awwww this is so cute and sweet! you've really captured the characters' personalities ... well in my opinion anyway! i read your first version of this some time ago (cant rememver when lol!) and i agree that it has definately improved! The story line is beautiful. I liked James loyalty to his friends, and I thought you brought that out well, especially when he gets a bit angry at Lily. I especially LOVED the way you brought out Lily's feelings, and how its just so sudden that it all happens. I mean, at the time, she doesn't know, and she's confused ... all that! I think that was really nice! And of course Sirius! omgg funiii ... a very nice ending (Sirius' last line!)! Anyway, I think this review is growing and growing so I better stop now! Keep writing (and do another chapter if u can!!!!) xXx