Marvolous! I think that's very creative, since most people assume that it's all real. I liked how everything was as J. K. says it was/going to be, except for there's no Voldemort. Especially the Mauraders acting mature-ish around Harry and Lily, and very childish around Snape.

Also, I did notice the "scar" thing. But it seemed to have a little awkward placing. Overall, I really loved this!

Author's Response: Thank you!

I really like the style of writing you use, or rather, the organization style. Obviously I also like your writing style, but I’m also commenting on the organization. I’m not sure what it’s called, but it is highly affective. Also, the repeated phrase “No one knew and no one guessed what Peter kept suppressed” was not only affective conveying the overall feel of the fic, but in emphasizing that Peter stayed strong, and stayed the man they all thought he was. Personally, I really enjoyed reading about Peter staying good, although when reading about Harry’s thoughts, I felt bad for Peter. There is just something about an ungrateful child that irks me . . . but never mind. Once more, I liked this piece a lot and will probably go forth and read more of your work.

Uh oh! Oh my what will happen?

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Kathleen

Author's Response: *giggles* Thank you for your extremely helpful and constructive review, Kathleen! Seriously, thank you sooo much for taking the time to review *huggles*.

Aww, that's very sweet. I like how, towards the end, the "gifts" started to get more hinted towards the fact that she liked him. However, it would have been a little easier to read if the beginning "gifts" weren't so long. I mean, I understand that they are necessary for the full effect, but it's a little difficult to say outloud.

Yes, I did sing it. Yes, I did receive weird looks. And, yes, I really liked this poem :D

Kate -> Knight of the Turnip Table

Oh! Poor Hermione! She’s so confused, and, like always, is putting the well being of her friends and the Wizarding world ahead of herself. It is such typical Hermione that it’s ridiculous, and, again, I feel that you have her characterization down pat.

Now, to move on, I love the way you describe Remus’ transformation! From his point of view, we don’t see the change into a wolf’s body. No, instead we see the loss of control of actions and thoughts, which actually leads us to be able to really see his affection for Jane/Hermione better. Also, there are no details of the destruction he causes or anything. No, instead there are the descriptions of what happens before a full moon, during the transformation, and how he feels afterwards.

It’s written in a perfectly lovely way, and I adore your writing style.

Kate

“As she, Remus, and Sirius entered the Potters’ residence, she could not keep her eyes off the mirror image of her best friend.”

This beginning this chapter slightly bugs me. I mean, hasn’t she heard people comment on how alike they are before now? However, I feel like it redeems itself by introducing, a few paragraphs later, the shippiness (“This is Jane Conway, James,” interrupted Remus, a faint pink tinge appearing on his cheeks).

I think that Chapter 5 gives us the necessary background information that we need to know, like the tightness of the Mauraders, even out of school, and the lack of Peter’s presence. Lei works that in, if you notice, with James’ worried looks out of the house and Lily’s, “Oh, James, Peter probably has other business to attend to, so let’s just eat and have fun.” Not only does this hint towards Peter’s betrayal, but it shows how that even though Lily and James are young parents, they are still young adults, and still like to have fun with their friends when Harry is asleep.

Also, I really liked the description of when Harry’s nursery. It’s just a little thing, but so often I read baby!fics where there are all of these modern/Muggle inventions in the nursery. While there is a crib and a mobile, the mobile is of Quidditch and the crib has “intricately carved wooden railings.” And when Hermione walks in, she notices that a single torch burned next to the crib. These little things just made me like the chapter all that much more 

I don’t know how I felt about the Remus/Tonks scene. I felt bad for both of them; Tonks, because she mistakenly believes that Remus is in love with her, and Remus, because he is in love with Hermione and knows that at that very moment she is falling in love with him in the past. I dislike how Remus is kind of leading Tonks on, but really am starting to like Remus/Hermione.

Kate

I have to say, I love the way you flash in between 1997, where Hermione left, and 1980, where she is. It’s fantastic, and gives us the chance to get a full understanding of the situation.

Also, I’ve said this before and I’ll say it again, I feel that you are a master at characterization. First, with the Harry and Ron, I love the way you write them. They automatically assume that life and Hermione will be the same once she gets back; they don’t assume that the adventures she is undertaking/had undertaken (depending on how you look at it) will change and affect her in any way.

Your characterization of Remus is so refreshing! Instead of him being the so-serious guy I’ve read way too many times before, he’s funny, charming, sweet, and serious when the time calls for it, like everyone is.

I just love your writing, and really hope that you update soon so that once the SBBC has finished discussing this I can keep reading it.

Kate

Oh my goodness. Where has she heard Caradoc Dearborn before? I really want to know that, because I have a feeling it will be instrumental to the plot!

Anyways. I feel that I must tell you how much I adore your characterizations of James and Sirius! It is so nice to be able to read about James and Sirius still being a bit wild, although I must say, I do feel bad for Remus and Hermione. It’s not their fault that they decided to get very drunk and then rant about the two of them! Although, I have to wonder if, when sober, James and Sirius think that Remus and Jane/Hermione should be a couple, or if it’s just their interpretation of what Remus and Jane/Hermione were doing together upstairs when James arrived to tell them about his party.

Now that I think about it, I believe that I have played Clair De Lune on the piano. I’m pretty sure that I have, actually.

Kate


Author's Response: Heehee, thank you so much for all your reviews! Caradoc Dearborn was a member of the very first Order of the Phoenix. He disappeared six months after the Order was founded.

I want to start this review with a disclaimer: I normally don't read Lily/James or Marauder era fics because of the fact that they are usually so ridden with cliches. We don't know a lot of what happened during that time, so what happens is many writers end up using the same type of scenarios. Yet, you didn't, and that really made it enjoyable to read. Instead of Lily all of a sudden realizing one day that she likes James, she admits that she should have realized it when she first met him. That, and the fact that James calls her a nickname other than "Lils," are two examples of why I love this fic. They are two examples of situations where other authors use cliches, but you don't.

Personally, though, I feel that this fic could have been longer and therefore even better. At the end, I'm a little confused. Did she really fall at James' feet, or is it a metaphor? And if she did fall, did she faint, or what? That's a little confusing for me. Also, where have her friends gone? Have they snuck off, or are they just being ignored?

Overall, I really enjoyed this fic, and feel that you've done a great job!

Kate

Sitting, Waiting, Wishing. . .perfect title, perfect song! You really are a genius!

Kate

Author's Response: It isn\'t true, but it\'s nice of you to say, and reminds me of a cartoon I saw part of the other day where this kid said he knew he was a genius when he was 5, and that to keep it from ruining his life, he sabotaged himself with sugar and cartoons, LOL. Maybe I\'ll use that line but switch it to \'chocolate and romance novels\'. :D