So, I have an author's page. Even though I'm not an official author yet. Working on my first fic. Honestly, it's cool, can't wait to get it up on the site.
Slytherins Rock! So much! Ye-ah!
I WANT SAUSAGES!” he told everyone in the Great Hall. He climbed up onto the wooden bench. “WHY ARE THERE NO SAUSAGES? I FIGHT VOLDEMORT, WHO YOU ARE ALL SO SCARED OF, SO WHY CAN’T I GET THE BREAKFAST OPTIONS I WANT? I AM SO ANGRY!”
Bloody hilarious!
Author's Response: Yes, that seems to be the favourite line in the story. :) I\'m glad you think it\'s so funny.
I have never read a Cedric-centric story before, as, honestly, he's really not my favorite character. I really liked him in this fic though, because you could understand him and his thoughts. It really brings closer to his death, that you don't get from Harry's POV. I love that he realizes that he is going to die. I mean, I don't love that he is going to die, but that part was so powerful! In GOF, it just seemed so instantanious, and that was part of the horror, but here it fill it out to understanding, not just horror. Bonus Points for the original idea!
The one thing I would have liked a bit diffrent, was a longer bit when he first comes out of Voldemort's wand. I think there could have been a lot more emotion there, but overall I really liked it.
Author's Response: *sputtergasp* Cedric not your favorite character? How could you? lol, my best friend doesn\'t like him either; I\'ve grown used to it! Anyway, thank you so much for the lovely review! I\'m glad that you thought it was powerful. That\'s sort of what I was going for. And thank you for the con-crit! Sorry I was short on emotion in that one part. I\'ll try add more to it. Thanks again!
I adore the idea. Personally, Peter is not my favorite character. Is he anyone's? But, I love the way you describe his life and phases and motivations through color. It was quite brillant. How did those bunnies ever come up to plot it?
Author's Response: Honestly, he\'s not any where near any of my favourite characters, but he most definantly is one of my favourites to write. Personally, I think a lot of people misinterpret his personality. You\'d have to ask my muse about how I stumbled upon my bunny, because I\'m completely clueless of how the thought even entered my mind.
I like the idea, and both characters seem well characterized. What I don't like is the idea of reading to him at bedtime. It seems like it would be an unhealthy relationship is one was the "mother" figure. He would be dating his mom! Sorry, I have a tendency to overanalyze using pyschology. Otherwise it seems good. And the fact that is a SS/HR fic that actually fits with the already written canon is amazing!
Author's Response: Don\'t worry, Jeudi, Snape\'s going to have a few thoughts along those lines himself, very soon. My other shippy/slashy fic refers to Freud, why shouldn\'t this one... *evil grin* For now, though, the take-home point was that he\'d agree to ANYTHING that could get \"remedial Potions\" with Potter over with.
"Oh, Dolores, trust me. He understands perfectly"
Hilarious, but also quite in character for Snape. I loved it. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks! It was fun, trying to picture what Snape would say if he had committed to this idea of fooling Umbridge. A catty Snape is just too funny! I may have to get the two of them together for another conversation at some point. But in about 4 chapters, Lucius is going to be dropping by... ;P
Humph. I like it as a guilty pleasure, but I can't help but feel that Hermione is wildly OC. I can see her as having an inner strength and inner hither-to un-released sexuality, but I just can't imagine her being so very free with Snape. I feel like even if she was attracted to him that it would take longer for her to trust him, and for her to be able to act so open with him.
Good work, though, it's a fun read.
Author's Response: Well, I think of it this way: For one, we\'ve never seen Hermione alone with Viktor or anyone else in the boudoir, so in my mind, that part of her character hasn\'t been defined so anything\'s allowed. *wink*. Next, this is the gal that reads the whole textbook and memorizes it before class starts--if she set her sights on Snape, I think she\'d behave with the same singlemindedness, which is why I see her as being not only open, but downright pushy with him. Now, it may well be that she\'s come to trust him too quickly--it\'s only been a couple of months, after all--but I\'ll just point out that when we\'ve heard Snape\'s secret thoughts, he\'s said \"I love you,\" but SHE hasn\'t. Heh heh heh. They don\'t necessarily have the same goals here...*evil grin*
I really like you tackle both Sirius and Regulus. I've read some other fics that depict the moment Sirius leaves, but this one feels unique with the Regulus parts.
At first I disagreed with your characterization of Regulus. I didn't believe that he really felt like Sirius and just held it in, but by the end, I saw a new side to him, and it made sense. I like the characterisation of Regulus as like Sirius, but less reckless, and more ambitious. He kind of reminds me of Snape here.
I also really like the tie in of "through the eyes of an onlooker" throughout the story, and how Sirius turns into an onlooker in the end. It really gives you empathy for Regulus that a lot of people miss.
Author's Response: Thanks! I tried to make it so that it changed your perception of Regulus, yet kept him in character as well. I\'m glad you enjoyed it.
I love that we see a similar scene in canon, but we get an entirely diffrent perspective on it. I think Snape is so misunderstood. Not just by people that hate him, but also by people that like him as a leather-pants-wearing sex god. I think here, as in all your Snapefics, you characterize him perfectly as I imagine him. I love the comparison in the last letter between Snape and Harry. It think it shows understanding of how you can like both characters instead of chosing one and hating the other. Erm....Yay? Yay!
Author's Response: \'Leather-pants-wearing sex god\" -- thanks for a very hearty laugh! He just doesn\'t seem the leather type, does he? Silk, now, maybe. Thanks for the review! I\'m glad to hear my take on Severus has followers.
My only complaint is that, “Miss Granger, the only thing I care to come to terms with at the moment is my scotch. If you would be so kind…” and several other little Snape lines sound a bit OOC. Otherwise, 'tis interesting.
Author's Response: I\'m curious to know why you thought that line and what other lines were OOC. I try very hard (very hard) to keep Severus IC. There are several people who I go to to get opinions on his character and I like to think I do a pretty good job writing him. Anything you could tell me to improve on him would be greatly appreciated. Thanks for taking the time to review!
Written for the Summer Weddings Challenge by Cruciatus Love of Slytherin.
Wow, I really liked this look in to Tom and Merope's life. I think it's right how you characterized Tom as feeling hesitant, but also unable to control his actions. I can only imagine what was going on in Ron's mind when he was asking for Romilda Vane... Anyway, I love how he is so confused, but seems so sure on the outside. At the same time as feeling very sorry for Tom, you also see why Merope did it. Another amazing look into Merops Gaunt's life!
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m a huge fan of Merope, and I also love telling the story through Tom\'s eyes. You\'ll see the second and last chapter of this up on MNFF soon.