Very Nice...
Harry's ALIVE, thats great, I hope. Ill give you a 10 this time.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! But just because he's not in the grave doesn't mean he's alive ...
Well, I read the capter, but skipped through the nasty bit. I gathered enough afterwards to realize that Gedrath was yelling 'kill me' and Tonks died. Cool. I hope the one bit being skipped doesn't do too much damage. I'll give it a 10/10
Hm, you're not writing ahead, are you? The use of Inferi is nice.
The problem with this is the bad spelling. Watch your spelling next time.
I'll give you a 7/10
Author's Response: Yes. It is quite annoying as I have a laptop now that doesn't have spell check, which is why it is easy for me to get things wrong. I think I'll probably have to find a Beta somewhere sometime.
Yes, I like the idea of Inferi, they are incredibly dark and suited the mood of the story. Thanks for the review, I'll take the spelling into acount for next time. :)
~Ermine the One
Here is what I think...
Since we both read HBP you'll understand, (I wont put any spoilers though, in case someone unwary read this).
I think you should keep the stories seperate.
SPOILER
As for the characater who died and...well...the one who betrayed them. It's very easy to undo what happened, except for the death. But for the betrayal...elementary.
Keep the stories seperate, because it might get confusing if you make it all into one.
“Colin,” Jessica said, “I haven’t spoken with you since I was 10. I haven’t spoken with Dennis in three years either. You two used to be my best friends. What kind of school do you two go to that it is so important to completely abduct you from this world?”
Colin smiled and looked round the corner to make sure her parents were occupied. “Does your room still have a working lock?” he asked.
“You perverted little…” Jessica yelled hitting his arm several times.
“No,” Colin hushed her. “It’s a secret. I need to make sure your parents can’t overhear what I’m about to tell you. So…?”
I wouldn't mind if you could put down a review. Also, I have an idea for a sequel, and I'd like to know if anyone would be interested in one. Thanks!
It's a good story. The problem is its one-shot. I think you SHOULD make a sequel. How old is Colin and Jessica now? Where did Dennis go? (OMG, if he died, heads will roll).
10/10
Author's Response: Um... I don't think there was any indication that Dennis was anywhere but with his parents. No, he's not dead. And there is a sequel, it's on my Fanfiction.net site.
As promised, here's my review.
Poor Snape. One kiss in his entire life. How can he stand living with the fat that his first kiss was embarassing.
Author's Response: Do you mean fact? ;) He probably doesn't live well with it, but I doubt his first kiss is on his mind at all times, you know? Considering the fact that he's on the run and sorting out his current life. But don't be suprised if Kathryn and Snape appear in another fiction.
Am I right in guessing that the Light One is Merlin? Am I also right in guessing that Merlin is the White Dragon? Your story reminds me... of another... 10/10
Author's Response: Hey ;)...right on one....sort of on the other...Thanks for all your reviews, you've been a consistant reviewer and I just wanted to tell you I appreciate it. BTW, which story does it remind you of? I'd like to read it to make sure i'm not too close with my own. :)
--Sarakiel
Wonderful story. I like this idea of Harry teaching "Ginny's year". It's cool. It's like, totally awesome, dude.
I'll give it a 10/10
Nice. I liked the Colin/Luna relationship. It's a rare one, but they make a couple. Too bad I'm not doing it, I had other plans.
I don't think things will turn as easy as Harry expects. Eventually, he'll hate his year, especially if he catches Ginny walking after dark. A lesson: Never return to a school to teach if you know some younger students. At least not until the students graduate.
I can see it all now. 10/10 for an excellent story. By the way, I like the way you used Colin... very nice... favorite character of mine.
Great, I've been waiting to read a story like this one. I'll give it 10/10, call it good for a first fan fic.
One question though, where is my favorite character. If I get hint you killed any of the Creevey brothers, Neville, or Ernie, countless heads will roll. So, where are they all? (I have only read this chapter thus far.
OK, I read and nothing about anyone except Harry and the Weasley's came up. Will anyone besides them come?
It was a good chapter. I never thought the worm would be an animagus. You're a good writer.
8/10
Author's Response: :)...yup...stay tuned, they're still in the summer break...couple chapters ahead ;)
Thanks for the review!!