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Barty's Story by Cruciatus Love
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Barty Crouch Jr. is willing to give up everything for his master. He would go to any great length do to His bidding.
Follow Barty as he takes his steps through the Quidditch World Cup in GoF. What parts of the story did you miss while reading from Harry's point of view? This is the side of the story that you really care about.
Date: 08/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Quidditch World Cup
This was a really unique way of telling the story. Obviously, you've done a lot of reference from GoF, and the way each of Barty's lines fits in is perfect. :) I could sense the intense - almost mad devotion in him, and it's pretty scary to think of what would happen if he hadn't been caught. *shivers*
I could see you've put a lot of thought into writing what happens in a crowd. Sometimes, one might get carried away, or spun off the track while doing it, but I liked the intelligent ideas Barty has. For instance: Using his strategy of picking one person and walking directly behind them to avoid bumping into someone, he managed to make his way out of the arena and onto the campsites.
I enjoyed seeing the events from a different angle. What I would suggest is a more detailed description. What you've written is perfectly fine, it's just my hunger for detail, because this provides a perfect opportunity for it - the noise, sweat, excitement, and then the fear and utter panic.
Overall, though, you've done a great job on this. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful review. And I\'m glad that I made the character realistic enough that it made you shudder thinking of what could happen had he escaped...*giggle*
Date: 04/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Phoenix Speaks
Let me congratulate you for so accurately entering into the mind of the bird who lives on forever. I enjoyed this fic from the beginning to the end. The opening lines, particularly, drew me in. This entire fic was amazing. However, for the sake of saying something constructive, I do think you could have the bird speak more about his master, talk of some of his unique qualities, and give examples, maybe. Fabulous job!
Author's Response: I\'m so glad that enjoyed it.
Might I say: you mentioned that you congratulate me for \'so accurately entering...the mind of the bird who lives on forever.\' That was kind of the whole point; to get Fawke\'s POV on everything, not on Dumbledore. I do see where you\'re coming from, and how that would be beneficial to the fic, however-in the thousands of years that the phoenix lived, the hundred years or so that Dumbledore was \'in posession\' of him are only a drop in the bucket. The fic was meant to show the entire picture. And, yeah, I know that it ends with Dumbledore\'s death and whatnot, but I wanted to give it what it deserved per Fawkes and no more.
Gosh. That was complete rambling, wasn\'t it? :D
The Chamber of Clocks by snarkyroxy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: None of them would be any use if one wanted to tell the time. The passing of the hours meant nothing in this room.
Date: 02/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Chamber of Clocks
Wow, that was very creative and, as you say, different. It makes sense that Dumbledore would feel so protective.. excellent job. Very original. I love it. 10/10.
The Secret Diary of Pugnatious Weasley by Sarakiel
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: "Good Morrow dear reader. If you are reading this, you have found the diary of Pugnatious Aramor Weasley. As to how you found this diary I have no idea as I’ve decided to toss the ruddy thing as soon as I become famous for fear that this incriminates me in any fashion. Unless I haven’t become famous in which cause that ruddy well blows doesn’t it?"
Initially written for the The One-Shot Monologue Challenge.
Don't have time to continue this story currently. So consider it a one-shot. If someone else wants to use the character, please feel free :)
Date: 02/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: 1918
Lmao, that was one unique humor fic! I really loved the innocent character you gave Pug, sorta like the thing PG Wodehouse would do.. have you read his works? You should. The humour was really subtle.. and I liked it a lot on the whole.. Good luck!
Date: 02/23/06 Title: None
Wow, that was fantastic. Very very creative. I love your description of hell, that was awesome. 10/10. Adding to my favourites. I really hope Mundungus doesn't do anything like that. Great job! xD ~bL
Buckbeak's Ferret Dinner by Islander
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: So Harry seems to have gotten over the loss of Sirius. But what about Buckbeak, the hippogriff who spent the last to years of the man's life with him? Find out in this one-of-a-kind fanfic!
Date: 02/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Buckbeak's Ferret Dinner
That was really good... I can just imagine Sirius whipping up that lovely dinner for Buckbeak.. Very good.. great job!
Author's Response: You're keeping up with my stories!! I'm so flattered! Yes, I really loved the dinner Sirius made for Buckbeak--it was quite fun to write about. Keep reviewing; I'll answer each one you send me.
What if...? by Werewolf_sympathiser
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A short one shot that looks at the alternative life of Lily Evans.
I'm really sorry but I've decided to leave this as a one shot. Thanks for reading :)
Date: 03/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Witch? Nah, you must be after my sister.
I really enjoyed this story though I'm fully a J/L shipper. I love it because it is rushed. That sort of adds an element of... I'm not too sure, but it sure is good! If it was full of complex paragraphs, it would be messed up. The flow of the story was great, and this was a fabulous AU story. Fantastic job!
Author's Response: I, myself, ship J/L but I just thought it would be nice to have a go at an AU story for once :) I'm really glad you liked it, I'm forever having people tell me how rushed things are and to stop and smell the roses as it were lol. Thanks for reading! :D
At the Little House With the Garden by Masked One
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The little house with the garden is a happy place to be, despite all of it’s oddities. But it’s a house that takes a certain outlook on life, and not everyone fits. Harry and Luna are interviewing babysitters for their son. Warning for utterly silly fluff with some more serious undertones.
Date: 02/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Interviews
That was really good. It was very different and I think you've portrayed both Harry and Luna perfectly. I like how you subtly brought in Jon's 'abilities'. Well done and great job.
There Goes Another Girl by Satrina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs join old Moony at the Hospital Wing the morning after the last full moon. Sirius plays the Grim; Remus loses another girlfriend because of his problem, and the four friends stay together when rejection comes their way. This is my first HP fanfic.
Date: 02/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
It's really good. It's a nice change from many of the marauder fics that usually concentrate on James and Sirius's girlfriends.. I dunno though, this is my first Remus one, and I really like it. Great job for your first fanfic. I assure you mine was nowhere near as good... lol.
Under the Emerald Spell Light by Islander
Rated: Professors •Summary: The students. . . the Death Eaters. . . the teachers. . . the Dark Lord himself. . . Hogwarts castle is under attack. Barricaded in the library, a couple has one last talk before the end. One-shot. Argus/Irma
Date: 03/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Under the Emerald Spell Light
Whoa, this was a good combination of violence, death and romance. I liked it. It was unusual, and different from other violent fics... I must admit - Argus and Irma's confessions of love were a bit funny to me as well. sorry. Don't mind me if it wasn't meant like that though, it was still very good. The ending was really romantic and dark and violent, as I'm sure you intended it to be. I just have two tiny errors to point out though, Demelza's last name is Robins, not Roberts.
"His spell tore the boy’s in two.” - that must be 'the boy' or 'the boy's body'. Just thought I'd point that out.. A great job on the whole though. Oh, to answer your other response, I usually try keep track of the fics on my favourite list, and one of yours was on it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! And for pointing out the errors; I'll have to go back and change them (I'm so embarrassed about the "boy's" mistake--I normally don't mix up possessive adjectives and plural nouns like that!). And I'm glad you liked it; I liked it, too. Keep reading; I hope to have another fic up within the month
Loving Lily by miss padfoot
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: They say love can make mountains melt. But can it evoke a reaction from Severus Snape?
Date: 08/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
Preethi, m'dear! *huggles*
As always, your writing has managed to absorb me completely. Although I have this bad habit of keeping away from stories that have non-canon pairings, I could completely understand and appreciate the logic in this particular narration. It makes so much sensel, it could be canon. :)
It's interesting how you don't make the two meet directly - I've never ever seen that in a romance story, and that fact adds a different sort of flavour to yours and gives you brownie points
This part was a bit confusing, though - “Lily?” sounded a voice. And to her amazement, she recognised it as Rosina’s voice. She was confused, when Rosina opened the door. Instead, you could have Rosina emerge, and then have Lily ask her what more she wanted , and so on, because this directly follows the fake Rosina's exit and might give birth to misconceptions. :) Not to worry, though.
Ah, and the end. I could go on about it. I love unexpected twists and you pulled off a somersault with this one. *grin* Nice work!
-Manju
Author's Response: Manju! *hugs* Thank you for that great review, especially the part about it could be canon: one of the greatest praise a fanfiction author could get. And I get what you mean about misconceptions, but since \"Rosina\" vanished so abruptly, I thought it would be kinda weird to make Lily start a fight again when she\'s so confused. Anyway, thanks for the brilliant review! *hugs*
Colour my World Before it Goes Grey by I Love Severus Snape
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: It felt like I was in the air forever, just swinging back and forth, back and forth. The world was never this limitless before. The colours are whizzing by me, swirling into one big mass of beauty.
Luna shows Harry the meaning of life at a time when he's afraid to die. [One-Shot]
Date: 03/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot.
I really like it. I think you've captured the mood before a battle beautifully. The present tense was also and added plus point.. But I think you could elaborate a bit on the ending though.. Harry says 'now I know the meaning of life'.. how did it dawn on him? What, precisely, is the meaning? What would Luna have said at the time.. Of course, if you've kept it that way on purpose, that's well and good.. It's just me.. I like detail. An excellent job on the whole.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I, also, am not fond of my ending. I tried several different endings, but none worked very well. I swear to change it one day, when I finally get a brilliant idea of what to change it to.
Mundungus Fletcher Goes to Hades by Trucker
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: In The Half-Blood Prince there's a scene in Hogsmeade where Harry discovers Mundungus is stealing items from Sirius' home. It occurred to me that a disaster may be at hand...
Date: 03/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: By the River Styx
Now, I swear I remember reviewing this very excellent story... I dunno.. this was very, very well written. I totally love it. It was incredibly different and I hope Mundungus doesn't do a stupid thing like that in canon! lol.. Great job!
Author's Response: You probably did read it before. I made a few minor changes and submitted it again in hopes of getting it to show up as a \"Most Recent\" story. Unluckily for me, things didn\'t work out right and it, again, failed to make it into that part of the data base. I just hope that the new database design will lead more people to it.
The Woes of Helga Hufflepuff by Cinderella Angelina
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: When Salazar and Godric had their Great Schism, it hurt Helga more than she liked to admit, but she had to release her sorrows somehow. Luckily, there was a magical artifact to confide in. An Extra-Credit entry to the 2006 Valentines Romance Challenge.
Date: 04/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: n/a
This is wonderfully written, CA!! I thoroughly enjoyed it. I love your portrayal of Helga and I wish we could have seen what sort of people you made the other three. Somehow, I get the feeling from the end that Slytherin didn't love her as much as he made out to because later the Hat appears to be faking concern for her...
Am I wrong?
Anyhow, I loved these lines. Well, you’re getting my brim all wet with your tears.
“I thought it was something like that.” So funny! Superb job!
Author's Response: Ummm...actually, I don\'t know. I think it could go either way. Salazar did come talk to the hat, and worry about Helga, but that could have been not because he still loved her but because he still cared for her ... I\'m really glad you liked it, I\'ll have to think about doing another Founders fic. Thanks for your review! *D*
On The Turning Away by Noldo
Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Summary: 'The next time he grieves, it will be with the remembered taste of lukewarm tea swirling with a sodden teabag, cheap tea and tears tasting like bitter dust; he will grieve with the scent and rustle of newspaper, paper and tea and violins for sadness.'
Remus after Hallowe'en 1981. For Avendya, for her birthday.
Date: 03/15/06 Title: Chapter 1: On The Turning Away
I can't think of words to say about this. It was wonderful! Usually, I pick out my favourite quotes in the story for the author while reviewing it, but I can't for this one because I love every single line. It is a simple story about a simple man, with a simple plot.. but the way you've written it is just... WOW. I want to give you more than 10/10.
Heat by Islander
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: In this fic you will watch Crookshanks as he tries to find his soul mate. When he thinks he's finally found a fantastic feline, will he be able to convince her that they belong together? Crookshanks/. . . wouldn't you like to know! Read and find out!
Date: 03/20/06 Title: Chapter 1: Heat
Great work as always! I think your descriptions were pretty good and I really admire the way you've written Crookshanks's thoughts.. It was really funny, I assure you, the way McGonagall pulled out the last minute...lol.. One thing I noticed and liked was the funny way you'd given the people's personalities to the cats. On the whole, the entire... atmosphere that was created in the story really suited that cat.
I'm not too sure about the line about Mrs.Norris though..."I haven’t met Mrs. Norris yet. She’s a half-kneazle like me—maybe she’s the feline I’m looking for."
How does he know she's half-kneazle if he hadn't met her? I think he would have met her, seeing as how those two like prowling about all the time.. anyhow, that's just my opinion. You're welcome to ignore it.. I thought this fic was really good because if we think Crookshanks, then we automatically pair him up with Mrs. Norris, but this wasn't the case here. Do write more!
~bL
Author's Response: I really like writing good descriptions--I love all the imagery that comes along with it! And Crookshanks was quite a fun character to explore--one of my other reviewers said he was a bit like Draco Malfoy (which he is)! The Professor McGonagall bit--my brother and sister were both goggling at the computer screen at that part, gasping for breath! I was quite delighted by their reactions. About Mrs. Norris--Crookshanks has only been at the school for a few weeks. I'm sure he's heard about Mrs. Norris, but I guess he's just unlucky enough not to have met her yet :) Just an explanation to gloss over my mistake. By brother thought I was going to pair Crookshanks with Mrs. Norris, too, and I didn't bother to correct him. Which lended to his shock and surprise. And don't worry, I will write more stories!
Bedtime by Vindictus Viridian
Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Summary: The Malfoys are entertaining, and it is time for little Draco to go to bed. He, of course, can think of better things to do than sleep.
Date: 04/25/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Story
Ah, this is a great story! Well, well. Snape telling bedtime stories. That is quite interesting. I was a bit dubious in the beginning, but you pulled it off quite magnificently! Hm, I liked the exploration of each and everything Draco says. This is such an unusual and interesting story, that I have to add it to my favourites!
Author's Response: Wow -- I just peeked at your other favourites and am totally utterly flattered by the company. This was one of those little \'surprise\' stories. I started wondering what sort of relationship Severus and Draco really had, detoured into someone\'s recently-posted desire for second-person storytelling, and suddenly there was a new idea in my head. Thank you for reviewing! And favouring!
A Glint of Gold by hpmaniac666
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Harry's always been good at catching the Golden Snitch. But something equally valuable seems to be sliping through his fingers... Takes up straight after HBP, One-shot.
Date: 03/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Glint of Gold
I really enjoyed this! I was kinda getting bored of 'Harry-losing-grip-at-wedding' thing.. this was so well written, and I loved the part where he yells at her for wandering around outside. Great job!
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. I know what you mean - the release of HBP has spawned a great deal of almost identical wedding fics. I like to take a differnt tack on things. Thanks for reviewing, I really appreciate it. xx
Date: 03/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Glint of Gold
I really enjoyed this! I was kinda getting bored of 'Harry-losing-grip-at-wedding' thing.. this was so well written, and I loved the part where he yells at her for wandering around outside. Great job!
Author's Response: Ta again
Girl Protests for Elf Rights by Avenger_of_Dumbldore
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: This is an entry for the one shot Daily Prophet challenge from avenger_of_dumbldore of Gryffindor. In an interview with Hermione Granger and Dobby, we learn more about S.P.E.W. and the history of elf enslavement. Thanks a ton to my two amazing BETAs: Little-kitty and my mom.
Date: 03/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: Girl Protests for Elf Rights
I really enjoyed this story! It sounded just like a newspaper article, and that might be difficult sometimes (for me). I really liked even the little quotes of Hermione. It was very well-written- particularly the few lines in the beginning.
The bit about the history of house-elf enslavement was very interesting, especially the way you explained how the elfs had to have work without clothes or unemployment with clothes.
I do have a tiny error to point out - hope you don't mind. "These are a lot of ambitions for such a young whitch, but with a lot of hard work.." that should be spelled 'witch'. A great job on the whole. Good luck! (or is the contest over?) Do write more! ~bL
Author's Response: Thanks a ton. Someone ells told be about that mistake also. I will fix it ASAP. I am happy that you liked my fic. Yes, the contest is over, and I placed second.