I'm Tom. I used to be on the forums but while I was away some sort of hack involving my account happened and I've since been happened. There's an extreme outside chance I might update An Insider's View, but I wouldn't hold your breath.
One of the most intruiging (and enjoyable) fanfics I've read. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thank you. I was beginning to wonder if anyone noticed. Thanks again.
The other reviewers were absolutely right.
Author's Response: Well thank you. I will loading The first story in my series called Band of Gypsies very soon. thank you for your review. N
NiceStory just try and avoid Americanisms (eg newsflash)
An OK chapter but it felt slightly rushed/hurried along. Also NEVER explain yourself (the alohomora bit) it ruins the flow of the story.
I'm just glad I was sitting down when I read this. This just as good if not better than the other chapters and I REALLY enjoyed them.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Does ten reviews mean you'll write the next chapter twice as fast? (I hope so)
Author's Response: Haha, I already sent it in so...just waiting for Mugglenet to okay it!!!! I hope they do it soon...lol. Thanks for reading my story!
I don't know why no-one else has reviewed this, I can only assume that since its Christmas they're feeling to lazy since it is an enjoyable story.
Amazingly good. One of the most enjoyable and original stories I've ever read.
I really enjoyed it. The only real criticisms I can make (after spending a long time looking for something to review about).
A couple of times you didn't start a new line when someone new spoke (picky)
I'm not really sure that someone of Ginny's size and weight would've winded Harry that much. I did like Ron's characterization, it was the most believable I've seen in a while, mainly because his relationship with Ginny seemed very petty, real and sibling-like (at least in my experience of sibling life).
Overall, Very Well Done.
Author's Response: *sighs* Yep. Siblings. I could write books on the complicated relationship between them. I have a fair few. Thank you for reviewing, CCCC.
This was really good. Harry's hotility to Malfoy is reall showing through, it will be extremely interesting to see if he can control himself. On the con side (and you can blame Madjh for this, if it was me I'd just praise but as commanded I will try and dishearten you) you need to be careful in your flashback, you hovered between the past tense and the past conditional tense. Depending on ehich type of flashback you're using (one where the narrator is remembering it or re-experiencing it) you need to choose one. Apart from that very good.
It's a good story but I have two major problems with it. 1. Americanisms, I just can't see Harry saying "Thanks for the save" or similar. 2. I think that Kevin and Sarah are slightly too perfect for me, so far they don't seem to have a single fault. Otherwise good
It's a good story but I have two major problems with it. 1. Americanisms, I just can't see Harry saying "Thanks for the save" or similar. 2. I think that Kevin and Sarah are just too perfect to be believable for me for me, so far they don't seem to have a single fault, and I can't see Snape just backing down like that. Otherwise quite good (I know I posted this review for ch1 but it was supposed to be for this chapter, the mods should delete it for you if you want)
It's okay but I think your moving the story along too fast slow it down a bit.
Author's Response: I was only showing some of the highlights of their first year to let you know how their relationship used to be....I'm glad you commented though....after I finish her 1 year and her summer I'm going to their 7th year....it will be a lot slower...at least I think it is.....
This is the first (and so far only) HP/OC story that I've liked enough to read more than the first chapter. Well Written.
Author's Response: Thank you for your response I am very glad you can read this and not think it sucks.....Chapter 3 should be up as soon as the people approve it. I hate that part of the process. Oooo got to go the dog has some thing.
Author's Response: Sorry I meant to sign off but i didn't....
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Harry is seventeen years old, and left unprotected now that Petunia is in Azkaban. The war has really begun, and The order will do whatever it takes to get as many magical races on their side that they can. Follow Harry through his last year at Hogwarts as he meets the new DADA Teacher, the new Quidditch Captain, Goes on a mission for The Order, and much, much more that I won't tell you about, so that while your reading the story you can fall off your chairs in shock. Let's just say this fic is packed with action, and you don't wanna miss it! PLEASE READ AND REVEIW!!!!!
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Really liked the chapter. Just one point. Can you really see a centaur saying "goofing off"??
Author's Response: I guess that was a little out of character for a Centaur, I just wanted to let ppl know they knew James. I'll go back and fix that! Thanks for pointing that out!=)
Like the original idea really has potential.
Keep it up.
P.S Subtle Hint!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm happy you think it has potential. But I know, in all honesty, that my writing is crap and needs a lot of work. Don't worry, next chapter up soon. Promse! Thanks so much for reviewing.
I like it (I think you already knew that but I thought I'd say it here aswell). Keep 'em guessing about who Hermione ends up with.
OK, here I am fulfilling my duties and reviewing. OK constructive criticism (or criticism at least). I think that the first sentence sounds slightly off. "life" and "lifelong" so close to each other don't flow very easily. Permanent or another synonym would work just as well. Other than that your re-hashing of canon start was excellent, I didn't even really mind that I knew the facts, I enjoyed being told them again. There were a couple of phrases (and I'm clutching at straws here) that I didn't like. "Beat up" being a prime example. Lastly I wondered about Harry's OWL results. Aside from Harry's potions O (which you've already heard enough about) I thought 7 seemed a slightly few. He worked much harder (or at least seemed to) than Fred and George and they got 5. I'd have expected maybe 8 or 9. Apart from that, depressingly good. :p
Hello, here I am, doing my reviews late as usual. :)
1)It's nice and philosophical at the start, lets the reader know what they're in for, nice.
2)Small point, in the UK, it's maurauders not marauders.
3)I think it'd look better if "out grew" was one word, but that's a personal matter, it matters not.
4)Did Voldemort rise before or after Harry's birth? I'm not sure, but it might be worth a look, I think I'll assume you're right :)
5)typo here I think, "pleads" should be pleas
6)presents, should be presence, but I'm nitpicking
But it really is a good story, with an unusual, more detached style that I like.
Well Done.
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Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Tom! I know I'm a dolt when it comes to spelling; someone might as well point it out. ;) But, yes, according to the lexicon, Voldemort was rising before Harry's birth.
Firstly, thank you. This story has been both a pleasure (perhaps the wrong word) and definitely an experience to read.
The possibility of Harry losing is one of the lesser explored themes in fanfiction, but you've really done it credit. There was not one point where this story was not realistic, complete with all the grittyness and pain of life. One of the best fics I've read. I'm going to recommend this to a few others that I know will enjoy (again this word doesn't seem to fit) this fic. Well Done.