I liked your story alot, because I have always been very interested in Dumbledore when he was young, but I didn't think Dumbledore knew Phineas Nigellus personally. I liked that twist though. I really love the story and most of its components, but I am really confused over who the narrator is and how he is judging the young Dumbledore. What I mean is he a student or a teacher? There are a few lines could be called foreshadowing, like about Dumbledore's diary, but they sound kind of awkward. I think you need to either make it like the narrator is watching events as they unfold or is retelling them from much later, but your story is sort of a combination of both, which is sort of confusing. Confusing like the sentence I just wrote. But I think it has great potential and I can't wait till the next chapter.

Author's Response: Err... thank you, Lilypudding! I'm afraid I can't answer some of your questions, so you'l have to wait and see about that: like who the narrater is, for example. Thank you for your comments!

Wonderful! Great job... I'm guessing the narrator is a ghost! The only suggestion I have is that pure-bloods and half-bloods have a dash between the words. Be careful about that... I got a fic rejected because of that. Still, great job! Looking foward to the next chapter! As usual, absolutely wonderful!

Author's Response: *legasp* Another second reviewer! However, I still can't approve or disapporve your theory... And thanks for the tip! I'll keep it in mind

I really like this story so far. I think you're a great writer, with the potential to do very well. I like the character of Cal very much, but I think you need to work on some characterizations and grammerical issues. First of all, the name Calypso is very different. I understand you try to follow JKR's original work, but all of Jo's names had true meanings. In this context, her full name makes her almost a Mary-Sue. Otherwise, I like her character. I especially like how you have such a detailed past. I think you should really try to let her past shine through the story. For example, the A/n you put in the first chapter involving Julius and Cal's relationship was kind of unnessecary. A good, attentive reader could figure that out partly by themselves, and if they couldn't, they would want to read to find out. By specifiying, the need to read is no longer there. However, I really like how Cal's personality, and her daring. I think the only thing at all Mary-Sue-ish about her is her many animals (I love animals and I'm sure you do, but I've never seen any witch or wizard besides Hagrid having many pets) and her name. I know its very difficult to write a Lily's best friend who's not a Mary-Sue, and I appreciate how good she is. The only other mistakes is once or twice you didn't capitalize Wizarding words that need a capital letters, like "Apparation" or "Muggle." Otherwise, I can't tell you how much I enjoyed the story. I don't have time to finish it now, but I definitely know what I'll be doing tomorrow night. ;)

Author's Response: Thank you for writing such a long, detailed review! I love reading reviews like that. Don't worry about finishing it all at once; I'd be a hypocrite if I told you to do that. Now, to adress the points you brought up: I added that a/n because the moderator for this story at the time, upon reading the next chapter, asked, "Wait, I thought Cal and Julius were going out?" I had not originally written that note (nor will I write something similar, in most cases). Next point: Calypso is a Greek name meaning, 'concealer'. This has some relation to the fact that she tries to conceal her affections for Julius, although everyone knows about it anyway (except Julius, because he isn't the most observant of beings). Also, in Greek mythology, Calypso was a sea-nymph who held Odysseus captive. While Cal may not be as voluptuos as this memorable mythological character, she does have a playful personality. When I originally created her, she was to be more of a contrast to Lily- a slightly annoying girl who had no restraints. She would cause Lily a few awkward situations without realizing it. Most readers would come to hate her. Then, as I developed her further, she took on another personna- the only girl with the correct combination of serious and playful sides to bridge the gap between the straight-laced Head Girl and the fun-loving prankster Head Boy, as well as the other Marauders we have all come to love (well, we may not love Peter). I tend to blame Remus for making her more like this: having him for her other best friend made her close enough to the Marauders, but, like Remus, have too much of a conscience to completely loose her head. The Pet Problem: Her only pet is a cat named Valhalla; Lily has an owl named Tearren and Julius has an owl as well (although I don't currently remember his owl's name. I'll look it up later). As for the capitalization, I was on the fence about that, and will try my best to remember to go through with it in the future. Once again, thank you for the long review! I can't wait to read the next one.

That was excellent! I thought it could be a little longer, but it was a very long stanza. I think that it should have taken place in Ginny's first year, not her second, and I think you should fixed a misspelled word in the summary (sorry I forgot which one it was) Other than that, that was perfect. Great job! You have a starring potential at poetry and I look foward to reading works of yours in the future!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Funny! I usually don't read challenges, but this is different. That made my Christmas! Who cares about presents when you can have great fics like this? Absolutely hilarious!

Wow, I like it alot! I'm not sure if it follows true "fanfic", but it is very good. I can't believe their aren't any other reviews! Excellent! Great job, and keep up the excellent work! 10 billion out of ten!

Author's Response: OMG, thank you so much! I was getting worried because there were no reviews! You've literally just saved my life, I am so glad you like this one and my other one Thanks a zillion for the review.

Wow, very very good chapter. It was perfect, and I adored it. The only thing is, maybe you should you know, have a warning about there being Snape/Narcissa in there, because that ship isn't for the fainthearted. Please update soon, even though I can guess what will happen in the second chapter. James can't die yet!

Author's Response: Thanks Lilypudding! I'll update ASAP. And James won't die; he's my teddy bear! ^.^

Hmm, this was a great poem but I think you need to work on a few things. First and foremost, you misspelled "relationship" in the summary, which really does not attract readers. Second, I feel that the first verse about forgetting was good and free-flowing, but the verses that rhymed seemed very forced. I think you should either rhyme the whole poem or not rhyme any of it. The rhyme seemed too forced. However, don't be discouraged. This poem has a lot of potential. I think it was had a good start, and a good idea. Keep up the good work!

Great job for a first chapter. It was very intriguing, and should appeal to alot of fans because it was sort of like Harry's reaction to HBP. I think it sort of is a great fic for fans like me who still can't really accept it (I'm still depressed over Dumbledore). Your writing style was eerily similar to JKR's and I liked that alot. I wish it was a little longer, but having recently put up my first fic, I understand lengh is probably not on your list of concerns right now. Great job! Ten million out of ten!

Author's Response: Later chapters are much longer. Or shorter. I'm typing, I'm typing. I do have finals, you know.

And I would like to add, when you reviewed my story you wrote you hadn't read many other fanfics. I would poke around, read other Marauder Era and Romance stories, and figure out what makes a good story before submitting anymore chapters. The last thing you want to do is sound like an amatuar, it puts people off.