***UPDATE***
I haven't been back to this site since the 8th grade, but now, in my freshman year of college, I have returned, and I intend to finish my story, "Closer Friendships." I look forward to your feedback!
I've been reading Harry Potter since it first came out. I was seven. This book opened up a world I had secretly desired my whole life. A world that was the perfect balance of fantasy and reality. Now, almost twelve years later, I still love Harry Potter as much as I did when I first picked up Sorcerer's Stone. As of late, I write fanfic and beta some, too.
you might wanna think about changing your rating on this chapter from G-PG to PG-13 (imagine 8 year olds reading about sexy lip tracing.creepy, right?) you said you'd update in december of '04. its almost december of '05. better start writing! might wanna consider changing your writing style too.
grammar is slightly off-key, making the story slightly more difficult to follow, but otherwise very good.
Author's Response: I'm getting all my chapters beta-ed. Hopefully the future chapters will be easier to follow. Thanks for the review!