Hi, thanks for looking at my bio. I'm just your typical senior in college just trying to survive writing all those pesky papers.
If you look at my fics you can tell that I've entered way too challenges, but I'm attempting to branch off with my first big chaptered fic Becoming My Father. You may have noticed that I'm a little obessed with Percy Weasley. That is true; I find Percy the most human of all the characters and the more I write him the more he becomes my favorite character.
In the forums I am a proud Hufflepuff and Quidditch Referee. I encourage you all to check out the Quidditch Pitch in the Three Broomsticks.
I loved this! Gary is really cute, the story is well written, and the whole concept is one of the most orginal things I have seen on this site. Good job!
I liked how Gary was well dumb, but really innocent. He was just ignorant the whole story about what was going on around him. Gary had an unlikely hero quality about him. No matter what happens he just keeps on walking. Imagine if that's we had to do to become a hero, walk. Okay starting a gaint war wouldn't be pretty, but Gary saved the cows. The part were Gary is mooing and mooing in his dream had me in stitches.
But I digress. Overall, I enjoyed how you created a character that most would consider a bubbling idiot and turned him into the cutest little hero in the Harry Potter world.
Great ballad and good luck in the challenge!
What interested me in your story was in your summary you talked about characters facing their faults to help each other. After reading your first chapter I will say this story sounds really interesting and has a lot of promise.
I like how even in the first chapter how you are already starting to let your character's personalities and faults drive the plot. I like how the faults are nicely woven into your characters personalities so you’re not hitting you reader over the head with them. I have seen others do it, not pretty.
So good and keep writing this looks to be interesting.
Author's Response: ^_^ Thank you!
Gives great big Badger Hug to my Secret Badger! I love it, thank you so much!
Remus is one my favorite characters and I love how you gave him some joy to get through the darkness in a way that was very believable.
The story was very sweet, thanks again!
Author's Response: your very welcome!! Glad you liked it!!!
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Very nice interpretation of the challenge, and interesting story too.
What I liked most was how at first Lav’s love toward Red was innocent and kind of giggling girlish, more of a crush than anything. And the cases in Jo’s books were one tried to use Love Potions fell under the girlish crush category, so you had me thinking he’s going to cheat on her and in despair of her crush come up with a love potion. I couldn’t have been further from the truth. I thought the revenge motive worked really well, and makes sense. People want fairy-tale love, but a Love Potion could really be seen as cheating, so by making the potion come up of revenge and a desire to hurt Red and men makes a lot of sense. I really enjoyed it. I thought the ending with the card and Red’s thoughts worked really well especially were he acknowledged that he said he hated Lav, but not really. All in all a very enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, glad I could surprise you! =)
I have been a long time silent reader of this series and felt I should finally speak up. You are an absolutley lovely writer and you make your characters come alive. Ariadne is wonderfully thought out and I'm grewing quite attached to her I love what's she willing to do for Lupin, but I fear for her too, with Tonks and all that...
Also you are good with your inventions, be it Adraine's potions and other little things. The thought you put into your work really shows. Keep it up.
I eagery await what comes next, and I have a feeling that I'm going to greatly dislike Belby before long.
Keep writing, you really do have the gift.
Author's Response: Dear Gonz, Welcome to the club! I am so glad you have been reading. The character of Ariadne is what has to drive this story, and what happens to her makes sense if you allow for both her character and human nature. Now, what made you think of Belby? You don\'t meet him in person until chapter 17, but he certainly places a spanner in the works. Best wishes, GhV
What attracted me to this story was the poem; it is one of my absolute favorites. Frost just has a way with words, but so do you. I have to say your imagery is amazing. The first three paragraphs were beautiful.
What really touches me with this story is the message at the end. You take the message in the poem and have it go both ways, which is always a good reminder for us all. Good things will fade, but so will the bad. A great message of hope.
I'm sorry I don't have anything to critic, but was truly a touching story.
Author's Response: **huggles**
Thank you! I love Frost\'s poem as well (obviously) and I get really excited whenever I see it anywhere.
~Evie
First off I really enjoyed this chapter. The humor was underlining, but great; really a bit of fresh air for the humor category. I liked how you took an unpleasant situation and just steadily made it worse and worse, it was a nice build-up to end.
Taking the Pureblood system and turning it on its head was a great idea. Your fic really is based on reality, they are becoming more and more inbred, which I think makes it even funnier to read. Lucius Malfoy explanations of why Draco couldn’t marry who was priceless.
I also thought the relationship between Draco and Lucius was well done. Lucius truly does care about his son or he’d never suffer brings this up. It’s not the type of love must people would think love, but love never less. Also, Draco reacted wonderfully in character as he protested before finally accepting the necessity of the situation. The scene, dialogue just helped create this all very well.
Overall, an interesting fic with some much needed different types of humor. Good luck with the rest.
Author's Response: When I first started writing this my intention was to write something that was, for all intents and purposes, completely and utterly ridiculous, but to do it with such a straight face that no one actually noticed. Oh, I also wanted to insult a great deal of people who write fanfic poorly, not to mention have the occasional dig at JKR herself.
The underlying subject matter is something that I was originally going to write a serious one shot on, but I am glad I took this route instead, as it seems to have worked quite nicely. The relationship between Draco and Lucius is also a prominent factor, as I cannot stand the abused/neglected stereotype that occurs so frequently.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such an inciteful and interesting review. I do enjoy hearing other people\'s opinions.