. : She was Lo, plain Lo, in the morning, standing four feet ten in one sock. She was Lola in slacks. She was Dolly at school. She was Dolores on the dotted line... but in my arms she was always Lolita. : .
Note:
Sadly, I am currently not beta-ing. Algebra II has killed me, and my free time. During the summer, I will try again.
My apologies,
Lola
well ... i must admit. you may have converted me completely. my hr/r ship has sunk. d/hr has risen.
you're quite a funny writer, and the constant talk of the heir had me giggling. your use of angst is brilliant. suspense is absolutely murdering me! and hermione and draco would have darling children, wouldn't they?
i always imagined draco as a fine dancer. skilled. talented. you make him divine.
and the draco/hermione fluff is lovely. goodness, what a fangirl you've made of me!
*favourited
love,
lola
ps- please do update quickly!
arghhh! nice cliffie~! :)
i was super-excited, because i thought that there was another chapter, but alas... not validated yet. glad to see that you've written it, yet, i do want to know what's going to happen. quite badly, in fact.
i think i've said this before, but you've made a draco/hermione shipper out of me. i'm quite enjoying my new fandom. :D
now, i'm off to finish working out, then i'm off to see if you've published any more fics.
until the next chapter,
liz
Hello-- I remember you. You were my beta, once upon a year ago! Well, darling, I must say that I loved the fic. It was very bittersweet.
Lucius/Narcissa/Severus triangles are my favorite, but usually, Severus and Narcissa end up together. :] So, on to the text, yes?
I really loved how you characterized Snape as the soothing, psychiatrist type. When the first go the Spinner's End and Lucius jumps on the green couch, I imagined him with an ice pack on his head, divulging all his problems to Snape with the latter listened and nodded, wore glasses, and wrote things down on a notepad.
While we're on the note of characters, both Lucius and Narcissa were well-developed, as well. Even though she appeared only once, Cissy left a lasting impression, and Lucius was so reluctantly in love.
Or he turned out to be that way.
It's such a compact little tale. Like a soap opera condensed into three thousand words (only with a better script).
You know, it actually reminded me of Jane Austen, a little. All the actions begins, takes places, and ends in dialogue, which is tricky, especially for a slash fic. Most slashes I've read tend to be too trashy, hence they lose any real significance. Yours was quite good though. Not trashy. Just very turbulent and messy relationship stuff. Which makes for the very best fics, of course.
My favorite line was, "'But I suppose it's perfectly fine for you to live a double life.' Lucius' words fell on dead air and Severus froze, refusing to look at him. Severus stood up and walked to the window as Lucius stared down at his hands, realizing how cruel he truly could be. "
I think it really illustrates their relationship quite well. Even through all of Snape's talking, it still isn't perfect. Lucius' and Severus' different personalities stand out in this passage.
Overall-- Need you even ask? I loved it! But then, you being such a good beta, it isn't any wonder that you are a talented writer, as well.
Until next time,
Lo
Author's Response: Do I even need to say... You just made my day. And I\'m not even joking. <3 Personally, this story is my favorite one I\'ve ever written, and I get quite excited about it! I really hate trashy slash fics (or any trashy romance, really), but I like to portray slash as something more than smut. I think it\'s an insult and a horrible over-simplification to portray same-sex relationships as purely physical. And I thought the dynamic between Lucius and Severus was just perfect for that. What fascinating characters! *squee* Ah, I\'m nothing but a fangirl. :P Hehe, well, I\'ll say it again, because I\'m grinning ear to ear: Thank you SO much for the kind review! I\'m so happy now, and after a long and stressful day, this was just what I needed and so much more. Love ya! -Brandi
Bravo, quite well done. There's just so many things that I loved. Let's get started, shall we?
So... this is the first Andromeda/Ted fic I've read in its entirety. I was browsing through the Other Pairing section, thought I'd give it a try. Very glad I did. Andromeda is definitely the quirky Black sister, isn't she? Somehow, I always think of her as very New Age, organic, hippie-esque, running scantily clad through fields with flowing long chestnut hair. Your Andromeda was very different from my mental image, needless to say. While at first I didn't like her, she grew on me. In fact, she reminds me a bit of Elphaba from Wicked. Anyway, you created Andromeda's character very well. Particularly good lines--
"Andromeda stood up. “I’m going back to the dorm. I have a headache.” She rushed off, with only a swift, apologetic glance at the boy. His sombre expression made her stomach twist. He probably thought she was as prejudiced as the rest of her friends."
Very good. At first, she was too akin to Bella for me, with the black hair and such, but her attitudes toward Muggle-borns (obviously) are different from her sister's as demonstrated here. She's still very much a Black-- concerned with outward appearances and propriety. Yet, that's where she ends up growing the most. I don't think the Andromeda of the beginning of the story would have attacked Ted and "snogged him silly" behind a statue. Another of my favorite lines, by the way. Made me smile. :]
There's something about Mary... I think it was her name. I was absolutely convinced Mary Sullivan was an author or the main character of The Secret Garden or something, and I was so intrigued that I googled it. Turns out she's a victim of the (famous?) Boston Strangler. *shrug*
She seems like a blonde, doesn't she? Sad, how blondes are ever so often cast as meanies or space cadets. *covers hair* In this instance, however, I liked her as a blonde. Well, I didn't like her... but her hair suited her well.
Ted... we know so little about him. You made him three-dimensional. I love how he cleans his teeth but can't tuck in his shirt. Ted being so different from the Blacks explained how Andromeda could ever fall for him, an essential question to answer when writing Andromeda/Ted, I should think.
The only thing I really didn't like was the title. I'm not really much of an Avril fan, not of her new CD, anyhow. I think she writes music well, but I don't like her voice. However, the little story at the end explained it, so everything turns out quite nicely.
Write on, my friend. Write on!
Lola
Author's Response: I\'ve never read Wicked, but you make me want to! :)
Thank you so much for a review that rocks more than Avril ever could! :D
Ever read Remus and Tonks? I have a (now unofficial) series of stories in which Andromeda is portrayed as cool and calm, with a dry, sometimes pointed wit, but she loves her husband and daughter. I always get an Angelica Houston as Morticia Adams feel for her, because of her Mona Lisa smile and Black humor, heh.
Songs do inspire me, absolutely. I have a Lucius/Narcissa story White Wedding that goes beyond \'hey, little sister,\' if you\'d ever like to read more. :D