I'm an energetic 16 yr old grl....um to be totally honest im cute, funny, have the best friends in the world, a little bit crazy, really darring, athletic, fun lovin...bad traits..im a lil selfish and just a tad arrogent, and possibly a lil vain, lol oh and i party way to much in the summers... to the point where i have to admit i dont know my limits and i get sick. im not a dork lol even though I love harry potter and i love writing.
My fave place in the world is my penname Cazorla..it's a town in Spain in the mountains...its the most amaing place in the world..I had the time of my life there this summer-it's my heavan on earth
I care alot about my friends and see myself in Harry potter which is why I'm so addicted to the books...I'm always trying to be the brave one, to do what's right, to be cool, my life is always like a movie, my atttitudes frequently change from positive and strong in courage-happy to negative and angry. but as i grow older they are more commonly positive just like harry. I love my personality and where I am in life right now ... the only thing i ask our good lord for is more defined character (to know myself better) honesty (im pretty much a big liar lol im workin on it) and most importantly positivity.
In my future I want to do something with health and foreighn relations...I want to start out by going to the naval academy..im a huge adventure seeker and I have always had that childish dream of saving the world.
I love writing, partying, playing sports, my friends, Spain, music, reading sometimes, adventuer, Harry Potter of course, danger, and life.
I hope that if you're reading this you were really interested in my stories I posted w/ my very limited free time...so I'm sorry updating is a struggle but reviews are such a huge motivator as you prob know.
~un beso de Laura
~and I've said my peace
ok hang on i still love the story but wats with Bethany if Dumbledore knew she was dangerous he woulda stopped her, and done something now just let her run free in the school seducing and hexing people!!!! I dont really like dumbledore in this fic he dosent do anything about anything, and hes never around wats up lol?
Author's Response: perhaps he's testing the marauders for after school......WOOPS!! SAID TOO MUCH ;) you know dumbledore, he always knows what he's doing.
Great ending!!! It made me feel sad to think that my 16th bithday is comin up and ahh I kdon't ever wanna act my age!!!!! I wanna stay a kid forever!!!
Anyways I couldn't help but notice this: "with a father who wouldn't look at him, and a mother who pretended to love him, but was ashamed of his very existence. " Hey! That's the same thing I said in my story that you read!!! LOL it's ok tho it's cool you got an idea from me I don't consider it "stealing" haha great chapter watss the next story goin to be called??
Author's Response: whoa...ok. i totally did NOT steal that from you. maybe its just coz remus fans think alike, but this story has been in the works for a long time, and i had no intention of stealing from you. thats how i think of remus's family background. i've never stolen from anyone and i have no intention of stealing from anyone now. why would i want to? i have my own ideas about things. just so you know. and i was glad you felt that way about growing up, coz that's what its like for them. leaving hogwarts is leaving behind their childhood. kinda sad.
this is the freaking best fan fic i have ever read, its so real... like this is probally exactly how it happened! You are amazing!!! I love how you made Lily join them for all the fun, instead of makeing her such a girly girl stuck up complainer!!! I also love how the maurauders talk about more then just Lily and James!!! You have an amazing gift, the story is also hillarious and I just love it!! GREAT JOB AND PLEASE I BEG U KEEP WRITING!!
Lovely!! I absoluteley loved the flashback to when Sirius and James found out about Remus. You are way too full of it! It being amazingly good ideas! HaHa im so funny! jk lol keep it up awesome job
Author's Response: yes you are, you're cracking me up here! (and thanks for the wonderful reviews ::blush::)
FREAKING BRILLIANT!!!!!!!!! I LOVED this chapter, you did a great job w/ the Shakesperean parts, I LOVED it!! I mean I'm shocked you really took in what I felt into consideration, and now I am definantly felling James and Lily. I love the feelings between all of the guys especially between Sirius and remus and between James and Sirius! You're story is just amazing. Don't get discouraged about chapter 20, there was just one small flaw to it taht u more then made up for. After all it is your story and you can do whatever you want with it, but it is soooo great that you really care about what people are saying in your reviews and look on it as trying to become a better writer. This Chapter was really really awesome not to mention hillarious! It would be great if you could comment on my story (3rd chapter is the best so far but not up yet) if i could pick one person to give me advice on it u would most ddef be that person. It's called "Cry Lily, God just cry" KEEP UP THE AMAZING AWESOME WORK AND I'LL KEEP REVIEWING!!!
Author's Response: i must say i absolutely loved your reviews on chapter 20! they SIRIUSLY enhanced my writing, and im so happy you liked this new chapter. half of the stuff in it is really because of you, for you made me see what i needed to fix/change. thats why i love these reviews! because all of you guys know what youre talking about, and you help me through your knowledge. its truly flattering! and i would LOVE to read your story and comment on it! in fact, im going to do that as soon as i finish commentating on these new reviews! YOU ROCK, lilysdancin! WOOT!
hiya!! I really love your story, it's more about true friendship then drama drama drama, this is the 1st fic to actually make me laugh!) tid like to read about more things goin on between Lily and James. Also I really didn't like that corny part with Lily and James, I was just kinda laughing, try to make James out to be more tough, James Potter would never say he "dosen't think he can do it" Other then that I truely believe you and JK think alot alike. Keep up the good work its soo obvious your fave chars are Sirius and Remus (mine are too) and you do way too good of a job portraying then, I think Lily and James need a little work though, try not to surround them in too much trouble like in the next chap make them just have fun together, I'm not really feeling them as a "fun perfect for each other" like there are no jokes really between them, Id rather see them flirting and laughing then in each others arms nearly crying! . YOU are awesome!!! Cant wait 4 next chap
Author's Response: thank you! i know what you mean, unfortunately, i cant have too much flirtation going on as i need james to get rid of this spy first. after the crises at hogwarts and N.E.W.T.s are finally over and all the stress they're under is gone, i will add fluffy moments. i'm just into tragic heroes (just finished hamlet, i suggest EVERYONE and their goldfish read it) so i wanted to make him more human by showing that, yes, he is strong but he's also vulnerable. i thought that if big strong james would confide such fear solely in lily it would make it more touching. i mean, he never even told sirius his fears and such. :)
Awesssmme chapter...id say the same thing mundungus said about char developement, especially next chapter when they grad. you have to go all out for taht one i meaan make me cry lol the mauraders are graduating into the real world that sux lol!! Dont for get to put in a sirius joke! o and excellent fighting scene details, it's freaking amazing how fast you improve! I wasn't to fond of the end tho, i dunno it was kinda cheesydumbledore apoligizing for not being there for his students...it was ok i guess but i think u could have thought out a less lame reason lol u pulled it off tho and thats all that matters. Keep it up GREAT job
Author's Response: ohh i despise the word lame....but anyway! i cant drop the outline of my story for character development. there are some things that need to be done, and i cant have james and the gang reintroducing themselves or having nice heart-to-heart talks in the middle of a huge death eater battle. i mean, even in JK's department of mysteries battle it was mostly describing the fight, and then of course the end. this was one of the only chapters that i backed off of the character development (i figured you guys knew them all pretty well by now) to finish my battle. also with regard to the sirius jokes, they are coming, but again, i didnt want sirius cracking a joke in the middle of a fight. i write what fits, and nothing more. i cant add useless stuff in, or it would take away from the plot. as for the ending, people were saying something along the lines of "WHERE IS DUMBLEDORE?!?!?" so i explained where dumbledore was, and i didn't want him to be like, "yeah, so i kinda forgot you all coz i was doing real fighting upstairs. let's graduate." no. i needed to show that dumbledore truly cares about his students. if he just blew them off i think that would be a lamer ending.
and thank you on the fight scenes. my brother was an incredibly valuable asset, so i cant take all the credit. :)
o and question is next chapter goin to be ur last or are u goin to go on after they grad? i think it would be great if ya did, u should give it a shot, I'm havin fun writing about their lives after hogwarts and u can still bring in flashbacks from there earlier years @ school. think about it....
ooo so there is goin to be a story # 2 ahh u have to make the proposal suprise the hell out of lily not like she wasnt wanting it but like i dunno like he should do it when they're in a fighting scene being dragged away by death eaters lol or early early in the morning while they watch a sunrise, w/e u dwant just please please lol no fancy resteraunts cuz can u say borring! sorry its late im a bit insane at teh moment i think ill stop reviewing on this chapter now lol!
Author's Response: well i saw the best proposal EVER in a movie the other day. the movie was michael collins, with liam neeson and julia roberts. they were arguing and she was fixing up a cut on his face, and he just suddenly goes, "will you marry me?" and she immmediately goes, "yes." and then they laughed and stopped arguing. it was awesome. i will propose how i think they would have gone through it, and i also dont think that any wizard would propose to his witch in a fancy restaurant. have i ever done anything that muggle-ish?
that makes sense! Still I don't think you developed Lily and James enough to throw them into that situation. Yes James Potter has changed and he's admitting his fears but I stilll dont think James or any hero for that matter should ever say "i don't think I can do it!" That's like the worst possible thing to say! If James is haveing trouble pretending to like a girl, then how the hell is he goin to defeat Voldemort three times? Also I don't think that's how JK wanted James' maturity to be portrayed. He never had any doubts when he told Lily to run with Harry. I know it sounds like I'm downing ur story which i absolutely am not trying to do, it is ur story after all! I just really hope that you develop lily and James more as a couple after the drama dies down, and that mabey some of James' immaturity dies but not his bravery
Author's Response: oh no i completely understand what you're saying! most of what went on between lily and james was back stage and off of the page, which was a fault on my part.
when james said "i dont think i can do it" however, he wasnt talking about bethany, which i should have specified. stupid me. he was talking about the entire situation with the spy, and yes, in part with bethany. but mainly it was about the whole voldy deal. and its not your fault at all, its mine for not specifying it. and i love the fact that your questioning the story! it helps me become a better writer, and take a lot of things into account that i may have missed. so i enjoy this, and i mean no slight to you whatsoever when i counter your arguments, because that way i can show myself how to fix my story for the better. i need to feel the characters, and in this chapter it just wasn't coming properly. so i definitely appreciate this, lilysdancin! rock on! oh, and i promise ill develop lily and james more, with flashbacks and regular story. i've just got to get the spy out of the way first ;)
Good job as usual... What's making me crazy tho is where the hell is Dumbledore??? and how did all these death eaters manage to get in, and shouldn't there be other kids around the castle? The fighting scenes were kinda hard to imagine especially cuz they were al carring on conversations while curses were being shot at them. So ya I'd work on more details in the fighting scenes. I liked the drama w/ Remus. Hopefully they'll be no more battles fought on Hogwarts grounds, it just raises to many questions, also why should death eaters care so much about these kids, they're only 17, why are they going thru all this trouble? Death Eaters wouldn't necissarily want the school to close because what about all the pottential next generation death eaters goin to school there! Mabey next time theres a fighting scene it would make more since to have the order involved. You're way too good lol at writing the casual parts between the chars, but fighting parts are good, but could be alot better. Keep it Up!!!
Author's Response: some of these things i cant answer: like where are dumbledore and the order. i HAVE A PLAN! i really do. also, the death eaters didnt really care about the kids till they started firing back, so they figured they'd take out the people whod seen them first. they're not the brightest bulbs on the tree right now, see? its only shortly after voldemort's real rise to power. and, why would death eaters want the future to be trained in a school of muggle lovers? all youve got on their side is slytherin house, which is overpowered by gryffindor, hufflepuff and slytherin. so if they take over, a: its like the british taking over philadelphia in the american revolutionary war (its a strategic and symbolic holding) and b: they can turn it to their uses. i am working on fighting, ive employed my little brother. also, i havent really gotten into the big fights yet. its still skirmishes.
HI Thanx for reviewing, I'm very open to ur suggestions, it's my 1st fic so if you have a problem w/ the way I'm portraying a char let me know and I'll quickly reply back to you
Please review and don't be afaid to criticize i love that more then it was great
good very witty and good detail! yea im the 1st to review be the 1st to review my lily james fic "Cry Lily, God Just Cry"
hey! luved it...the art history u thru in there kinda make me a little crazy lol i have exams this week...but ya it was freaking awesome!!! Gosh!! u kno u r way too good at this!!!!!! update soon...... wow that was sooo good i like how u skipped 2 yrs too, it was great to see every1 a little bit more mature (w/ exception of sirius but thats why hes my fave lol)ya u totally pulled skipping 2 yrs off -- and lily and james come off as best friends i luv that!!!! ahh ur brilliant!!!!!!
Author's Response: ahh thank you!! lol! i have exams this coming week too, so everything right now is...crazy... my only option to prevent further insanity to myself was to take it out to 2 years. so im glad you enjoyed it!!
hmmm i dont know if i liked this chapter...u totally jumped over the grieving parts...or i dunno i wish more words were exchanged between lily and james...srry but in general this chapter was confusing and def not one of your best....i dont think lily would fall for another man shes stronger then that...
Author's Response: now wait just a second: lily did not technically "fall" for mr. tom, remember that. she is simply viewing him as a friend. she in no way implied romantic attraction at all, save the initial "wow he's hot" approach. but don't apologize i believe in freedom of speech ;)
this is much better then your last chapter...just better structure and ya it was awesome!!!! I luved the Sirius ~Lily interaction!!!
Author's Response: thank you! glad to see im not always a dismal writer!
hmm i dont know about that chapter...i thought it was kinda dumb how remus and sirius were spying..
Author's Response: yeah, well, they're just unpredictable blokes, so we'll never get into their minds