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04/12/06

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All the Answers by marauder_since_1993

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Harry, Ron, and Hermione want to know a million things, and talk to a million people, one of which is Dumbledore, but we all know that’s not possible. Right? One room in the Department of Mysteries may just have all the answers.

I made a minor change to Chapter Two, so you better reread it before Chapter Three is up.

Chapter 3 is in the queue!

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 05/12/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Department of Mysteries

Hi! Great story! You write a lot better than I thought. I put you on my favorites list. Can't wait for Chappie 2!

Author's Response: Thanks! I think.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 05/21/06 Title: Chapter 2: The Top of the Stairs

YOU KILLED LUPIN!!!! How could you?!! Other than that, good story.

Author's Response: I had to kill SOMEONE!

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 07/13/06 Title: Chapter 3: You've Been Alive All this Time?

I agree with minoe. (Sorry.) The first two chapters were very good, but this one didn't seem to go with the rest of the story. Maybe if you rewrote this chapter and elaborated more on what happened, it would be better. Don't be afraid to make it 4 or 5 chapters, even. Also, the part at the end where Regulus came over to the good side seemed a little fast. All Harry had to do was suggest it and he agreed. If you want to do it that way, I recommend that you draw it out more and give them time to forgive him for the mistakes he made. You really had some great ideas for this and I hope you think about my advice. Oh and I almost forgot...*does second reviewer dance*
~JBV

Author's Response: FYI, JBV, I feel that Regulus was pressured by his parents to become a Death Eater in the first place, so he was on the fence between good and evil for the longest time. But I will take your and minoe\'s advice and adjust the story a bit.

Promise of a Spring Moon by Kerichi

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary:

April showers bring May...hassles? Bridesmaid blues and big trouble from small favours complicate Tonks' life when all she wants is to bring her love for Remus into full bloom.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Spring Fancy

I think this will be a very good story. I really like what you have so far. Can't wait for chapter 2!
~JBV

Author's Response: Thanks! Remus gets all the good lines in next chap, and he deserves them, the sweetie. ^_^

Author's Response: Maybe not all the good lines, lol, but definitely my favourite ones. :D

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/17/06 Title: Chapter 3: The Rite of Spring

Another cliffie! *explodes* I hope you can get chapter 4 up soon, so I can find out what happens next! ~JBV

Author's Response: I juggle fic updates like mad, (forget the Perils of Pauline, its the perils of being prolific, lol) but as soon as the queue clears, I\'ll put 4 in! ^_^

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/12/06 Title: Chapter 2: Spring Forward

I feel so sorry for Tonks right now! Everything goes horribly wrong for her when he's around! Like always, you've written a great story. I can't wait for the next chapter!
~JBV

Author's Response: Gracias, Merci, and Thank you in any other language! ^_^ Evan does bring trouble, but this time, it\'s really not his fault, LOL.

Return of the Heros by hedwig_hoots

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Ginny wakes up on a day like many others... only to find three unexpected visitors on her drive. The heros have finally returned... Voldermort is defeated... and Ginny and Harry must now try and recover what they lost some where along the way.

***ONE SHOT***

My first fan fic please R&R ! !

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/07/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Return

Really good story! I love the ending - the Burrow really is his true home!
~JBV

Worn Away by Cherry and Phoenix Feather

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: "He never did anything hastily anymore. He had been hasty in his youth, and now all he had to show for it was an empty heart and an empty cabin."

Written by cherryandphoenixfeather of Hufflepuff for the May Monthly Challege #1--Pilgrimage.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/10/06 Title: Chapter 1: Worn Away

I've never read anything like this. It's a great story!
~JBV

Consider Him Normal by HStarRunner23

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: After Harry's death, Hermione makes a speech at his funeral. One-Shot.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: Consider Him Normal

This is really sad, but you did a good job with it. Hermione was right, Harry would've wanted a normal funeral!
~JBV

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I\'m so glad you liked it!

Her Hero by Kbpkrissy

Rated: 6th-7th Years •
Summary: As another full moon dawns upon the Marauders and Lily Evans, things take a dramatic twist that threatens the well-being of the school.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/18/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3

I'm the first reviewer for this chapter! *throws confetti* Great story! Keep writing!
~JBV

Broken Glass by Morwen

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: There were twelve years in which Remus Lupin lived alone, after he lost everything. How does one survive that?

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 01/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow! I loved how you captured Remus's lonely feelings well. You made me feel his pain. He is one of my favorite characters, and I really think you did him justice. You are a very talented writer (and bannermaker =D). Great job!
~JBV

Time-Traveling Can Be Very Complicating by marauder_since_1993

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Two vanishing cabinets and eight teenagers in two different decades. In 1977, James, Sirius, Remus, and a reluctant Lily try to travel to the future. At the same time in 1997, Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny attempt to get to the past. Their paths collide and now they are all stuck in time. What happens when they try to get home?

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 07/28/06 Title: Chapter 3: The Last Thing We Need to Happen

Good story. You have some great ideas.
~JBV

Author's Response: ahhh, thanx.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 09/08/06 Title: Chapter 5: Home Sweet Home

Good story! I really liked the ending: "In two separate times, two separate Dumbledores were pocketing their wands as the morning light made it’s way across the school grounds." When he said that they knew how he knew them, did he mean that he'd been time-traveling, too? That's just my guess.

I have a few nitpicks. When you were talking about the shield around Lily, you said, "...she could come over." Shouldn't it be "couldn't"? Then it says, "...and although Sirius could reach his hand in, Lily could reach her hand out." It should be "Lily couldn't." It's not really a big deal, but it just confused me a little at first. Good story, and keep writing!
~JBV

Author's Response: Yes, JBV, you are right on both accounts. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: What's Going On?

Good story! I like that idea; it's really different. ~JBV

Author's Response: Thank you, I like your stories, too

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/29/06 Title: Chapter 2: We're Home! Er...Aren't We?

*Does 1st reviewer dance* Good story! It's really interesting. ~JBV

Author's Response: Thanks! I had no idea anyone had a first reviewer dance!

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 08/06/06 Title: Chapter 4: The Padded Room

*Does first reviewer dance* Ooh, a cliffie! Good story. Update soon!
~JBV

Author's Response: thank you, JBV. I love writing \'cliffies\'!

Shining Reflections by Cherry and Phoenix Feather

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: "He sat on a flat rock, gazing at the reflection of the moon in the lake. He supposed it was typical of him, to look at the shine of the image instead of the real thing."

A younger brother reflects on separation and betrayal.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 11/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Shining Reflections

This is a great story! I love how you have Sirius compared to the reflections of the star, when he used to be that star. Although Sirius is usually portrayed as sort of wild and a player, I think this is much closer to the way he was. Wonderful story, with a very sweet ending. Great job!

The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves

Beneath The Shell by Sly Severus

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Andromeda takes a young Tonks to the beach. She quickly finds herself exhausted and falls asleep. Tonks decides to explore on her own. She meets someone her mother never expected her to meet.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 11/24/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I really like this story! Little Tonks is so cute! I don't think Bellatrix was OOC at all. I agree that she was nicer before she went to Azkaban, and would have been kind to Tonks. I like that she taught her the little lesson about how not everything is what it seems on the outside. I think she realized that she wasn't a good person and was protecting Tonks. Great job!

The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. I\'m glad that you don\'t think Bellatrix is OOC. I was worried that people would complain about that. Anyway, yes, the idea kinda was that she thought she was bad, but remember she also told her that people could change, when she washed the shell. :D Thanks so much for the review.

The Way Old Friends Do by x_lily_evans_x

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Remus Lupin visits James's and Lily's graves just weeks after their death. This is a song fic, and the song used is "The Way Old Friends Do", sung by Abba. Slightly teary, and very heartwarming.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 06/27/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is a great story! I like how you put in all the memories of the Marauders' time together. Keep writing!
~JBV

Author's Response: Thanks for the great compliment ((:

And the Sky Was on Fire by Aelan Greenleaf

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: I held your cold body against mine, as I shivered from both shock and grief. You were gone, and I had never even known you. And the skies above us were on fire, on fire with the new dawn, the dawn you would never see. And I cried.

Reviewer: Just Beyond the Veil Signed
Date: 07/13/06 Title: Chapter 1: And the Sky Was on Fire

I like this because it's a very different idea and it was written really well. Good job!
~JBV

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