Hello loves, I'm Allie! You've obviously reached this page through grave error or through curiosity. I would urge you to turn back now, but unfortunately, it seems to be too late. =)
About me: I am a writer and an avid reader here on MNFF and other various sites as well. I am an ex-beta reader, drabbler, artist, duelist, TWSer, SBBCer, and my recent project is running the Gryffindor Review Crew with my fellow crewbee Claire so please, take pity on a poor author and leave a review. Updates may be slow in coming because SOMEONE deleted all my notes for my stories off my computer and plot lines has been lost and tangled hopelessly beyond repair. However, there may be some poetry and one-shots headed your way soon.
You can find me on the boards under the pen name dragonwings, so give me a PM if you want to talk!
Please read and most importantly, REVIEW! I love reviews, don't you? I get such a warm, fuzzy feeling inside. =)
This is such an adorable story! I love the whole Cinderella parody you have going on and I would write more, but I'm insanely tired! The only real nit-pick I have is the change of views in the beginning of this chapter. It switches very suddenly from Draco to Ginny and back and even entangles the two once which makes for choppy reading and a slightly confuzzled reader. Other than that--great job!
Wow. This is story is incredible! Usually, I'm disappointed after reading school assignments because they usually sound a little forced, but this was phenomenal!
Your imagery, for one, was great:
Lucius Malfoy let the water flow along the length of his body, the natural coolness of it relaxing his worn muscles, rejuvenating him for another deep dive. He lay on his back, barely moving his arms to propel himself slowly through the water. In one hand he held tight to the bridle he had purchased years ago at Borgin and Burkes. It had always been his dream to capture the illusive creature that lived deep below where he now floated. He had reckoned that the creature was aware that another magical being was stalking it, and was therefore being cautious. That paragraph I felt, just set the mood for the entire story. There's this illusion of calm, but he's actually hunting, something that I think suits Mr. Malfoy very well. Which brings me to my next point of your characterization.
I thought that you really hit Lucius' personality well--
I always imagined him as a sort of slightly more dangerous and a bit stronger than his son Draco because Draco was absolutely molly-coddled. But, in essence, they are the same because the make the same, misfortune mistakes of youth that any hot-headed guy would. Look--some girl wants to have sex with me! How could this be bad at all!? *rolls eyes* His older self would of course scorn his younger, which was perfect, but what struck me as odd was the complete lack of nostalgia. Most people when they grow older remember their mistakes with some sort of soft, nostalgia at maybe their foolishness or youthfulness. Lucius here feels nothing which I guess is IC for him, but I was still a bit surprised at his coldness.
One thing I did wonder--whoever is Miss Lee Bodkins? An extra-maritial affair maybe? =P
Your story flows wonderfully and I really have nothing to critique. I think that you a wonderful job on your prompt and that you definitely deserve full points for this! Good job!
Author's Response: It was supposed to be a framing device, well, sort of! But yea, an affair type thing!
Sometimes it's a form of love just to talk to somebody that you have nothing in common with and still be fascinated by their presence.
~David Byrne
On the edge of discovering a long lost document...
On the edge of the greatest adventure of their lives...
On the edge of finding themselves....
They would find each other...
In The Danger That Awaits.
Sirius Black is called for his first mission for the Order of the Phoenix, but he's going to need a little help. Racing Death Eaters on the search for a long lost ancient text, he not only finds himself in danger, but also falling in love.
This is The Marauding Cupcake and hermybabay82 of Gryffindor for the Gauntlet's sixth run.
Second Place Winner in the Gauntlet’s Sixth Run!Only one of the later chapters earns us the higher rating and we'll give you fair warning when it comes up. >.<
Lol and you were worried about corrupting my innocence if I read this! *snickers*
But really, Michelle, this is amazing!!! Not only does it have Sirius *drools* but I'm glad that you gave quiet Marlene McKinnon a good chance to get with the guy! You and Stacy did a marvelous job! And now, back to the reading...
Awwww!!! Michelle!!! Cute and fluffy much! The ending was perfect--a sad mix of reality and death, but followed up with a chaser of the afterlife. *giggles* You have not yet "corrupted" my innocent mind yet, my lovely, although you certainly did try with that chappie!!
The both of you did a marvelous job with this one!! Good work!
~Allie
Author's Response: Honestly! :D Well, cute and fluffy are what we do. If I'm the 'Queen of Fluff', Stacy is definitely my Princess! Truthfully, I was pretty certain you were corrupted long before I knew you! >.< although, I did give my effort....~M.