I loved the prank! Poor Terry... Giggles, slippery pigs. I like how you had the pigs number 1,2,and 4...no 3. But, I have seen that before in a Marauders fic (the number thing). I like how you included Peter in the prank and in their conversations, a lot of the time he is left out. Good job!

Author's Response: Thank you! The prank was listed as \"classic schoolboy\" on the site I got it from, :D, so I\'m sure the other writer found similiar inspiration and enjoyed creating their HP version of it too. It\'s a shame Peter gets left out in some stories. He had to be close to Sirius or he wouldn\'t have been made Secret Keeper. I think he had his good points, it\'s just that his cunning and greedy/cowardly self interest outweighed them. Sigh. Thanks again! ^_^

I tried to review a moment ago and something weird happened, so if you got a review with three words on it, sorry. I just wanted to say that I like it! It isn't like anything else I've read, and I mean that in a good way. I can't wait to read more!
Leah

Author's Response: Oh, thank you, Leah. You\'re very sweet. ~Gin

ROFL! Wow! That was amazing! I loved how you incorporated all the plotlines, just about, ever used in a Mary-sue fic. Draco, Harry, Severus, Orlando was just icing on the cake....so perfect. I loved it!

Author's Response: I really do think if someone is going to write a Mary Sue, the least they can do is make her tarty, so there\'s *some* vicarious enjoyment there. :D Thank you so much for enjoying the story!

Wendelin,

Okay, first things first: Somewhere, someplace a woman is crying, crying and waiting. She sits by the hour watching the seasons change, waiting for him to return to her. Autumn fades away into winter and winter melts into spring which throws itself to summer. The earth is dead once more and then it’s winter again. ~ Brilliance! I love this! It is a beautiful opening paragraph!

Your imagery is amazing! You use things that everyone can see in their minds-eye, like a snowflake, fire, ice. You use these natural, normal things to paint a haunting picture of a hurting Ginny. It is gorgeous!

I had a few little qualms with it. At the end of the forth paragraph there is a break tag, you need to erase that. You are also missing a space here: filling her every thought, dream,hope in between ‘dream,’ and ‘hope.’ And starting in paragraph fifteen, it starts to get a little confusing. She was talking about dreaming before and now she is talking about the walls she puts up…but there needs to better transition into that. It is a bit confusing.

Somewhere she is all alone waiting, waiting, looking out over the horizon but all she sees is the setting sun and the sky shimmers and fades away into darkness. I love this! It brings everything together, from start to finish.

You wrote an evocative, beautiful piece of fan fiction. Be very proud!

~Leah

Author's Response: Thank you so much Leahface! *steals Gabby\'s nickname* Transition...hmmm...must do something about that...*ponders*

WAIT! I know! Hermione falls for young Snape! Right? I've read SO many fics about that!

I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Hermione falls for young Snape? I\'ve never read one like that... good idea... hmmm, I\'ve already finished up that part but I suppose I could add to it. Maybe. :)

The first paragraph was amazing! It captured my attention and made me want to keep reading.

You use description very well and integrate her thoughts with ease.

"And I realized that I, too, am bound. Not by the many cages that have held me, or by the fate I was born into. I was bound by love." - This is amazing! It ends the piece perfectly! Very well done!

~Leah

Author's Response: *Giggles* Why thank you! I was hoping people would like it. It\'s not my favorite, but I do like the last line, as well.

Oh! You did an amazing job in the characterization of Hagrid. He would have thought about his pets more then himself and he would have stopped harm from coming to another student. You even got his speech just right.

The story all together is good. You do an awesome job of describing the feeling and mood of the piece. Reading it I could see it all happening in my mind.

The only thing I didn't like too well was the...I don't how to word it. Reading it I wasn't captivated by the story. I continued reading cause I don't just stop reading in the middle of something. Maybe it was the pace. It was interesting then it slowed down and then sped up...It didn't capture my attention. I hope that makes sense.

Overall: Very good!

Author's Response: Hey Leah, It makes perfect sense. I\'m sorry about the pace. I\'ll have to go back and see if I can level the field, so to speak, before I write the second part. Thank you for your compliments!

Again, amazing job with description!

The character intrigued me. I felt for her, her longing and pain. She was going through something that was real and that made it easier for the reader to feel right along with her.

James was written well. I could see him doing something like that to try and make Lily jealous or try and forget her.

Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it!

Beth,

Oh! I really like this. The way the founding four were and then how Salazar turned on Godric was nicely done!

I liked how, even in a short one-shot, you gave them each their own personalities. Salazar was a bit mean, but still part of the group. Godric was a bit Dumbledore like, but it suited him well. Helga was soft and gentle. Rowena was logical and kind. Great job with them!

The end was great! I could see Godric and Salazar fighting like that. They were both passionate. Both wanting what they thought was best for Hogwarts, and fighting with all of themselves to make it so. You did a great job writing them and that scene!

I only had one problem with it. It was too short! There seems to be so much more to the story, but it ends! I want to know more about how the world was when Hogwarts started. What was Hogsmeade like outside that tavern? What happened after Salazar and Godric fought? What did Helga and Rowena think about it? I want more!

Overall, brilliant job, love! You took that challenge and made something great!

~Leah

Wow! You gave amazing description of Sirius' feelings. That is also a realistic theory of what is behind the veil. Great job! I can't wait to read more from you!

Author's Response: I was worried that no one would like it!! Thanks for the review!! You rock my socks, Leah!! -Gabby