A poem for my greatest love
Ooh, I really liked this! The food analogies really made me smile, and were very Ron-like. It actually made me hungry as I read it, which tells you that you have excellent description!
I want to make a review that rhymes,
But I don't really have the time,
So let me tell you this first,
This review quenched both my hunger and thirst,
For poetry of the very best kind!
Ok, so I'm not the best at poetry, but I can distinguish a good poem when I read it and that was a GOOD poem! Delicious!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. That what so funny, I can't stop smiling :-)
You are insulting my delicate feelings again. by coppercurls
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Warnings: the following poems may contain sarcasm, witty repartee, little black dresses, and Inter-Office Unity events.
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: You are insulting my delicate feelings again.
Funny! I usually hate Draco/Hermione but I really enjoyed this one! I can totally imagine Hermione writing something like this! Cute story! I can't describe how much I enjoyed it! I lurved it! Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! Its all a part of my plot to convert the world to Hr/D ;-). Thanks for the review!
Two friends by HPsuperfeak
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: This is a small poem I wrote on my free time at home. This is how I think Harry would feel when Ron and Hermione get together and started to forget about him. Please review.I'm going to make this only one chapter longbecause I can't come up with anything else.But thanks to all who reviewed! thanks for taking the time to read, too!!
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: My friends
Cute story! Its not the most elegant or fancy poetry I've ever read, but I really like how it is. The fact you use numbers instead of writing out numbers especially intrigues me. I also like your short, snappy rhyme. Your style seems to be along the lines of E.E. Cummings- you write your own way. Some may contradict you as being too controversal and striving too hard to change the rules of grammer, but I really like your poem.
Author's Response: thanks. I wasn't really thinking much when I wrote it because I didn't want to put it on the internet. But my cousin persuaded me to. I really appreciate your review!
Can't Wait Forever by iliveinaworldofcandy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A Covert Cupid poem for xo nic, by LunasLion in the forums. Katie/Oliver... Katie wants to wait forever, but that's not always possible.
Date: 02/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: ---
I really really REALLY like this poem. The voice you told it from was a typical girl yet it had a great flare. I really enjoyed the refrain and how it changed based on Katie's feelings. I personally don't ship Katie/Oliver but this poem may just win me over. I think it could apply to a lot of characters as well. Sad and sweet!
Author's Response: Hello, and thanks very much for reviewing! I know the poem was a bit depressing... not really very valentines-y, so I'm glad you liked in anyways. And its great to hear that you may be converted to a Katie/Oliver shipper... I suddenly love them! I also thought this could work for other couples... with a few tweaks it could work for Cedric/Cho, but that would be TOO depressing. You know, she waits for him but he's dead so he never comes. *tear*. Yes, but I'm glad you liked it!
HP Parodies of Famous Poetry by gobletoffire
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Inspired by Azreal's HP versions of Poems, This takes poems and changes them to Harry Potter versions. The first one is based on Stopping by Woods on a Snowy Evening by Robert Frost.
Date: 02/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Stopping by a Castle on a Summer Day
Ooh, I like this poem! I think it can be longer, but really, I agree, the original poem wasn't so long so why should the spin-off? I think you need to fix the titke and the summary to make it more attractive to readers. Offhand, I can't really think of a better title but I think you could add humor and lengh by calling it "Harry's Take on Famous Poetry" or something like that, and make it the story of Harry having to make Muggle poetry more wizard-friendly. Its very ironic you did "Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening" first because we're doing that in my lit class this week. I really like how you changed the rhyme scheme. Personally, I think for future poetry adaptations, you shouldn't stick to the format of the original poem so much. I've written unpublished HP-based poems while staring aimlessly at a piece of poetry and base it on the poems, but its much easier to write free. There, you get more creative liscence and people respect you more because it is more original. Well, I'm honored to be the first reviewer on a great poem like this, and I really hope I helped you. Great job!
Author's Response: You're right, it should of been longer. My next one is a lot longer. Not to mention, the title's lame, and I'll change it soon. As for the way it's written, I decided to do it that way, though I'm much better on my own. Thanks!
I love you...I just can't smile... by emazey
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: During the long months in which Ginny has to wait for her love to return from his quest for the Horcrxes, she misses him with every bone in her body. Constantly does she think of him, what could happen and the dreadful things in his path...she loves him really but never can show happiness for these reasons...
Date: 03/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: I love you...i just can't smile...
I like this poem. It was a little brief, but good to read. There wasn't much story, yet it portrayed feelings extremely accurately. I can't say how much I enjoyed it. What's with the Abuse warning though? I'd give it an 8 or 9/ out of ten probably because I'm picky. On one hand, I think the fact there was no set rhyme scheme was doing something different, on the other it just can't compare with some poems I've read with rhyme scheme. However, I have to congradulate you on a worthy effort and capturing emotion extremely well.
Date: 02/26/06 Title: None
Hey, this is a good fic you've got here! I noticed a few grammerical errors, mostly typoes: In the first paragraph, you missed an "e" in "Weasley." When you said "sleeping was not an option" you accidentally put a "d" at the end of "an." You also missed the comma when Ginny said, "Harry, I need you." Besides that, I really liked the story. It was a pleasure to read, even though I don't read Harry/Ginny. I have a question. Shouldn't this be a Harry/Ginny romance fic to attract more readers? I really liked this though, and I am really happy to read it and be the first reviewer! The best of luck in future writing!
He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not by ScoutsHonor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: On the outside, Merope and Tom Riddle seemed like a happy couple. One secret changed everything.
Date: 02/26/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great job! I really enjoyed reading this! I loved the sequences as she was dropping the potions and right before Tom drank the potion. It was very theatrical, but in a way extremely enjoyable to read. I can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10, definitely, without a doubt!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! It was supposed to be one-shot but now that I think about it, it might be good as a multi-chapter. Thanks again!
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That's All There Is To It by EmeraldShadows
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: *I have revised my decision to delete this story due to the apparent reader interest. Thanks, everyone!*
**TITLE AND SUMMARY CHANGED**
Lily Evans prides herself in being able to plan ahead. Which is why she is completely ready to face The Toerag when she goes back to Hogwarts for her final year. Soon enough, however, her life takes a sharp turn, and by the time she is seated once again in the Great Hall, there's a void inside her that she feels could never be filled. Enter James Potter, who has sworn on Quidditch Through The Ages to change his ways. Will he buckle under this terrible pressure? Will Lily see past her fog of convincement? All hangs in the balance...
Date: 04/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Hard Summer
This is a really good first fic! I don't understand why you'd want to delete it because of a lack of reviewer and reader interest- a lot of first fics aren't really noticed at first. I know it's hard to have no reviews while other stories have hundreds, but those stories have been up for a long time and they had rough starts. I think the idea that Lily's parents died has recently become really cliche in fanfiction, but there isn't much you can do about that because it's an important part of your story. If you write the fic good enough, that will make up for it being a cliche. I can't tell much from the first chapter, but it seems like this story will develop well. I hope you remember that. Great story, and keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I wrote this story initially about a year or so ago, but I hadn\'t heard of fanfiction and I was just bored one day. It was only about last December that I discovered fanfiction, and I only branched into more places to post a month ago. I really worry about people thinking it\'s cliche, but you\'re right, I can\'t really change it. Thanks again!
Date: 03/29/06 Title: None
Great job... is this your first fic? I think this is a very intrigiung first chapter I really enjoyed reading. I think there were quite a few grammerical errors. While you tell an entertaining story in a way good to read, I feel maybe quotational grammer and structure isn't your strongest point. I think there were points were you ended a quote with "..." where you should have put something like "his voice trailed off" or something like that. Also, I didn't get why Lily would want to decorate Harry's room in Gryffindor colors- that sort of stood out to me as OOC for her. I don't know why that part stood out so much, but I felt that Lily would want to decorate Harry's room in soft colors- maybe you should put something about how James wanted it, but Lily protested, until she finally gave in, or something like that. There are also a few other points where there are grammerical mistakes- I think they could be picked out with editing by a good beta or a good proofreading. Overall, I liked the story and it was a good job. Great idea, and a great job portraying.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! And yes qutational grammer is not my stong point. Actually grammer isnt my strong point. I can tell a good story but i really have to work hard to get the grammer perfect. I know i still have to work out some things in the grammer, so i will work on the next few chapters a little harder!
Date: 02/28/06 Title: None
Hey, that was good, sis! I think it was a little short, and in the next chapters you have to work on lengh, but it was pretty good so far. It was great. 10/10!
Author's Response: Hi! Yes, next chappie's WAY longer, and I'm only halfway done! I'll submit it by Friday...cross my fingers..and it should be up by Monday. However, I've been having problems logging in.
Desperation, Determination, Deliberation by james_fever
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: James Potter and Lily Evans are going to get married in a week's time. They meet in Hogsmeade and reminisce their school days and talk of how the ends met...
Date: 03/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: On a Date in Hogsmeade
I really think this story is shaping up very well, and like it so far. I think it's a great attempt at a first fic, with a great idea. I really liked the flashbacks. However, I think there are a few parts of this fic which could be cleaner, like parts when you don't skip a line in between paragraphs. However, those are formatting mistakes that can be easily remedied and are very common in first fics. The only true mistake I caught was with Madame Zelda, the barmaid. I know Madame Rosemerta said in the third book how she remembered James and his friends would come in on their Hogwarts weekends. I think even though she seems young, she's really older than she seems. I saw the point you were trying to get with Madame Zelda- that times were changing- but you also have to be careful to follow canon. Otherwise, it was a great job. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review and the constructive criticism! (shows you're reading carefully) lol. I've corrected the formatting mistakes and I'm very happy you pointed them out so the story becomes flawless (I hope). About Madam Zelda and Rosmerta, you'll see in the later chapters how they fit in and I assure you I am not toying with the facts! Thanks a lot once again for the wonderful review and hope I get many more from you! =D
Date: 04/05/06 Title: Chapter 2: Impressed and... Depressed?
I was really impressed by this chapter. First of all, I loved the chapter name. Second of all, you characterized the Marauders and Lily very well. The dialogue between the Marauders was incrediable. I think you left Peter out a little- remember, slimy git as he turned out to be, he was a Marauder in his school years- but that's a common mistake in L/J stories. Also, I don't see how Transfiguring a peanut would be harder than transfiguring animals, since in the books, McGonagall always taught them small objects and animals before moving on to larger things. However, you gave a good explaination and characterized McGonagall well. This story is going in my faves, and I can't wait for the third chapter!
Author's Response: I'm glad you were only impressed and not depressed by the chapter. =)
I'm glad you liked the Marauder and the Lily part and you're right I'll have to get Peter a bit more into the story. Thanks for the AMAZING review and I'm just so happy to know that the story is in your favs and I hope it stays there always! THANKS a lot once again and keep reviewing please! You are a very good critic and I love reading your reviews.
Everytime by LadyLilyMalfoy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A valentines poem from Narcissa to Lucius
Date: 03/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: EveryTime
I really liked this poem. It conveyed a story well, besides being well written. I have issue structuring poems, and I like how you structured it well while conveying emotion. I would really really like to read free verse or a very loose poem by you, because you did a very good job making this an interesting read and a good story while keeping an orderly rhyme scheme and structure. I'd really like to congradulate you on writing such a beautiful poem about Narcissa and Lucious and their relationship, a subject many authors are testy around. I've read one of your other poems and plan on reading more. I must say, I really enjoy your insight on the Malfoy's lives. You have a great poetic skill and I really can't say more but wonderful job. *Goes off to read more of your poems!*