I’m liking the backstory behind this. It’s great! You have a few dialogue errors that need fixing, though. I liked the appearance of Dumbledore’s brother; we don’t get to see him very much, but this was a little different :) I wanted to point out that some Potter words ought to be capitalised, such as Dark Lord. I loved your description of what happened that night on Halloween. The piano idea was a little bit strange, but everything was wrapped up nicely with your closing statement. It really gave a sense of “to be continued” but didn’t leave me confused. Good stuff, and I also liked the poem!

MsTattersall, this was hilarious! Vernon going to the dentist and being drilled by Hermione’s parents? What a strange, yet funny coincidence. So Dudley’s still afraid of the M word…guess he’ll never grow up. Well, he does certainly seem like quite the bad boy, smoking and all. Hermione’s mom’s name is Granger? Interesting…that’s Hermione’s middle name too isn’t it? Sorry, I just realized that. Kind of hard to believe that Uncle Vernon would be afraid of the radiation from the x ray. Probably doesn’t go to the dentist often, and I’m not surprised. Overall, I thought this was pretty funny because it focussed more on the Muggle aspect of the HP world, but still incorporated some wizard stuff. This was unique, and the OWL part with Vernon howling was great! You seemed to portray the grangers as smart people, and I thought that was very believable. Great stuff!

Some nice work going on here. I haven’t read a lot of fics with Wood in it, and I have to say that you portrayed him pretty well. A very Quidditch focused kind of guy. I thought your ending to this chapter was good. It wasn’t exactly a cliffhanger, but it was definitely an ending that kept me in some sort of suspense. So that was well done. Casper and Taran are such troublemakers *giggle* Oh, just wanted to point out that Chasers and Quaffle are capitalised, Also, you accidentally misspelled McGonagall’s name: you wrote McGonnagol. Also, you many want to space out some of your paragraphs. Like, I know it’s a new paragraph, but it isn’t spaced and looks a bit chunky. That’s all the suggestions I can give you for now. It was quite good!

Cute! I thought this was nice. At first, the whole thing with Lily suggesting Madam Puddifoot's to JAmes, I thought it was very much like Harry and Cho. Good thing this one turned out to be more successful! I think you captured the spirit of the characters very well. It was very sweet, and I see that James' effort to make Lily like him certainly are working out. Good job! 9/101

Author's Response: Thank you! We got the idea from Harry and Cho, but it had to work out with Lily and James, otherwise we would never get to see Harry and Cho, and we can\'t have that! We\'re so glad you liked our characterization, we worked quite hard on it.

Wow....just wow. Your story is fantabulous! I have honestly thoroughly enjoyed reading every chapter so far. And that's saying a lot, considering that I usually read a chapter before I lose interest. But your story has managed to catch my attention. I think your characters are great, and somehow, your story reminds me slightly of one of my fics, Fatally in Love, since there's the situation with Harry and Ron, but Hermione with another dude. But yours progresses a lot faster, and you use Seamus as Hermione's b/f. But yours is way better than mine. I think the reason why I like your story so much is because we don't really get to see the other side of Hermione, and here you have it all written out. And yet it's still so believable. Seamus is such a nice guy! I want him for my b/f...nah I'm kidding. Well, I sincerely hope you update again soon, because I'm going to go read the rest of it now! Lovely work, 10/10!

Hahaha...I thought this was funny. Okay, I totally take back what I said about Seamus...such a player. Ugh. Anyway, the spider repellant was hilarious! Well, that's something I'd do too. Oh yeah, and now it seems like Harry's decided to take over the "overprotective" role from Ron, I guess, because it's kind of like how Ron tries to protect Ginny. Great stuff!

This was awesomely funny! I thought it was great how they were all playing Muggle Board games. The Frustration picture was particularly good…hmmm…shouting out random words. Next time I play pictionary, if I ever see that word, I’ll think of this fic. Sirius bellowing out “I AM A PRETTY LITTLE GIRL” was actually kind of scary. But their reactions to these “new” Muggle games were all great! I mean, if I were non-Muggle, I’d probably react the same way. You did a fantastic job, and I laughed throughout the whole story. 10/10

This was interesting. I really liked the way you touched on all the aspects of Harry’s life that he has experienced so far. Had I never read HP before, I would still have been able to get a general idea. The good part is that you only gave the highlights without making it boring. So kudos to you. One thing I want to comment on (is very minor) is the fact that Lupin signed the letter as Moony. Do you think he would really do that? I thought he would have signed it as Lupin or something, since Moony is kind of a name he used with the Marauders. But that doesn’t really matter. You have a few minor errors regarding spelling/punctuation, but that can be easily overlooked. One thing, for example, is the fact that Muggle should be capitalised. And you misspelled McGonagall. Other than that, some great stuff going on here! Keep it up! 8/10

Hey, this was a good story. You have good grammar. The butterbeer trick was evil…making Aelwen turn green? Funny, though, and it really seems like something Fred and George would do. Ainslie and Aelwen are interesting names. Where did you come up with them? Oh, and their last name is Clearwater. Do they have any relation to Penelope Clearwater? Percy’s girlfriend from way back when? The end was a bit surprising, though. Malfoy kissing a Gryffindor? That’s a first. You sure he wasn’t drunk at the time? Snape seems very in character. I liked that. But how could a Gryffindor betray her own house? Noooo….cannot be possible! Lol…this was great stuff! You

This was a good story. I like the Ron/Hermione ship. You wrote this well. I thought it was humourous! The Malfoy poster was just so funny! One little suggestion is to check over your punctuation again. in a few places, you used periods to end quotations instead of commas, and at one point you used a " to start a quotation or something and you ended it with '. Just those little mini things. OVerall, though, I have to say this was realistically written, with the characters sounding very IC. It was very cute, and I liked it! 9/10