That was absolutely masterful. Words seem to just flow out of you! The imagery is so real and alive...I feel like I'm there.
Magnificent job. I really enjoyed this,
This is the first piece I've read by you, and I was in awe. You make the characters so connected with each other, and your way with words is perfect. This was beautiful. I can't wait to read the rest of your works.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the other stories. There are quiet a few with Maeve and Snape.
"I'm no Ravenclaw, but I finally learnt to take no for an answer." When James stops asking Lily out, she tells him that's not Quidditch!
Lily and James are my OTP, so when I saw this I had to stop and read it. You did a wonderful job characterizing James. His change from being Prank!James to being Mature!James was smooth and natural. Most writers (including me) have a difficulty making the transition seem realistic. Yet, even though James has matured, he didn't lose his playful, teaser side. So I think you did a wonderful job with James and keeping him natural and balanced.
Lily was beautiful. I love how you showed her spunky, clever side but you kept her in character. Lily isn't one to go jumping James' bones in public but she is one to show her feelings and you did a wonderful job here! I'm glad you really showed her thoughts on James and her disapointment with him. She seemed really in tune and natural. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'ve got a Marauder Era fic in the General cat, Semi Charmed Life that\'s a Sirius romance with a James and Lily subplot you might like, if you ever have a rainy day and want something new to read. Thanks again for reading this story! : )
Okay, I have to leave a review. I stumbled upon this and when I read about Nessa talking about a Puerto Rican guy she met in Miami that did it for me. I'm hooked. *is a proud Puerto Rican*
Your characterization with Nessa is great! Hispanics are loud to the point of obnoxiousness and always speak their mind. I'm really glad you added this to your fics, it gives it a hint of uniqueness. Many authors are afraid to add different ethnicities to thiers, but I believe it just adds flavour!
Great Job!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Okay, I have to leave a review. I stumbled upon this and when I read about Nessa talking about a Puerto Rican guy she met in Miami that did it for me. I'm hooked. *is a proud Puerto Rican*
Your characterization with Nessa is great! Hispanics are loud to the point of obnoxiousness and always speak their mind. I'm really glad you added this to your fics, it gives it a hint of uniqueness. Many authors are afraid to add different ethnicities to thiers, but I believe it just adds flavour!
Great Job
Author's Response: Yay!!!! A fellow hispanic! *huggles* I\'m from Venezuela. I had to had a south American in my fic, at least one, and you\'re right about the being loud thing. hehe. Thank you for the review!!!
Written as a Term Challenge: Holidays Abroad submission for Slytherin.
I love how you began this! The use of the onomatopoeas (sp?) has a great effect and makes the scene more realistic and tanglible. Great job!
Hee, I really like how you portray Tom. My favorite line is when Merope invites him in and he says, "NO!" Every time I read that I giggle. :D
Great job, little sister!
Author's Response: Thanks, big sis. I rather like the moments when Merope freaks out as well. *giggle*
Another wonderful addition to Amortentia.
Great touch with adding the Romanian in there. I really like the uniqueness it gave to this. You don't see many fics with Romanian in them!
You're description of Amortentia and its effects onnot only Tom but Merope as well are wonderful. Very good job!
Author's Response: Thanks, it took me forever to find a traslator for those lines. I\'m glad you liked them.
Follow Barty as he takes his steps through the Quidditch World Cup in GoF. What parts of the story did you miss while reading from Harry's point of view? This is the side of the story that you really care about.
You've done it again! You always see the most in events, and you see them from a new perspective. This is one of those time, and you did a brilliant job!
Your characterization with Barty Jr. was great! I never imagined him like that but it clicked.
Spectacular!
Author's Response: Thanks, Mari. I rather like Barty Crouch Jr\'s character as well, and I wish that he was written more often. Thanks for the review!
Just showing some support!
You know how much I love this story!
Keep up the good work; you always do!
-- Mari
Author's Response: -attackles teh Mari- Thank you, darling!
Hey TF! Okay, let me say one thing before I do anything else...I don't read slash at all, but this was beautiful. Everything was so sweet and flowing; it felt natural. Kudos on your wonderful style! This is a unique pairing and I'm glad you're not a afraid to write it! Wonderful job!
Author's Response: Ooh, thanks, Mari! That\'s so sweet. I\'m glad you liked it! Thanks for the review. :)
That was so emotional; I really liked it! I'm not really a sad ending girl, but I think you pulled this one off masterfully. Wonderful job, and don't write anymore! It's perfect as is! :] *dodges pointy objects being thrown from other reviewers*
Author's Response: Thanks Mari! That really means a lot. :D! Thanks!
I really enjoyed this piece. You know that Sirius is my favorite character and you did a very good job of portraying his relationship with Regulus (whom I also love).
There just some small spelling errors, but they weren't big. Just thought I'd mention it, but I'm just being nit-picky.
Great! I loved it.
Author's Response: hehe, thanks. I\'m glad to hear that I didn\'t butcher your favourite character for you.
I am not worthy! Rachel, you are spectacular! This piece is beautiful, touching, lovely, better than I could have ever imagined...perfect.
I think this is the first fic I've read of yours. You have an amazing writing style, it's beautiful and flowing. Keep it up!
Thank you so much. --Mari
Author's Response: Of course you\'re worthy, Mari! If you weren\'t, I would have said \'to hell with this project!\' and gone and watched Gilmore Girls reruns instead of working frantically to turn it in on time! *giggles* I really can\'t tell you how happy I am that you enjoyed it! Did I fulfill the prompt okay? Because, basically, I thought of a plot, wrote it, then chose which one of the possible prompts it best seemed to fit! *dies laughing* Shows how organized I am. Thanks for the praise and review! *endless ♥ s*
So I'm not usually a big mystery fan (or a big fan of OC's for that matter) but since you're writing this and so far it's acutally really good, I'll keep reading. =)
I really enjoyed how Ginny's surroundings and the murderer. I felt like it was me who was being held and threatened.
Oh and sadness that Parvati had to die, but truly that girl annoyed me just as much as Lavender. >.< Gah.
So great job. You've got me hooked. =)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad I got you hooked on a fic that you normally wouldn\'t read! I agree, Parvati was very annoying just like Lavender!
~Lexi~