11/23/04
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Date: 02/16/05 Title: None
Lovely. So far. A little short, however. I do hope the next chapter has more text with the same intensity of description and feeling put into so little words and the same hinting of things to come.
Maeve's Birthday. by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A companion piece to Snape's Birthday and a little off-shoot of Harry Potter and the Daughter of Light. It helps if you have read Daughter of Light but it's also a stand alone piece if you fancy a bit of spring magic.
Date: 05/19/05 Title: Chapter 1: Maeve's Birthday
Cute and fluffy with great description. The only thing I didn't like is that I couldn't really find the Snape we see in the books through Harry. However, it was nicely done. Rating this a 7.
Author's Response: Harry would never have seen Snape in this light! LOL So in a way it's good that you didn't see Harry's Snape. I must admit, I was a little freer with his characterisation than I would have been in HPDL...this was always meant to be a fluffy thing and is very different to the proposal scene that made it into the main fic. :-) Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 04/28/05 Title: None
Wow, this was confusing. When you begin, I have no idea when and where Harry is and how he got there. Also, it's hard to tell whether the room he is in is his room or Percy's room. The use of present tense didn't seem to work, either. Rating this a 5.
Author's Response: Well it is supposed to be a little ambiguous. You are not supposed to know every little detail. Sorry about the tense. I am terrible at that.
Too Late by Paprika
Rated: •Summary: Hermione has loved Ron for....... ever. But what happens when she tries to tell him? *Really sad, my first try at a one-shot so please give me some feedback!* Over 1,600 reads!
Date: 03/25/05 Title: Chapter 1: Twenty-four Hours Later
That was really sad! But it was rather obvious that Ron was writing a letter to her telling her he loved her. Still rating this an 8, however! Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you. I knew that the letter would be a give-away, but I didn't think that Hermione would be able to see that. Love is blind. ^-^
Through A Hero's Eyes by Eponine
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Neville Longbottom lived almost his whole life with his Grandmother. He knows who is responsible for the insanity of his parents. But if he has a chance for revenge, will he take it? Neville's story, set in sixth year. Note: This story has been picked up again.
Date: 04/30/05 Title: Chapter 1: Reunions
I liked it. It's something different and you have a nice grasp of Neville's character. You have a few typos, including 'heals' instead of heels, 'song' instead of son, and 'Me' ' instead of mine. Additionally, the chapter felt a bit more like a one-shot than a chapter, probably because there was tons of different ideas stuffed into it. Rating this a 7.
Strange Meeting by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Harry finds himself in a strange place with an altered Ginny for company. And what are those words that he can hear on the wind?
Date: 03/17/05 Title: Chapter 1: Strange Meeting
A wonderful, wonderful job, Maeve. Nice and slow and very thought out. I am not a H/Hr or a H/G shipper, but I still loved it very much. The moral is clearly thought out and impressed upon the reader. One little thing about grammar: 'Wondering, idly, why he was standing in a street, in the middle of the night, wearing only his slippers and –was this his dressing gown?'
First of all, this sentence is a fragment and therefore doesn't flow. Second, please remove the commas around 'idly.' You don't need either of them. But other than that, it was great! Rating it a 9 and putting it on my favorites list.
Author's Response: I'm not a H/Hr shipper either (I'm not a shipper at all :-) ) which is why I tried to be fairly vague about Hermione's relationship. She loves him, of course she does, they have been friends for a long time...there is no explicit romantic love shown though. And yes, re-reading it that line is a little off, I'll take another look at it. Thank you for the review. I'm glad you liked it enough to put it on your favourites!
I Have Seen Them Change by x2pttrclue32
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: I have seen them grow, change, and bond from a distance. They have never ceased to amaze me. What they have accomplished throughout the years is incredible, and I envy them. But with accomplishment also comes pain. How do they live when pain is preying on them? How do they go on when death is calling their names? They have suffered greatly, and that I do not envy…
Date: 03/29/05 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
You misspelled 'peers' when talking about Hermione, but other than that it was pretty good. However, I would have liked an amount of text for Hermione and Ron that equaled that for Harry. Rating this a 6 because I've seen you write much better.
Author's Response: I would've written more, but it would have seemed really forced, and it would sound ad. I tried though. :)
Les Malefices d'Esprits by d3pr3ss3dNhappy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: For the third time in three nights, Malfoy has awoken from disturbing nightmares. In order to rid himself of these plaguing dreams, he summons what he believes to be an ancestor. Unfortunately for him, it's not.
Date: 06/14/05 Title: Chapter 5: The Troubles of Dreams
No one's reviewing my Draco/OC fic! Waaaa! *hinthintwinkwinknudgenudge*
Author's Response: I did! (And yes, i am in spew...teehee)
Date: 05/22/05 Title: Chapter 1: Unusual Nightime Visits
Loved the dream, that was hilarious. Loved Snape in a bathrobe, that was sexy. Loved Goyle making excuses, that was unusual. Loved Crabbe losing teeth, that was hilarious. Loved the I-Hate-Ron pajamas, that was sexy. Loved Satan, that rocked. Giving this a 7.
Author's Response: Wow, I didn't know there was so much to love. :-) You know Hogwarts wizards in pjs are sexy. ;-)
Date: 05/22/05 Title: Chapter 2: Satans, snitches and schizophrenia
This just keeps getting better and better. The best part is that, unlike most humor stories, it actually has a plot line. And it's halfway believable, too. :D Draco with flushed pink cheeks looking all pretty...*licks lips.* Yum. Rating this an 8.
Author's Response: 1/2 way believable? *Shocked* Didn't even know I had a plot, thank you though.
Date: 05/22/05 Title: Chapter 3: Hitting the Books
*shakes head while grinning* "There are more than two of us." "Yes, but I'm ignoring you." And how more ridiculous can you get than Draco dreaming that he's a knight saving a princess from a fire-breathing dragon, but the princess is really Ron? Unless Ron dreaming that he's a princess being saved from a fire-breathing dragon by a knight, but the knight is Draco, tops it? (did that make sense) Rating this a 8. Please hurry up and update Marie! :D
Author's Response: Guess what? I UPDATED! It's a miracle! After years of writer's block I concocted a completely pointless chapter! YAY! And guess what? Hogwarts uses DIXIE CUPS!!! Okay, wow, I'm a bit hyper. Haha.
Date: 06/14/05 Title: Chapter 5: The Troubles of Dreams
Wow, Marie, I am laughing so hard that my friends are giving me weird looks....I love how all this is fitting together. Update soon please! Rating this a 9.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try to update!
Luna's Life by Kestrel
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Luna Lovegood's father tells the story of Luna after her mother's death. One-shot.
Date: 05/23/05 Title: Chapter 1: one-shot
It was nice but ended much too abruptly. You should have described her getting older and pulling even further into her shell before saying that she died in my opinion. Rating this a 5.
Author's Response: I shall consider re-writing the ending. Thanks for reviewing!
Bellatrix by Kestrel
Rated: •Summary: Bellatrix Black is at this moment pressing a cold, sharp knife against her wrist. Will someone come and change her mind? One-Shot.
Date: 05/23/05 Title: Chapter 1: Angsty One-Shot
I liked it but there were a few mistakes...McGonagall should have called Bellatrix *Miss* Black, not Ms. Black. Additionally, since when is a knife a "muggle artifact?" *is extremely confused* Rating this a 6.
Author's Response: Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't women over 12 supposed to be referred to as 'Ms.'? Or is it that in dialogue it is to be fully spelled out? If not, Ms. is the correct usage for a 16-year-old Bellatrix. And 'artifact' simply means
An object produced or shaped by human craft, especially a tool, weapon, or ornament of archaeological or historical interest.
It doesn't always have to be a historical object. I simply chose that as the word to use. It is considered correct.
Thanks fore reviewing, though, and for pointing out things that might be mistakes. And I know most people would hate you for that '6', but I give out stars lightly as well, and know that for you it replaces what most people put as an eight. No biggie!
Fight It by x2pttrclue32
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: This war is being fought. People are out there dying. People are out there fighting. Fighting for dear life, but still...fighting for the war and for what is right. But what is it really about? Ginny contemplates this question. One-shot.
Date: 07/08/05 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot
You imitated a person's thought patterns quite beautifully and accurately. Good job. However...you had Ginny talk about God a lot. Unfortunately, wizards do not have religion and therefore do not say that. When you're using it as an intensifier, use Merlin instead. Additionally, you used two words that I'm sure are completely American: ya and gung-ho. But other than that, it was pretty good. Your best yet. Giving this a 7.
Author's Response: Um...I have never heard that wizards do not have a religion. It it just not mentioned in the books. I think it is perfectly fine to have God in the story.