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...and which lesser Harry Potter character are you?
I love this story! It is so angsty!
My favorite part is Miranda. I just love her, I hate her, but I love her. She is so well written. I can just see her being so sweet and such a witch at that same time. You really bring her alive. And of course she gets what she deserves. I do think there are times where Hermione is a little OOC, but it works with your story. Keep up the good work!
Agh!! That's it! I need more!! I love it! It gives Draco a human side which I know alot of people do, but you do it well. The only thing is Katrina. She seems nothing like a Slytherin. You have her placed there, but she seems generally sweet, not to mention dating Harry. While I know not all Slytherins are evil people, they are crafty. I don't see them as sweet.
Love her though! Can't wait for more!!
been reading this nonstop since I started... I LOVE IT! Your ideas are very original (at least I've never seen them before) The only thing i don't understand is Why Ginny told Dean about the kiss if she wasn't planning on breaking up with him! Update SOON!
Author's Response: Loralie Thanks for stopping to review!!! I definately think that a lot of this is going to be very original (mainly because the sixth book is already out and my book is going to go a very different way!)
Oh and as for Ginny, relationships are not always what they seem...sometimes our heart and our head are involved with two different people...sometimes they\'re not! Now THAT was a good hint if I do say so myself!!!
LOVE IT!!
this is the first story longer than a chapter that i have read, and i love it, i stayed up past midnight (which for me is really really late- i have a 4 yr old) because i had to read the whole thing!! i can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!!!!
these are such unlikely pairings. you have a real gift, you should work on a whole new story and think about getting published for real... after this one is done of course :)
Author's Response: Cool! I'm your first multi-chapter story? I feel so honored.
I've been around the fanfiction community for like 20 months now and I still compare every story to the very first multi-chaptered story I read.
I'm really glad you like the story and hope you continue to enjoy it!
wow wow wow!
this is my favorite favorite story, and it's coming to an end? I am so going to cry! You are wonderful! what an intriguing story! i am so conflicted! i can't wait for the next chapter, because this story is wonderful, but at the same time i never want it to come cause then it will be over!
I never saw the Harry thing coming! i thought he was dead dead!
Author's Response: Sadly, yes, this story mush come to an end. Thank you for you review, I\'m glad that you found int intriguing.
I'll be honest, I wasn't thrilled with the Prologue. There was nothing in particular, it just struck me wrong. But the second chapter made me almost cry. The way you killed off Harry was so sad!
The main thing I noticed in this chapter was Ron's thoughts. I would think they need to be in first person. Also, the Great Hall may not necessarily have been romantically decorated, since this was a graduation ball.
Over all, good job! I like it, it would be interesting to see where they went from here.
Author's Response: Thanks for your critiques, and for the review. I really didn\'t think about the decorations very much. =P
I Love this series! I already read the Boy Who Lived, and it was just as good. Fortunetly for you (unfortunetly for me, as this review might be a bit spammy) I can find no fault with your discription of Cordi -it has just the right words so you can see her in your minds eye. The only thing is that she might seem a little Mary-Sue at first. She's beautiful, and smart, and funny, and just to good to be true. But I still Love her! I will have to read the rest of the series to see if she stays that way.
Author's Response: Thank you!
It was my intention for Cordi to come off as a bit Mary-Sue in the beginning, as when you first meet someone you tend to look at them through rose-colored glasses. Remember, the first part of the series is how Charlie viewed Cordi when he first met her, and to him, she\'s perfect.
Given a chance, in the later stories, I\'m hoping that her insecurities and flaws will be a little more evident, allowing you to love her even more because she\'s not perfect. And, even though she\'s not, Charlie still loves her.
I do hope you read the rest of the series, as I have grown rather fond of the pairing and I can\'t wait to write the last story. Also, Cordi is my first attempt at writing an OC, so I need all the feedback I can get.
Thank you again!!
ok, now she's so not a Mary-Sue. I love how well you showed her insecurities. and OMG I love your Luna. "she knows everything" that is just GREAT.
Again, I have only one thing to nag about. As much as I love the weasley reaction to Cordi's parents, I think her parents hating her is a little out of the blue. Yea, she mentioned that they didn't show affection, but she never said they were down right mean. I also think that if they were going to tell her not to marry Charlie, Her mother would have come the second she got the Invite, in order to talk her out of it. Her parents do not seem the type of people to wait till the last minute to express an opinion, esp. where Cordi is concered.
Ok, I think that's it for now..... But I do really love this series, and adore Cordi. (such a pretty name)
Author's Response: Ahhh. They didn\'t get the invitation until just a few days before the event. Molly and Arthur didn\'t have time to dash right out and convince them they were insane. I was drawing from the scene where Molly acts irrationally when she reads about Hermione in the Daily Prophet. I could only imagine that, as a mother, she would be overly protective of her son. Especially when he\'s marrying someone she\'s never gotten a chance to know. I\'m glad that she doesn\'t appear Mary Sue-ish, now that you\'ve gotten to know her. Keep an eye out for the family reunion piece coming soon.
You already know how much I love this story, but I felt I should make it public! I cannot wait to find out why she said no!
The scene with Voldy flows better than it did, but it's still off. Maybe different spacing or something. hmmm. But the plot bunny is great!
Author's Response: Yay, another review! You\'ll find out all you need/want to know soon hopefully. :) I\'ll look again at the Voldy section and try and improve it. Must buy that bunny some more carrots to help me write next week!
Thank you for another great review!
~ Roxy