OK, so you know I love this story! You use imagery beautifully! Sight, touch and sound, you bring it all together.

Ginny's emotions are well thought out and presented. As you are reading you feel them too. The emotions are deep and believable, which can be hard to write. Great job!

My favourite part has to be the end. The Thestrals. They added SO much to the story! It shows what they went through and had to endure, death and suffering to get to place without it. A place where beauty can flourish. That scene is written beautifully.

Overall, *gives standing ovation* very well done! I can wait to read more from you!

~Leah

Author's Response: Yay! A review! Not to mention it\'s from Leah! I\'m so glad you liked the story, and once again, I curse at the fact that everyone\'s favorite part is the thestrals and that idea cam from my friend. *sigh* that\'s life, I guess. At least I wrote it...*shrug* thanks for the review!

Khrys my dear old friend,

That was really cute!

Everything happened a bit too perfectly for me though. Girls like boys, boys like girls, girls trick boys, girls and boys get together, the end. Maybe add a little more confusion to the mix.

Overall, I really liked it. It was fun and well written! Great job, hun!

~Leah

Author's Response: Thank you, Leah. It is such a good thing to hear some praise from a good OLD friend.

Again, beautifully done!!! I love it! You wrote her panic just right! "She wasn’t thinking. She wasn’t even breathing, she was just going." This gave me chills!!! Great job! *waits for more*

~Leah

Author's Response: *I shall say it again* This story would be in the trash if it wasn\'t for you. I\'m glad you liked it. Hopefully I\'ll get chapter four written soon! Thanks for the review!

Oh! That was cute! You wrote them all very well! You added the right amount of everything into the story, humour, romance, drama. It all fit! Great job!

~Leah

Sunray,

Wow! You captured Jonathan’s grief and emotions really well. His thoughts were disjointed yet following the same path; they fit the mood just right.

I thought that adding his need to protect his sister as he couldn’t protect Moire was genius! It added a new dimension to the story. It gave him some hope, which I think fit very well.

The imagery you used was beautiful. The description of the clouds and sky was amazing! It gave the story a different feel, it gave it something that the reader can connect with, something we all have seen and understand.

Some of his thoughts were a little odd and didn’t make complete sense. His thoughts seemed to get very philosophical and sounded a bit strange. I understood them, but they seemed a little out of place near the end of the story.

Also, in the last paragraph you capitalize ‘He’ when it wasn’t at the beginning of the sentence multiple times.

Overall, I thought it was good! You really did a great job!

~Leah

Author's Response: Ooh! Leah! *huggles* Thanks for the review!! I\'m glad you liked it! I fixed up the mistake you pointed out. The philosophical thoughts at the end came from the influence of a song I was listening to. They are meant to be weird, because Jon is slowly losing touch with this world and then is brought back by Rose. Once again, thank you so so so much for the review! ~Sunray

I really enjoyed this story! I have never read a story about Nicholas Flamel before, and I was pleasantly surprised!

I liked how you made something like immortality human. It is something that a normal person can’t really grasp, but you have brought it to a level that is interesting and makes sense.

I have always thought of Flamel as almost not human because of his immortality, you took him and gave him very human emotions and faults in a believable way. The way you made his relationship with his wife have bad points as well as good points was nice. That isn’t something I have seen before, they have always been the prefect couple, and you made them human.

I saw a few things you may want to fix. ‘The letters had been coming to Hogwarts increasingly desperately, one after the other in an urgent plea to mean.’ Should that be ‘desperate’ and ‘meet’ not ‘mean’? Also: ‘but alas, they we unable to reverse time without consequences.’ Should that be ‘then we are unable’?

‘At the sight of his friend’s raised eyebrows at the sudden appearance of the object, he merely whispered quietly, ‘Magic.’’ I love this line! It is so Dumbledore and added a nice lift to the seriousness of the story.

I really like this story and the emotion and humanity you gave the characters. Great job!

~Leah

Author's Response: Leah! Thank you for this FANTASTIC REVIEW! You had me in SQUEE\'S! I\'m editing it right now, in fact, and you\'ve helped me quite a lot! Such a kind reviewer! ♥

Wow. I love the light you gave to Lucius and Narcissa's marriage. I don't think I have ever read someone talk about Narcissa's feelings about her marriage that way.

You gave Narcissa a great personality and her thoughts were believable. I could totally see her marriage happening that way.

I would have liked more story from in-between the engagement and the wedding though.

Great job!

~Leah

Author's Response: I think when I was writing it, I was writing quickly and somehow incorporated that into the story...to make it fast-paced, so that things seem to be happening suddenly. Eh... Thanks, Leah! ^_^