04/14/06
Just an old bus driver that's older than dirt. I love to spoil my old sheep dog. Nana deserves it.
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A Grandmother's Tale by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A little character exploration. How did Neville's Gran take the news of her son's torture and what does she really think of her grandson?
Date: 06/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Grandmother's Tale
Truely the sorrow and suffering of a mother and grandmother. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you! :-)
The Clipped Wings of Love by Magical Maeve
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A little study of what Snape's parents' marriage might have been like.
Date: 06/28/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Clipped Wings of Love
Sorrowfully well written. My heart goes out to Vervain. So many women are trapped in similar circumstances. You skillfully captured the whole situation.
Well done.
Harry Potter and The Story In The Runes by IHateSnakes
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Lord Voldemort is no more, but the victors paid a high price. This story begins as Harry, Ron, and Hermione’s seventh year comes to an end and Ginny's starts. While delving into the ancient story of Merlin, Percy Weasly brings attention to what appears to be the complete collapse of magic. Can he, or anyone stop the changes before it's too late?
Date: 11/20/06 Title: Chapter 46: The Giftie (The Gift)
Well, up to your usual excellent standards. there were a few places where I was scratching my head. Now that the story is complete, those could be modified.
I love a happy ending. This was no disapointment. A better happy ending would be for JKR and you to co-author a version of this for publication. It wouldn't take much plot modification in adding this to the current story line. It could be an epilogue to the original septology. I could see it titled:
Harry Potter and The Story In The Runes, An epilogue to the Harry Potter septology. Or some such.
I still say though, your beta should be spanked. With such a... how should I say this? With such a rip-roaring good story, who cares?
Date: 06/10/06 Title: Chapter 37: A Healer And A Cave
HOGWARTS!!! Ok, calm, breathe, I'm calm. OI! THE CHAMBER OF SECRETS!?
Sorry.
Very well written. Your beta needs to be spanked. Otherwise excellent.
CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT ONE!!
Yours,
Godric
Author's Response: Thanks... what did you see that needs fixing? S.
Date: 05/30/06 Title: Chapter 36: The Beginning of the End?
Up to snuff as usual. Spellbining. I can't wait to see what Severis and Harry do with those blank pages. And who the devil was that fellow with the note nailed to his head?
Wonderful sense of mystery, suspense, had, no still has me on the edge of my seat.
I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
Date: 05/30/06 Title: Chapter 34: Friday Night with Fred
I have to agree with panda, that was good. The date was absolutely the best. Sometimes turnabout is fair...
Though your writing is far better than fair.
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
Date: 11/24/06 Title: Chapter 46: The Giftie (The Gift)
I know I've already submitted my two cents worth, but...
I just wanted to say how happy it made me that the elves were included in the 'New World' that the founders forced on the Magical community.
I really like Dobby, Winky, and the other elves.
Date: 05/19/06 Title: Chapter 35: From the Cave to the Heavens
Where in the books do you see the use of the term Ms? This is an American term and the Brittish women that I know find it either foolish or insulting. Oh sigh. one of the problems with old age I guess.
Otherwise up to your usual level of excellence. Great story telling and your plot is outstanding. I'm greatly looking forward to what Snape has to say. You really need a better beta though...
Author's Response: I\'m fixing the Ms. going forward, Thank you. S.
Date: 07/04/06 Title: Chapter 39: The World Turned Upside Down
OH MY GOD! EIGHT MORE CHAPTERS????
Ahem. Sorry.
Date: 10/20/06 Title: Chapter 43: Secrets in the Sand
Thompson was SNIFFING? Interesting... So Percy and Severus finally let go. How sad, and yet wonderful.
It's up to your usual excellence. Looking forward to the rest.
Date: 07/02/06 Title: Chapter 39: The World Turned Upside Down
Beautifully done! Brought tears to my eyes. Especially the part about Ginny. Ahhh... But some magic survives...
However once again your beta has slipped up. I believe Harry wanted to avoid a crowd, not a crown. Just one example.
Wonderfully well done. Masterful story telling.
Date: 01/23/07 Title: Chapter 47: Epilogue
Excellent story. Thoroughly enjoyed it. And no, there was no 'wading' at any time. You kept up the pace of the story even in the necessarily technical or explanitory sections. I was glad to see that Galen and Minerva were able to make a life for themselves. All in all an excellent story with my favourite of all endings, a happy one.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. S.
Date: 08/02/06 Title: Chapter 40: Investigations
Chilling ending! OOOH, Scrimgour the ultimate villian. Sometimes the secret villian is the worst.
This is up to the usual standards. Too bad It'll never be published beyond this venue. Truely a shame.
Very much looking forward to the coming chapters
Date: 11/02/06 Title: Chapter 45: Filiolus Ex Preteritus
Wow! This is going to want reading several times to understand everything packed into it. Facinating. Stefan is a jerk. Then again, we always knew that about him.
Outstanding.
Author's Response: Thank you. S.
Date: 06/22/06 Title: Chapter 38: What Everyone Can Now See
Wow! I mean, WOW! So the cat's really out of the bag. I mean, really out! But one thing I don't understand; what happened to the portrait in the Prime Minister's office? Have the portraits been silenced as well? If PM Thompson wanted to speak with Scrimgour, would'nt he have just yelled at the portrait? Also, the M.O.M. is underground. It's St. Mungo's that's above ground. It's in an old department Store. The idea was that a hospital would'nt be healthy underground.
Then again...
You didn't really mention what Kingsley actually saw... yet.
Please forgive my confusion. Your story is spellbindingly (appropriate) excellent. I can't wait for the next chapter
Yours,
Godric
Author's Response: Yes, I forgot about that... just pretend. S.
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 2: Awakening
Excellent! Nice wry humor. I liked the slow buildup. And yet what about the stranger on the tow path???? Nice bit of mistery.
Author's Response: Thanks. S.
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 1: Damage Assessment
I suppose saying that I stayed up all night to finish this would be going a bit over the top? Oh well, said it anyway. Your imagery was outstanding. The story well thought out and played well. Your dialog I found less satisfying. Obviously the punctiuation and most of the spelling were fine. It's just people don't use uncontracted words much. It sounds too formal and stilted. cannot becomes can't, do not becomes don't etc. Also there were a number of words that just didn't fit. I wish it was possible to be more specific, at 350 pages it's hard to. Actually there is one example, no two. to instead of too, won instead of one, there instead of their. Just because the spell check passes it... well I'm sure you get the drift.
I don't mean to nit-pick, it's just with this excellent of a work that's all that's left. Did I say excellent... I meant SUPERB!!
Sorry, that was a little over the top. Kind of like telling you I stayed up all night reading this...
Godric
Author's Response: I lost A LOT of sleep writing this monster back in August, 2005, so it\'s only appropriate you lose sleep reading it! Just kidding, glad you\'re enjoying the story. S.
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 5: Steak Knives and Shotguns
I was really delighted with this chapter. It was wonderful laughing at Ron as a chip off the old block. Was that a cliche'? Oops, sorry. It fits. The knife thing... just could'nt swallow it.
Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story, Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution, too. S.
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 4: Opportunities
oo oo oo nice twist at the end! Loved it!
Godric
Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story: Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution. S.
Date: 05/14/06 Title: Chapter 33: Home Again
awww!!!! (yells screams beats hands and feet on floor in complete infantile tantrum) That can't be it, it just cant!
Oops, sorry!
I love the line:
Ginny was tired of everyone's preoccupation with sex...
I could'nt agree more.
In one or more of the summaries you mentioned that the sex scenes were toned down. Good. Frankly, we have way too much of it. Sometimes it's best to be left to the readers imaginations. Have you forgotten that Harry is Brittish? They (dare I say we?) say 'Mum' for the most part. Mom is more an American way of saying the same thing. See what I mean? Nothing substantial to complain about just nitpickey stuff.
WONDERFUL! Can't wait for the next chapter! HURRY UP WILLYA?
Oops, sorry. Patience is'nt my strong suit.
Hope to see your name on the users list soon!!
Godric
Author's Response: Thank you. Please check out my other story: Harry Potter and the Forgotten Solution. S.