I really liked how you set the mood in this story. From the weather to Ginny reading but not really and Neville's staring it really captures the worry and fear of those left behind. The feeling of your safe and everyone else isn't, the underlying darkness that we forget about in war. I love how you brought that out in made it real for reader.

I really liked Ginny charactizaqtion, I think it was spot on. She misses Harry but understands why she isn't with him. Even in her own worries she reaches out to help a friend. The way you had Ginny wait until the right moment was perfect.

Your story seems to move a little fast. My suggestion would be instead of just skipping from one time to next put in transition paragraphs.

Overall I really enjoyed your story and I'm thrilled over my new banner!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for that lovely review and I\'m really glad you liked your banner.

I really liked how you took a serious topic and funny and really a joy to read. The little things like the name tags made me smile. The only thing I wish was in there was the talk Molly said she was going to have with the twins. Sequal maybe? Oh and by the way congratulations on being named the winner, it was well deserved.

Author's Response: That's a good idea... a sequel. If I ever find the time to write it, I might. Thanks... the win was a really big and pleasant surprise for me!

I really enjoyed this fic and the insight given on Riddle's character. The way Isla worships Tom reminds me of Dumbledore's discription of how people reacted around Tom. The subtle manipultion by Tom seemed very true to his character, along with the plot twist at the end.

Secondly I loved your desciption. When Tom is noticing the room where Isla is, and Isla grimace when looking at Dobby show subtle hints of her character. You really feel like you understand Isla's character by the end of this.

One question, why do think the Malfoy'd would have relic a Ravenclaw's, considering their Slytherin background?

Author's Response: Thanks for your wonderful review, Gonz! :D As to why the Malfoys would have a relic of Ravenclaw\'s, the tiara came to their family through Isla\'s aunt who was a distant descendant of Ravenclaw. And she handed it over to Isla. Even though they were basically Slytherins, they wouldn\'t say no to a Ravenclaw artifact, considering the historic importance of it, would they?

First thing, I like how you took the time to have a chapter just where you slowly introduced us to your story. The work you put into describing the setting and with charactization will be reallly halpful to the reader, I think, later on.

I will admit I was confused by the flashback, but I throughly enjoyed it and can't wait to see the importance and what happens to Eddy. Another note, I really liked how you characterized young Remus. Most fics I've read have him as a quiet bookworm, even as a kid. You gave him some personality that I think shows his future Marauder side.

I reallly liked the description in the first three paragraphs. "These rays illuminated the purple bags under the eyes, along with every care-worn line on the face of the man who sat in the lone chair across from the desk." This sentence just jumps out at me, I really liked it.

While I think you've set up for future chapters well, my one critism would be this. In present day you didn't give the reader any reason to want to read to on. There was no hook that catches the reader and makes them want to know what happens next. The only things you allude to happening are the holiday and that house, but I didn't feel need to want to know what is going to happen at either. Now, with the past story I felt that. I want to know what happens to Eddy. I want to know if its because his son is a werewolf or is this is before that happens. See the differrence between the two.

Overall it is an interesting story and its very clear you did your research. Good luck on the challenge.

Author's Response: I usually include the \'hook,\' and I like to build the suspense, but for this first chapter in the present day, it didn\'t seem to fit the story. My \'hook\' is essentially the flashbacks and connecting the bridge between the past and present.

I enoyed your take on the challenge by making it more personal by focusing on the affect of the strike one person. Your characterization of Pansy was really good and I liked the introductory paragraph which really helped set up her character. That and the passivity of her father really convey the spoiled rich image. Also in the books Pansy comes off as the the standard depends on male girlfreind, but here she shows she is no pushover. Also the scenes were Pansy and her family struggled with the lack of House elves were very done.

Overall good job in working with a difficult challenge, it was an enjoyable read.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I really do appriciate it and I\'m glad that you enjoyed the story! :]

This is one of the most creative and orginal stories I've read. I love how you used the ticking of the clock to show the reader how many decisions Snape is making in a short amount of time.

This line confused me: Perhaps Dumbledore is right. Perhaps love is the strongest of all magic. You are talking about how the curse is attacking the heart and brain, then Snape thinks this. I lost the connection. It may just be me *shrugs* Also same line is Snape changing his way of thinking or is he being sacaristic?

Good job, it was an enjoyable read.



Author's Response: Thanks for the review. With that line I was trying to explain what made the curse so powerful--that it was made from love. Not exactly healthy love (more like the love of a woman scorned, who while hating her cheating husband also loves him) but love none the less. I was trying to indicate that Snape was considering changing his mind about Dumbledore\'s view. In this story, Snape has never been completely convinced by Dumbledore, but this is one piece of evidence he is willing to consider. Again, thanks for your response!

This was a very infomative and interesting reading. I really liked how linked the gods were to Egypt politictics. The sun god not important until he became assioated with the rulers, then all the other major gods hade be assiocated, too.

Out of the lists of gods Nun struck me as interesting, because of frog and water link. It made me think of the story of Moses and one of plagues was frogs/toads came out of the Nile and did something, I forget, but it almost like that plague is mocking one of the Egyptian gods.

Wow! I love what you did with the prompt. I was completely caught of guard with the pensive, but it really was a good way to incorporate a HP character we know and love with the mysteries of the past.

The sun was beating down ruthlessly as the small group of riders made their way across the desert. Already Bill was drenched in sweat, but his elation knew no bounds. He knew this day would reveal something monumental, he could feel it in his bones.

I like how you started the this story with this paragraph. You can feel Bill's ancipation, and you get excited and curious, too but. Nice why of hooking in your readers from the start.

I like how you portrayed Bill. He really is a smart man, but because of his nature it is easy for people to overlook and you showed that with Professor Anderson. Bill has that youthful, almost reckless energy that shown well, too. Good job with charactization.

My only complaint is that this has to be a one-shot, so Bill can't explore more of Ancient Egypt in the pensive.

Author's Response: Thank you. Bill was fun to write and I\'m glad you liked the way I wrote him, we really don\'t know much about him before he came back to Britain and I tried to give him a personality that fit in with the rest of the Weasleys while still making him his own character.

Good message, good story. Not your typical Bella, but that doesn't matter, its a miracle.

You know we write these stories and dream of being like Harry, being a hero. Sly just reminded us how we all can be a hero many times over. I have donated blood many times, it is really easy. If you qualify go do it.

Thanks for the reminder and good luck in the challenge.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! This actually isn\'t too off from my typical Bella. I tend to write her differently than most people. :D

And thank you for the reminder to everyone to donate blood. After all, it is the season for giving.

Again, thanks so much for the review!

Very interesting and orginal. I like how Malfoy got revenge on Harry for pelting him with snowballs while invisible, by doing the same. The ending had a good message, Harry seems to have learned a vaulable lesson about forgiveness. Good job and good luck!

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you for the wonderful review! I really appreciate you reading this story. I hope you liked it, it is a bit different. ;) Yes, Harry did learn something at the end. I seem to have developed a fondness for sentimental endings lately. ;) Thanks again for the review!! ~Gina :)